鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answerは質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。より自然で効果的な英語にするために、文法を正し、簡潔に答えましょう。例えば、"I like shoes, but I can't afford to buy them often, so I usually buy new shoes about once a year."のように。

示例: I like shoes, but I can't afford to buy them often, so I usually buy new shoes about once a year.

建议: 答えは質問に答えていますが、文法ミスや不自然な表現が多いです。より明確で自然な表現にし、接続詞を使って論理的に話しましょう。例えば、"Yes, I have bought shoes online, but I once made a mistake with the size, so I gave the shoes to my sister and decided not to buy shoes online anymore."のように。

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online, but I once made a mistake with the size, so I gave the shoes to my sister and decided not to buy shoes online anymore.

建议: 答えは不明瞭で文法的に誤りがあります。金額の表現を明確にし、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。例えば、"I usually spend about 10,000 yen a year on shoes because I don't want to spend too much."のように。

示例: I usually spend about 10,000 yen a year on shoes because I don't want to spend too much.

建议: 答えは質問に答えていますが、表現が不自然で文法ミスがあります。接続詞を使い、理由を明確に述べましょう。例えば、"I want to buy fashionable shoes, but I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me be more active."のように。

示例: I want to buy fashionable shoes, but I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me be more active.

× I like shoes but I don't afford to buy many times so I will buy.

✓ I like shoes but I can't afford to buy many, so I buy them occasionally.

The modal verb 'can' is needed to express ability or possibility. 'Don't afford' is incorrect; the correct form is 'can't afford'. Also, 'many times' is awkward here; 'many' or 'many shoes' is better. The sentence structure is adjusted for clarity.

× I usually buy new shoes once a year or so.

✓ I usually buy new shoes once a year or so.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present tense context, so no correction is needed.

× Oh yes, I have both, uh, shoes online.

✓ Oh yes, I have bought shoes online.

The phrase 'I have both, uh, shoes online' is unclear and incorrect. The correct expression is 'I have bought shoes online' to indicate past experience.

× But actually I was made, uh, I made mistake in the size of shoes and I gave it to my sister and I decided not to buy shoes online anymore.

✓ But actually, I made a mistake with the size of the shoes, so I gave them to my sister and decided not to buy shoes online anymore.

The phrase 'I was made' is incorrect; the active voice 'I made' is correct. 'Made mistake' needs an article 'a'. 'Size of shoes' should be 'size of the shoes'. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'shoes'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× I usually spend about uh 10,000 year ¥10,000 umm.

✓ I usually spend about ¥10,000 a year.

The word 'year' should be preceded by 'a' to indicate frequency. The currency symbol should be placed correctly. The sentence is simplified for clarity.

× I don't want to take much cost on shoes.

✓ I don't want to spend much on shoes.

The phrase 'take much cost' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'spend much' when referring to money.

× Yes, I decided not to over 2000 or so.

✓ Yes, I decided not to spend over ¥2,000 or so.

The sentence lacks the verb 'spend' and the currency symbol. 'Not to over 2000' is incomplete; it should be 'not to spend over ¥2,000'.

× Umm, hopefully. I want to buy, uh, fashionable shoes, but actually the shoes help uh, me to do more actively, so I tend to focus on the comfortable of the shoes.

✓ Umm, hopefully. I want to buy fashionable shoes, but actually, the shoes help me to be more active, so I tend to focus on the comfort of the shoes.

The phrase 'help me to do more actively' is incorrect; it should be 'help me to be more active'. 'The comfortable of the shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'the comfort of the shoes'. The sentence is adjusted for grammatical correctness and clarity.