鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'go to going to a shoes shopping' 대신 'go shopping for shoes'라고 해야 합니다. 또한, 문장이 중복되고 명확하지 않아 효과적이지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 예산 제한에 대해 구체적으로 설명하는 것이 좋습니다.

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but I don't do it often because I have a limited budget. Usually, I buy shoes only when I really need them.

建议: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 'I had several times at my school year'는 어색하며, 온라인 구매 경험과 결과에 대해 구체적으로 설명하는 것이 필요합니다. 문장을 명확하고 논리적으로 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online a few times during my school years. However, sometimes the shoes didn't match the pictures or reviews, so I was disappointed.

建议: 답변이 불명확하고 문법적으로 부정확합니다. 'full, full spending'의 의미가 모호하며, 신발과 발 건강의 중요성에 대해 구체적으로 설명하는 것이 좋습니다. 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 이유를 포함하여 답변을 구성하세요.

示例: I usually spend a reasonable amount on shoes because I believe that good shoes are important for foot health and comfort.

建议: 답변에 문법 오류가 있고, 'the vitals is almost everything' 같은 표현이 부자연스럽습니다. 이전 답변을 참조하는 것은 좋지만, 더 명확하고 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸는 것이 필요합니다. 이유를 구체적으로 설명하고 문장을 간결하게 만드세요.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because, as we get older, comfort becomes more important for our health and daily activities.

× I really enjoy buying shoes and go to going to a shoes shopping but there is a budget limit and I can't.

✓ I really enjoy buying shoes and going shopping for shoes, but there is a budget limit and I can't.

'Enjoy' is followed by a verb in the -ing form, so 'go to going' is incorrect; it should be 'going'. Also, 'a shoes shopping' is incorrect; 'shopping' is uncountable here, so 'going shopping for shoes' is correct.

× I don't spend a lot of money to uh shoes so.

✓ I don't spend a lot of money on shoes.

The correct preposition with 'spend money' is 'on', not 'to'. Also, 'to uh shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'on shoes'.

× I had several times at my school year, but uh, I just kind of fail when I just look through the Internet and see, see the review and got it and the and there's a big difference.

✓ I bought several times during my school years, but I kind of failed when I just looked through the Internet, saw the reviews, bought them, and there was a big difference.

The past tense should be used consistently for past events: 'had' should be 'bought', 'fail' should be 'failed', 'look' should be 'looked', 'see' should be 'saw', 'got' should be 'bought', and 'there's' should be 'there was'.

× I had several times at my school year, but uh, I just kind of fail when I just look through the Internet and see, see the review and got it and the and there's a big difference.

✓ I bought several times during my school years, but I kind of failed when I just looked through the Internet, saw the reviews, bought them, and there was a big difference.

The phrase 'at my school year' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'during' for a period of time.

× I should say I, I do, uh, full, full spending because the shoe and the feet health are very important for me.

✓ I should say I spend fully because shoe and foot health are very important to me.

'Full, full spending' is awkward and incorrect; 'spend fully' or 'spend a lot' is better. Also, 'the shoe and the feet health' should be 'shoe and foot health' without articles and with singular 'foot' as an adjective.

× I should say I, I do, uh, full, full spending because the shoe and the feet health are very important for me.

✓ I should say I spend fully because shoe and foot health are very important to me.

'Feet' is plural, but here 'foot' is used as an adjective modifying 'health', so it should be singular 'foot'.

× I would go for a comfortable shoes because uh what? From what I previously said, the vitals is almost everything as we age so I prefer comfortable ones.

✓ I would go for comfortable shoes because, as I previously said, vital things are almost everything as we age, so I prefer comfortable ones.

'A comfortable shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'the vitals is' is incorrect; 'vitals' is plural, so 'vital things are' is better.