鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: In English (Cambodia), try to make your answers clearer and more natural by avoiding grammar mistakes and redundancy. For example, say "I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often. I usually buy one or two pairs a year because I take good care of my shoes by cleaning them properly." Also, try to use linking words like "because" and "and" correctly to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often. I usually buy one or two pairs a year because I take good care of my shoes by cleaning them properly. I enjoy looking at new collections and usually buy a new pair when I have a special occasion to attend.

建议: In English (Cambodia), focus on clear sentence structure and correct word forms. Avoid repeating ideas and use linking words to organize your answer. For example, say "Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is more convenient and offers a wider choice of models at better prices. Also, I can check reviews before buying. However, delivery can take a long time."

示例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is more convenient and offers a wider choice of models at better prices. Also, I can check reviews before buying. However, delivery can take a long time.

建议: In English (Cambodia), try to use correct verb tenses and plural forms. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas. For example, say "I usually spend around 30 to 40 U.S. dollars on a pair of shoes. It also depends on the brand and quality. I often buy online because there are more models available at affordable prices than in physical stores."

示例: I usually spend around 30 to 40 U.S. dollars on a pair of shoes. It also depends on the brand and quality. I often buy online because there are more models available at affordable prices than in physical stores.

建议: In English (Cambodia), focus on correct word choice and sentence structure. Use linking words like "because" and "so" properly. For example, say "Personally, I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because comfortable shoes make me feel relaxed and make it easy to walk. Also, I am not afraid of hurting my heels, which sometimes happens when I wear uncomfortable shoes."

示例: Personally, I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because comfortable shoes make me feel relaxed and make it easy to walk. Also, I am not afraid of hurting my heels, which sometimes happens when I wear uncomfortable shoes.

× I don't do it's very often.

✓ I don't do it very often.

The pronoun 'it's' is incorrect here; 'it' should be used as the object pronoun referring to the action of buying shoes. 'It's' is a contraction of 'it is' or 'it has', which does not fit the sentence context.

× I just look buy only one or two pairs a year because I take good care of my shoes by cleaning them properly.

✓ I just buy only one or two pairs a year because I take good care of my shoes by cleaning them properly.

The phrase 'look buy' is incorrect and confusing. The correct verb is 'buy' to express the action of purchasing shoes. 'Look' should be removed to maintain sentence clarity and correct structure.

× Just definitely I have bought most of the time I bought shoe online because it more convenient and has lessons choice of different model and a better price and everyone can check the reviews and I can have a lot of varieties of model that I can select and the like.

✓ Definitely, I have bought shoes online most of the time because it is more convenient, has a larger choice of different models, better prices, and everyone can check the reviews. I can select from a lot of varieties of models and the like.

The original sentence has multiple pronoun and article errors. 'Shoe' should be plural 'shoes'. 'It' needs the verb 'is' to form 'it is'. 'Lessons choice' is incorrect; it should be 'larger choice'. Also, the sentence is run-on and needs to be split for clarity.

× The deliver is quite far.

✓ The delivery takes quite a long time.

'Deliver' is a verb, but here a noun 'delivery' is needed. Also, 'is quite far' is incorrect to describe delivery time or distance; 'takes quite a long time' is more appropriate.

× I just spent around 30 to 40 U.S. dollar on a pair.

✓ I usually spend around 30 to 40 U.S. dollars on a pair.

The question asks about usual spending, so present tense 'spend' is appropriate. Also, 'dollar' should be plural 'dollars' when referring to an amount greater than one.

× Also depend on the brand and the qualities.

✓ It also depends on the brand and the quality.

The sentence lacks a subject; 'It' is needed. 'Depend' should be 'depends' to agree with singular subject 'It'. 'Qualities' should be singular 'quality' when referring to general characteristic.

× I often buy through online because there is a variety of models available at affordable price than in physical stores.

✓ I often buy online because there is a greater variety of models available at more affordable prices than in physical stores.

The preposition 'through' is unnecessary before 'online'. 'Variety' should be modified by 'greater' for comparison. 'Price' should be plural 'prices' to match 'models' and 'more affordable' is needed for comparison.

× Personally I prefer comfortable SO than the fashionable one because when I wear the comfortable so it made me feel more relaxed and easy to walk.

✓ Personally, I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because when I wear comfortable shoes, they make me feel more relaxed and make it easier to walk.

'SO' should be 'shoes'. 'Than' is correct for comparison but 'to' is more common with 'prefer'. 'It made me feel' should be 'they make me feel' to agree with plural 'shoes' and present tense. 'Easy to walk' should be 'make it easier to walk' for clarity.

× Then I don't even afraid of hurting my heel sometime when I wear a uncomfortable SO because the fastened style it make my my legs hurt.

✓ Then I am not even afraid of hurting my heel sometimes when I wear uncomfortable shoes because the fastened style makes my legs hurt.

'Don't even afraid' is incorrect; it should be 'am not even afraid'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'A uncomfortable' should be 'uncomfortable' without 'a' because 'shoes' is plural. 'SO' should be 'shoes'. 'It make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'style'. Duplicate 'my' is an error and removed.