鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, be careful with verb tenses and article usage. For example, say 'I have just bought Nike Air Jordans' instead of 'I have just buy'. Keep answers concise and natural.

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I am passionate about collecting branded ones. I currently own 15 pairs, including a recent purchase of Nike Air Jordans that cost around $2,500.

建议: Avoid repeating phrases and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, correct prepositions and phrasing, for example, say 'whether they fit me' instead of 'whether it suits on me'.

示例: I prefer shopping for shoes in stores because I want to check if they fit me well and match my clothes. Therefore, I usually avoid buying shoes online.

建议: Work on sentence clarity and grammar, especially with amounts and expressions. Avoid filler words like 'uh'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Usually, I spend around $2,500 on each pair of shoes, but sometimes my budget can go up to $3,000 or $4,000. I save money to afford shoes within this range.

建议: Reduce filler words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about preferences.

示例: I prefer fashionable shoes because I often wear them for special occasions. For instance, when I attend birthday parties, I choose shoes that match my outfit.

× For example, I have just buy Nike Air Jordans shoes which cost around 2500.

✓ For example, I have just bought Nike Air Jordans shoes which cost around 2500.

The present perfect tense requires the past participle form of the verb. 'Buy' is the base form; the correct past participle is 'bought'. Using 'have just buy' is incorrect; it should be 'have just bought'.

× I always want to check my fitting whether it suits on me or which clothes suits on me.

✓ I always want to check my fitting whether it suits me or which clothes suit me.

The verb 'suit' does not require the preposition 'on' when referring to a person. Also, 'clothes' is plural, so the verb should be 'suit' instead of 'suits'. Removing 'on' and correcting verb agreement improves the sentence.

× However, I don't like to buy the shoes from online.

✓ However, I don't like to buy shoes online.

The preposition 'from' is not used with 'online' in this context. The correct phrase is 'buy shoes online'. Also, 'the shoes' is unnecessary unless referring to specific shoes.

× I just want to spend $2500 in every shoes, but sometimes I do have the budget of 3 to $4000.

✓ I just want to spend $2500 on every pair of shoes, but sometimes I do have a budget of 3 to $4000.

The phrase 'every shoes' is incorrect because 'every' is used with singular nouns. It should be 'every pair of shoes'. Also, 'spend in' should be 'spend on'. 'The budget' should be 'a budget' for general reference.

× I always have some kinds of uh, saving so that I can buy the shoes in my range.

✓ I always have some kinds of savings so that I can buy shoes within my range.

The word 'saving' should be plural 'savings' when referring to money saved. Also, 'in my range' is better expressed as 'within my range' to indicate budget limits.

× I always like to buy fashionable shoes because I am the person who, uh, wear the shoes on some special occasion, so I want some varieties of pair.

✓ I always like to buy fashionable shoes because I am the person who, uh, wears shoes on some special occasions, so I want some varieties of pairs.

The verb 'wear' should be 'wears' to agree with the singular subject 'person'. 'Occasion' should be plural 'occasions' to match 'some'. 'Varieties of pair' is incorrect; it should be 'varieties of pairs'.

× For example, when I am attending any birthday party event, I I suit myself according to the dress.

✓ For example, when I am attending any birthday party event, I dress myself according to the outfit.

The phrase 'I suit myself' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'dress'. Also, 'according to the dress' is awkward; 'according to the outfit' or 'according to the dress code' is better.