鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and repeating phrases. Also, directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.

示例: I don't often buy shoes because I only purchase them for special occasions. For example, when I need shoes for a formal event, I make sure to get the right pair. Sometimes, my mother helps me buy shoes, which is very convenient.

建议: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide more specific details to enrich your answer.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online, mostly for my kids. It is very convenient because I can compare prices from different stores easily, which helps me find the best deals.

建议: Complete your sentences and avoid abrupt endings. Use clear and grammatically correct sentences with linking words to explain your reasons and give specific examples.

示例: I usually spend a small amount on shoes because I prefer affordable options. For example, I buy inexpensive shoes that I can easily give away when I no longer need them.

建议: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear preference with supporting reasons and use linking words to contrast your choices effectively.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I can wear them anytime and anywhere. However, I also choose fashionable shoes occasionally when I want to look stylish for special events.

× if there is an occasion that I have to purchase a shoes

✓ if there is an occasion that I have to purchase shoes

The word 'shoes' is plural, so the article 'a' should not be used before it. 'A' is used with singular countable nouns. The correct phrase is 'purchase shoes' without 'a'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× Sometimes my mother is the one who will buy me shoes and umm.

✓ Sometimes my mother is the one who will buy me shoes.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and umm.' which is incomplete. Removing 'and umm.' makes the sentence complete and grammatically correct. This is related to sentence structure but no grammar problem type matches exactly, so no correction beyond removing incomplete phrase.

× Definitely, uh, sometimes it not for, not for myself, but for my kids.

✓ Definitely, uh, sometimes it is not for myself, but for my kids.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'it'. The correct sentence requires the verb to be present for proper sentence structure. This is a sentence structure error.

× it's very convenient to buy shoes online because you can, uh, choose a variety of stores and check uh, different prices of the same shoes.

✓ it's very convenient to buy shoes online because you can, uh, choose from a variety of stores and check, uh, different prices of the same shoes.

The phrase 'choose a variety of stores' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'choose from a variety of stores'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and pronouns combined, but mainly preposition. However, since 'Incorrect use of prepositions' is problem type 11, this correction fits better there.

× choose a variety of stores

✓ choose from a variety of stores

The verb 'choose' is usually followed by the preposition 'from' when selecting among options. Saying 'choose a variety of stores' is incorrect; it should be 'choose from a variety of stores'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions.

× I tend to buy the much cheaper ones

✓ I tend to buy much cheaper ones

The use of 'the' before 'much cheaper ones' is incorrect here because 'much cheaper' is a comparative adjective phrase and does not require the definite article 'the'. Removing 'the' makes the sentence correct. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers.

× and it's easily to dispose or give to other person whenever I don't need it anymore

✓ and it's easy to dispose of or give to another person whenever I don't need it anymore

The word 'easily' is an adverb, but the sentence requires the adjective 'easy' to describe 'it'. Also, 'dispose' should be followed by 'of' to be correct. 'Other person' should be 'another person' for correct usage. This is an incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs and prepositions.

× dispose or give to other person

✓ dispose of or give to another person

The verb 'dispose' requires the preposition 'of' to form the correct phrase 'dispose of'. Also, 'other person' should be 'another person' to be grammatically correct. This is an incorrect use of prepositions.

× I prefer comfortable shoes so I can wear it anytime and anywhere

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes so I can wear them anytime and anywhere

The pronoun 'it' is singular, but 'shoes' is plural. The correct pronoun to refer to 'shoes' is 'them'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns.

× it's my go to shoes so if ever I go to some place I it's it's the one I can easily grab

✓ they're my go-to shoes so if ever I go to some place, they're the ones I can easily grab

'Shoes' is plural, so the pronouns referring to it should be plural as well ('they're' instead of 'it's'). Also, 'go to' should be hyphenated as 'go-to' when used as an adjective. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure.