鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is good but try to avoid redundancy and be more concise. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'shoes' multiple times, you can use pronouns or synonyms. Try to give more specific reasons why shoes make you feel smart and help you work effectively.

示例: Yes, I love buying shoes and usually purchase them in large quantities depending on my budget. They make me feel confident and smart because comfortable shoes help me stay focused and work efficiently throughout the day.

建议: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words to make it more coherent. Also, try to avoid long sentences by breaking them into shorter ones. Be more specific about your experience with online shopping.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online. However, on a few occasions, the shoes did not fit me properly. Therefore, I prefer visiting physical stores to try them on before buying.

建议: Your answer is relevant but lacks specific details and linking words. Try to give an estimate of how much you spend or how often you buy shoes. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

示例: I don't buy shoes often; usually, I purchase them only when necessary. Since I have other priorities, I prefer to spend my money on more important things rather than shoes.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words. Also, try to explain why comfortable shoes are important for your busy schedule and give a clearer contrast with fashionable shoes.

示例: Because I have a busy work schedule, I prefer comfortable shoes that allow me to walk easily and stay active. However, I do buy fashionable shoes occasionally for special events or to change my style.

× Shoes make me feel very complete, it makes me smart and it also helps me to work effectively.

✓ Shoes make me feel very complete, make me smart, and also help me to work effectively.

The subject 'Shoes' is plural, so the verbs should also be in plural form without 's'. Using 'it makes' and 'it also helps' is incorrect because 'it' refers to singular, but 'Shoes' is plural. The verbs should agree with the plural subject, so use 'make' and 'help'.

× I have bought shoes online and on few occasions I ended up buying the shoes that were not my size so I prefer going to an on site shop to get them and see how it fits before making my purchase.

✓ I have bought shoes online and on a few occasions I ended up buying shoes that were not my size, so I prefer going to an on-site shop to get them and see how they fit before making my purchase.

The phrase 'on few occasions' is incorrect; it should be 'on a few occasions' to indicate some occasions. Also, 'on site shop' should be hyphenated as 'on-site shop' because it is a compound adjective. Additionally, 'how it fits' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural, so it should be 'how they fit'.

× I do not buy shoes regularly, only buy shoes when it is necessary for me to have one.

✓ I do not buy shoes regularly; I only buy shoes when it is necessary for me to have some.

The phrase 'have one' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural. It is better to say 'have some' to refer to shoes in plural. Also, adding a semicolon improves sentence clarity between two independent clauses.

× I have other things I need to get that far more important to me than getting shoes sometimes.

✓ I have other things I need to get that are far more important to me than getting shoes sometimes.

The sentence is missing the verb 'are' after 'things I need to get that'. Without 'are', the sentence is incomplete and grammatically incorrect. Adding 'are' correctly links the subject and the complement.

× As someone who is always busy at work and have a very tight schedule, I prefer having comfortable shoes that will make me walk effectively.

✓ As someone who is always busy at work and has a very tight schedule, I prefer having comfortable shoes that will make me walk effectively.

The subject 'someone' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'. Using 'have' is incorrect because it does not agree with the singular subject.

× Fashionable shoes should come once in a while.

✓ Fashionable shoes should be worn once in a while.

The verb 'come' is not appropriate here. The intended meaning is that fashionable shoes should be worn occasionally. Using 'be worn' clarifies the meaning and fits the context better.