鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and ensure subject-verb agreement, for example, 'shoes are' instead of 'shoes is'. Also, make your sentences more concise and natural by saying 'I usually buy shoes every two to three months because they are an essential part of my outfit and I like to keep up with fashion.'

示例: Yes, I usually buy shoes every two to three months because they are an essential part of my outfit and I like to keep up with the latest fashion trends.

建议: Be careful with word order and verb forms, for example, 'I often buy shoes online'. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' properly to connect ideas smoothly. Try: 'Yes, I often buy shoes online because it saves me time and energy. Also, I have the freedom to exchange them if they don't fit well.'

示例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it saves me time and energy. Also, I can easily exchange them if they don't fit properly.

建议: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' to explain reasons clearly. For example, say: 'I usually spend between ₹4000 and ₹5000 on shoes because this mid-range price offers both comfort and style. I prefer not to buy expensive shoes.'

示例: I usually spend between ₹4000 and ₹5000 on shoes because this mid-range price offers both comfort and style. I prefer not to buy expensive shoes.

建议: Try to avoid repetition and improve fluency by using linking words like 'however' and 'for example'. Also, correct minor grammar errors. For instance: 'I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes, depending on the occasion. For example, at work, I choose comfortable shoes because I wear them for long hours. However, for parties, I prefer fashionable shoes.'

示例: I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes, depending on the occasion. For example, at work, I choose comfortable shoes because I wear them for long hours. However, for parties, I prefer fashionable shoes.

× I buy in regularly in every two to three months because I think shoes is an, uh, essential part of my outfit.

✓ I buy shoes regularly every two to three months because I think shoes are an essential part of my outfit.

The word 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'buy in regularly in every two to three months' is awkward; it should be 'buy shoes regularly every two to three months'. This corrects the singular/plural agreement and improves sentence clarity.

× So I really always looking for the fashion.

✓ So I am really always looking for fashion.

The verb 'looking' requires an auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense. Also, 'the fashion' is incorrect here; 'fashion' is uncountable and does not need 'the'.

× Yes, quite often I about bought shoes online because it saves my energy and time both.

✓ Yes, quite often I have bought shoes online because it saves me both energy and time.

The phrase 'about bought' is incorrect; it should be 'have bought' to indicate past experience. Also, 'saves my energy and time both' is better expressed as 'saves me both energy and time' for natural English.

× Additionally it provides me freedom to exchange it when it doesn't fit well.

✓ Additionally, it provides me the freedom to exchange them when they don't fit well.

The pronoun 'it' is used incorrectly for 'shoes', which is plural, so 'them' and 'they' should be used. Also, 'freedom' usually takes the article 'the' in this context.

× I usually spend 4000 to ₹5000 on shoes and this is a mid range, uh, price for shoes uh, because in this price range I get comfortable and stylish both uh, I don't want to purchase expensive shoes.

✓ I usually spend ₹4000 to ₹5000 on shoes, and this is a mid-range price for shoes because in this price range I get both comfort and style. I don't want to purchase expensive shoes.

'Mid range' should be hyphenated as 'mid-range'. Also, 'comfortable and stylish both' is awkward; 'both comfort and style' is better. The sentence is long and needs commas for clarity.

× It depends upon the on the occasion.

✓ It depends on the occasion.

The phrase 'depends upon the on the occasion' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on', and 'the' is used only once before 'occasion'.

× If I'm looking for a shoes I have to wear in party, so I will go for fashionable shoes.

✓ If I'm looking for shoes to wear at a party, I will go for fashionable shoes.

'A shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural; 'a' is singular. Also, 'in party' should be 'at a party' for correct preposition use.