鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answerをもっと自然で簡潔にし、文法の誤りを直しましょう。例えば、"If I see shoes I like on Instagram or Facebook, I try to find them in nearby stores and buy them. If I can't find them, I order online."のように言うと良いです。

示例: Yes, I like buying new shoes quite often. If I see a pair I like on Instagram or Facebook, I try to find them in nearby stores. If I can't find them, I usually order them online.

建议: 文法と語彙を正しく使い、情報を明確に伝えましょう。例えば、"Yes, I bought a pair of Nike shoes online about two months ago. It was very convenient because I didn't have to visit the store, and the shoes arrived at my home."のように言うと良いです。

示例: Yes, I bought a pair of Nike shoes online about two months ago. It was very convenient because I didn't have to visit the store, and the shoes arrived at my home.

建议: 答えをもっと明確にし、文法の誤りを直しましょう。例えば、"I spend a large portion of my salary on shoes because I like to buy different styles to feel confident. However, I plan to control my spending in the future."のように言うと良いです。

示例: I spend a large portion of my salary on shoes because I like to buy different styles to feel confident. However, I plan to control my spending in the future.

建议: 答えをもっと自然で明確にし、文法の誤りを直しましょう。例えば、"To be honest, I usually prefer comfortable shoes because I can walk or do sports without my feet getting tired. However, I also like fashionable shoes because they look trendy."のように言うと良いです。

示例: To be honest, I usually prefer comfortable shoes because I can walk or do sports without my feet getting tired. However, I also like fashionable shoes because they look trendy.

× If I get trained over the Instagram or Facebook, I try to find it in nearby store and buy it.

✓ If I see it on Instagram or Facebook, I try to find it in a nearby store and buy it.

The phrase 'get trained over' is incorrect here. The student likely meant 'see it on' social media platforms. Also, 'nearby store' needs an article 'a' before it. Suggestion: use 'see it on Instagram or Facebook' and 'a nearby store'.

× If I get trained over the Instagram or Facebook, I try to find it in nearby store and buy it.

✓ If I see it on Instagram or Facebook, I try to find it in a nearby store and buy it.

The phrase 'the Instagram or Facebook' is incorrect because social media platform names do not need 'the'. Also, 'store' should be preceded by 'a' to indicate one store. Suggestion: remove 'the' before Instagram and Facebook, and add 'a' before 'nearby store'.

× Even if I do not get on that store, I will go and go.

✓ Even if I do not find it in that store, I will keep going.

The phrase 'get on that store' is incorrect; 'get' is not used with 'store' in this context. The student likely means 'find it in that store'. Also, 'go and go' is awkward; 'keep going' or 'keep trying' is better. Suggestion: use 'find it in that store' and 'keep going'.

× It I it just arrive on my room.

✓ It just arrives at my room.

The sentence has repetition 'It I it' which is an error. Also, 'arrive on my room' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at' for rooms or places. Suggestion: remove repeated words and use 'arrives at my room'.

× It I it just arrive on my room.

✓ It just arrives at my room.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to arrival at a place like a room. The correct preposition is 'at'. Suggestion: use 'arrives at my room'.

× Yeah, I have about a pair of shoes online.

✓ Yeah, I have bought about a pair of shoes online.

The sentence is missing the verb 'bought' to indicate past action. Also, 'a pair of shoes' is singular, so 'have' is acceptable but the verb is missing. Suggestion: add 'bought' after 'have'.

× Yeah, I have about a pair of shoes online.

✓ Yeah, I bought about a pair of shoes online.

The present perfect 'have' is incomplete without a past participle verb. The student likely means past simple 'bought'. Suggestion: use 'I bought'.

× It I it just arrive on my room.

✓ It just arrives at my room.

The repeated pronouns 'It I it' are incorrect and confusing. Only one 'It' is needed. Suggestion: remove extra pronouns.

× If I get trained over the Instagram or Facebook, I try to find it in nearby store and buy it.

✓ If I see it on Instagram or Facebook, I try to find it in a nearby store and buy it.

The preposition 'over' is incorrect with Instagram or Facebook; 'on' is correct. Also, 'the' before Instagram or Facebook is unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'see it on Instagram or Facebook'.

× I try to find it in nearby store and buy it.

✓ I try to find it in a nearby store and buy it.

The phrase 'in nearby store' is missing the article 'a'. Suggestion: add 'a' before 'nearby store'.

× I will try to order it online. I like to.

✓ I will try to order it online. I like to.

No correction needed here as the sentence is grammatically acceptable.

× When a large portion of my salary goes buying variety of so it is because I I am fond of buying different shoes and styling them in order to feel confident to myself.

✓ When a large portion of my salary goes to buying a variety of shoes, it is because I am fond of buying different shoes and styling them to feel confident.

The phrase 'goes buying variety of' is incorrect; it should be 'goes to buying a variety of shoes'. Also, 'confident to myself' is incorrect; 'confident' does not take 'to myself'. Suggestion: use 'goes to buying a variety of shoes' and 'feel confident'.

× When a large portion of my salary goes buying variety of so it is because I I am fond of buying different shoes and styling them in order to feel confident to myself.

✓ When a large portion of my salary goes to buying a variety of shoes, it is because I am fond of buying different shoes and styling them to feel confident.

The preposition 'to' is needed after 'goes' when followed by a gerund. Also, 'confident to myself' is incorrect; 'confident' is an adjective and does not require a preposition. Suggestion: use 'goes to buying' and 'feel confident'.

× No, but I I will I will eventually control it in future because I have to do a lot of work rather than.

✓ No, but I will eventually control it in the future because I have to do a lot of work.

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'rather than' which is incomplete. Suggestion: add 'the' before 'future' and remove incomplete phrase.

× No, but I I will I will eventually control it in future because I have to do a lot of work rather than.

✓ No, but I will eventually control it in the future because I have to do a lot of work.

The phrase 'in future' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'rather than' is incomplete and should be removed or completed. Suggestion: use 'in the future' and remove 'rather than'.

× To be honest I usually prefer comfortable shoes or so I could dug or do any sport so my feet don't get tired or get rested on it.

✓ To be honest, I usually prefer comfortable shoes so I can walk or do any sport without my feet getting tired or hurting.

The phrase 'or so I could dug' is incorrect; likely meant 'so I can walk'. Also, 'get rested on it' is incorrect; 'rested' is not used this way. Suggestion: use 'so I can walk' and 'without my feet getting tired or hurting'.

× To be honest I usually prefer comfortable shoes or so I could dug or do any sport so my feet don't get tired or get rested on it.

✓ To be honest, I usually prefer comfortable shoes so I can walk or do any sport without my feet getting tired or hurting.

The conjunction 'or' is incorrectly used before 'so I could dug'. It should be 'so' to indicate purpose. Suggestion: replace 'or' with 'so'.

× Well I cannot fully neglect the fashionable suit is they are very trendy and I like the looks.

✓ Well, I cannot fully neglect fashionable shoes because they are very trendy and I like the look.

The phrase 'fashionable suit is' is incorrect; likely meant 'fashionable shoes'. Also, 'the looks' should be 'the look'. Suggestion: use 'fashionable shoes' and 'the look'.