鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lặp lại từ ngữ không cần thiết và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Hãy thêm các liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên và logic hơn.

示例: Yes, I like buying trendy sneakers because they boost my confidence and complement my outfit. However, I only buy them once in a blue moon since I prefer to invest in high-quality shoes.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý phát âm và ngữ pháp, tránh lặp từ như "to be to be". Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và hoàn chỉnh hơn.

示例: To be honest, I usually buy shoes online because it is very convenient. I can compare prices and find a wider variety of colors and styles, which saves me time from going to physical stores.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể thêm một vài chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm phong phú nội dung. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

示例: To be honest, I don't have a fixed budget for shoes. I don't mind spending a lot because I believe that good shoes can take you to good places and last longer.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ như "fashioned" nên là "fashionable" và "comfort" nên là "comfortable". Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

示例: I would say I want both fashionable and comfortable shoes to go hand in hand. I cannot stand wearing something that makes me uncomfortable and causes pain in my feet, no matter how fashionable it looks.

× Yes, definitely buying trendy sneaker is my liking because they have to.

✓ Yes, definitely buying trendy sneakers is my liking because they have to.

The word 'sneaker' should be plural 'sneakers' because it refers to shoes in general, which are countable and usually plural when talking about types or categories.

× Yes, definitely buying trendy sneaker is my liking because they have to.

✓ Yes, definitely buying trendy sneakers is something I like because they boost my confidence.

The phrase 'is my liking because they have to' is awkward and ungrammatical. It should be rephrased to express liking and the effect of the sneakers clearly.

× They have me boost my confidence and compliment my outfit.

✓ They help me boost my confidence and complement my outfit.

The phrase 'have me boost' is incorrect; 'help me boost' is appropriate. Also, 'compliment' (praise) is incorrect here; the correct word is 'complement' (go well with).

× However, I just buy. I just buy them once in the blue moon because I wanna invest in high quality shoes rather than.

✓ However, I just buy them once in a blue moon because I want to invest in high-quality shoes instead.

The sentence is fragmented and incomplete. 'Once in the blue moon' should be 'once in a blue moon'. 'Wanna' is informal and should be 'want to'. 'Rather than' needs an object; 'instead' is better here.

× To be to be honest, I usually buy shoes online because it's definitely convenience for me.

✓ To be honest, I usually buy shoes online because it's definitely convenient for me.

The phrase 'to be to be honest' is redundant; 'to be honest' is correct. 'Convenience' is a noun; the adjective 'convenient' should be used here.

× I can compare prices and get the variety of colours and styles that should be much better.

✓ I can compare prices and get a variety of colours and styles, which is much better.

'The variety' is incorrect here; 'a variety' is appropriate. Also, 'that should be much better' is awkward; 'which is much better' is clearer.

× Save time for go to the physical store.

✓ It saves time compared to going to a physical store.

The original sentence lacks a subject and proper verb form. It should be a complete sentence with subject and verb.

× I don't have fixed budgets on shoes.

✓ I don't have a fixed budget for shoes.

'Budgets' should be singular 'budget' because it refers to an overall amount. Also, 'on shoes' should be 'for shoes'.

× I don't mind spending lots on shoes because I do believe that good shoes take you to good places.

✓ I don't mind spending a lot on shoes because I believe that good shoes take you to good places.

'Lots' is informal and incomplete here; 'a lot' is the correct quantifier. 'Do believe' is unnecessarily emphatic; 'believe' suffices.

× I would say I want both fashioned and comfort can go hand in hand.

✓ I would say I want both fashion and comfort to go hand in hand.

'Fashioned' is incorrect; the noun 'fashion' is appropriate. 'Comfort' is correct as a noun. The sentence structure needs 'to go hand in hand'.

× I can not stand wearing something that make me uncomfortable and cause pain in my feet no matter how much fashionable it looks.

✓ I cannot stand wearing something that makes me uncomfortable and causes pain in my feet no matter how fashionable it looks.

The verbs 'make' and 'cause' should be 'makes' and 'causes' to agree with the singular subject 'something'. 'Much fashionable' should be 'fashionable' without 'much'.