鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "I do like" and "every now and then" together. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, you can say "I like buying shoes and usually purchase a pair occasionally, but sometimes I buy impulsively if I really like them."

示例: I like buying shoes and usually purchase a pair occasionally, but sometimes I buy impulsively if I really like them.

建议: Your answer is understandable but the word choice and sentence structure can be improved for naturalness. Instead of "irrational to possess it online," say "I don't buy shoes online because the size can vary and they might not fit well." Also, avoid repeating "because."

示例: No, I don't buy shoes online because the sizes can vary a lot, and they might not fit well.

建议: Try to be more fluent and avoid filler words like "umm" and "uh." Also, clarify your answer with correct grammar and vocabulary. For example, say "I usually don't have a spending limit on shoes. For instance, last month I bought a pair that cost around 4000."

示例: I usually don't have a spending limit on shoes. For instance, last month I bought a pair that cost around 4000.

建议: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Avoid filler words and incomplete thoughts. You can say, "I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because fashionable shoes may go out of style quickly, whereas comfortable shoes can be worn regularly."

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because fashionable shoes may go out of style quickly, whereas comfortable shoes can be worn regularly.

× Usually I buy a pair of shoes every now and then.

✓ Usually I buy pairs of shoes every now and then.

The phrase 'a pair of shoes' is singular, but 'every now and then' implies multiple occasions, so plural 'pairs of shoes' is more appropriate to indicate multiple purchases over time.

× No, I don't because I think it is irrational to possess it online because the size may vary a lot and it may not fit well.

✓ No, I don't because I think it is irrational to buy them online since the size may vary a lot and they may not fit well.

The verb 'possess' is not commonly used for buying items online; 'buy' is more appropriate. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to 'shoes' (plural). The conjunction 'because' is repeated unnecessarily; replacing the second 'because' with 'since' improves clarity.

× For instance, umm uh, last month I bought a shoes which cost me around 4000 uh and uh.

✓ For instance, umm uh, last month I bought shoes which cost me around 4000 uh and uh.

The word 'shoes' is plural and should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the singular/plural mismatch.

× Well, I prefer a comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because uh, they fashionable ones might uh, the train may go back.

✓ Well, I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because, uh, the fashionable ones might, uh, go out of style.

'Shoes' is plural, so 'a' should be removed. The phrase 'the train may go back' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'go out of style' is a common expression to indicate something becoming unfashionable. Also, 'they fashionable ones' is incorrect; 'the fashionable ones' is correct.

× However comfortable ones are used in regular basis.

✓ However, comfortable ones are used on a regular basis.

The phrase 'in regular basis' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' as in 'on a regular basis'. Also, a comma after 'However' improves sentence clarity.