鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng từ chính xác hơn. Ví dụ, 'shoe' nên là 'shoes', 'good perfect way' không tự nhiên, nên dùng 'a perfect way'. Ngoài ra, câu nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lỗi như 'elevated sensor confidence' (nên là 'elevates my confidence').

示例: Yes, I really love buying shoes because it's a perfect way for me to express my personal style. I often choose different kinds of shoes that match my office outfits every day. This definitely elevates my confidence and makes me feel outstanding.

建议: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và từ vựng chính xác hơn. Ví dụ, 'I have a boss so' không rõ nghĩa, có thể bạn muốn nói 'I have bought shoes'. 'past deal' nên là 'good deals', 'affordable rice' là 'affordable price'. Ngoài ra, câu nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes from online stores several times because they offer good deals and affordable prices. Moreover, I can compare different samples of shoes to choose the best one for me.

建议: Bạn cần sửa lỗi từ và ngữ pháp để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. 'my family brands' nên là 'familiar brands', 'bride' là 'price', 'it is worse for is' không rõ nghĩa, có thể là 'it is worth it'. Hãy cố gắng dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và mạch lạc.

示例: I think it depends on the brand and quality. I often buy shoes from familiar brands such as Adidas and Dior because I trust their quality and durability. Although the price can be quite high, I believe it is worth it.

建议: Bạn nên nối các câu lại để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp. Ví dụ, 'focus' nên là 'focuses', 'Frequently makes me out more outstanding' không đúng, nên là 'They frequently make me stand out more in public' và 'Elevate the sense of confidence' nên là 'and elevate my confidence'.

示例: Frankly speaking, I am a person who focuses on my appearance, so I prefer fashionable shoes that match my outfit. They frequently make me stand out more in public and elevate my confidence.

× Yes, I really love buying shoe because it's good perfect way for me to express my personal style and I often use different kind of shoes which match with my office every day.

✓ Yes, I really love buying shoes because it's a good, perfect way for me to express my personal style and I often use different kinds of shoes which match my office every day.

The word 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' because it refers to multiple items. 'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' when referring to more than one type. Also, 'a good perfect way' needs an article 'a' and a comma between adjectives. 'Match with my office' should be 'match my office' as 'match' does not require 'with' here.

× Yes, I really love buying shoe because it's good perfect way for me to express my personal style and I often use different kind of shoes which match with my office every day.

✓ Yes, I really love buying shoes because it's a good, perfect way for me to express my personal style and I often use different kinds of shoes which match my office every day.

The preposition 'with' after 'match' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. 'Match' is used directly with the object without 'with'.

× Yes, I have a boss so from online stores several time because it's give me a past deal and affordable rice.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes from online stores several times because they give me a good deal and affordable price.

'Boss so' is incorrect; likely meant 'bought shoes'. 'Several time' should be plural 'several times'. 'It's give' should be 'they give' to agree with plural subject 'stores'. 'Past deal' should be 'good deal'. 'Rice' is a misspelling of 'price'.

× Yes, I have a boss so from online stores several time because it's give me a past deal and affordable rice.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes from online stores several times because they give me a good deal and affordable price.

The verb 'have a boss' is incorrect; the past participle 'bought' is needed to indicate past action. 'Have bought' is present perfect tense, appropriate here.

× Moreover, I can compare different sample of shoe to choose the best 1 for me.

✓ Moreover, I can compare different samples of shoes to choose the best one for me.

'Sample' should be plural 'samples' because it refers to multiple items. 'Shoe' should be plural 'shoes'. '1' should be written as 'one' in formal writing.

× I often buy shoes from my family brands such as Adidas and Dior because I choose their quality and durability.

✓ I often buy shoes from familiar brands such as Adidas and Dior because I choose their quality and durability.

'My family brands' is incorrect; likely meant 'familiar brands'. 'Their' is correct referring to brands.

× But the bride can be quite high but it is worse for is.

✓ But the price can be quite high, but it is worth it for me.

'Bride' is a misspelling of 'price'. 'Worse' should be 'worth'. 'Is' should be 'me' to correctly refer to the speaker.

× Frequently makes me out more outstanding in public.

✓ They frequently make me stand out more in public.

The original sentence lacks a subject and proper verb structure. Adding 'They' as subject and 'stand out' as verb phrase corrects the sentence.

× Elevate the sense of confidence.

✓ They elevate my sense of confidence.

The original sentence is a fragment without a subject. Adding 'They' and 'my' completes the sentence meaningfully.