鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Apni answer e kichu grammar error ache, ar kichu sentence onek boro, jar fole answer ta natural lage na. Apni chesta korun sentence gulo ke chhoto r clear korte, ar direct question er uttor dite. Apni kichu linking word use korte paren jate answer ta logical lage.

示例: I don't buy shoes very often because I live in a small apartment with limited space. Also, I am not very outgoing, so I usually buy one or two pairs each year. This amount is enough for me.

建议: Apnar uttor e kichu grammar mistake ache, ar sentence gulo onek simple. Apni chesta korun sentence gulo ke bhalo vabe structure korte, ar linking word use korte. Apni specific details dite paren jemon kon type er shoes chilen, keno size perfect chhilo na.

示例: I have bought shoes online twice. The first time, the shoes fit perfectly and I was very happy. However, the second time, the size was not correct, so I had to return them.

建议: Apnar answer e filler words (uh) onek beshi, ja answer ke natural na kore. Apni chesta korun filler words komate, ar sentence gulo ke clear r concise korte. Apni specific amount ba price range dite paren jate answer aro bhalo hoy.

示例: Since I buy shoes only once or twice a year, I prefer to spend more money on high-quality shoes. I focus on comfort rather than cheap prices, so I usually buy shoes that last longer.

建议: Apnar answer bhalo, kintu kichu grammar error ache. Apni chesta korun sentence gulo ke aro natural r fluent korte. Apni linking word use korte paren jemon 'however' ba 'but' jate answer ta logical lage.

示例: I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes depending on the occasion. However, I mostly buy comfortable shoes because I wear them daily. I keep one or two pairs of fashionable shoes for special events.

× I hardly buy shoes as I live in a very small apartment and it does not have that much space to store the shoes and also I'm not that much outgoing person so I buy probably one to two pair each year and it really goes very nice.

✓ I hardly buy shoes as I live in a very small apartment and it does not have that much space to store shoes and also I'm not that much of an outgoing person so I buy probably one to two pairs each year and it really goes very nicely.

The word 'pair' should be plural 'pairs' when referring to more than one. 'That much outgoing person' needs the article 'an' and the preposition 'of' to be correct: 'that much of an outgoing person'. 'The shoes' is better as 'shoes' without 'the' because it refers to shoes in general. 'Goes very nice' should be 'goes very nicely' because 'nicely' is an adverb modifying the verb 'goes'.

× As far I can remember I bought shoes from online twice.

✓ As far as I can remember, I have bought shoes online twice.

The phrase 'As far I can remember' is missing the preposition 'as' after 'far'. The present perfect tense 'have bought' is more appropriate here to indicate experience up to now. 'From online' is incorrect; it should be 'online' without 'from'.

× First time it comes out good but in second time it was not in a perfect size.

✓ The first time it turned out well but the second time it was not the perfect size.

'First time it comes out good' is incorrect; past tense 'turned out well' fits better. 'In second time' should be 'the second time'. 'Not in a perfect size' should be 'not the perfect size' to specify the size issue.

× I buy shoes are very rarely or occasionally once or twice a year, so I prefer uh, buying quality full shoes rather than uh, cheap and uh, available ones.

✓ I buy shoes very rarely or occasionally once or twice a year, so I prefer buying quality shoes rather than cheap and readily available ones.

The phrase 'I buy shoes are very rarely' is incorrect; 'are' should be removed. 'Quality full' is incorrect; it should be 'quality' as an adjective. 'Available ones' is better as 'readily available ones' for clarity.

× I prefer uh, buying quality full shoes rather than uh, cheap and uh, available ones.

✓ I prefer buying quality shoes rather than cheap and readily available ones.

The phrase 'quality full' is incorrect; 'quality' alone is sufficient. Also, 'available ones' is better expressed as 'readily available ones' to clarify meaning.

× I prefer both for different occasions, but mostly I buy comfortable shoes as it is used daily or regularly and one or two pair I store for occasional purpose.

✓ I prefer both for different occasions, but mostly I buy comfortable shoes as they are used daily or regularly and one or two pairs I store for occasional purposes.

'It is used' should be 'they are used' to agree with plural 'shoes'. 'One or two pair' should be 'one or two pairs' to be plural. 'Occasional purpose' should be plural 'occasional purposes' to match context.