鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“shoes is area item”应为“shoes are an item”，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，直接表达观点，并使用连词使表达更流畅。

示例: No, I don't like buying shoes very much because I think they don't attract as much attention as clothes or accessories. Therefore, I don't buy shoes often.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和重复，如“had never, I have never”，且表达不够简洁。建议使用更准确的时态和连词，避免重复，并具体说明原因。

示例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I think it's important to try them on in the store to make sure they fit well. Also, sizes can vary between brands, so trying them is necessary.

建议: 回答中信息不一致且表达混乱，如“$800 per shoes”和“discount around like $100”矛盾。建议明确表达通常花费，并避免重复和语法错误。

示例: I usually don't spend much money on shoes because I prefer to buy clothes and accessories. Typically, I spend around $100 on shoes, especially when there is a discount.

建议: 回答表达了观点和原因，但语法和用词不准确，如“brutal”应为“bruises”，且句子结构不够清晰。建议使用正确词汇并简洁表达经历。

示例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I once wore fashionable shoes that hurt my feet badly. When I got home, I noticed bruises on my legs, which was very unpleasant.

× I feel like shoes is area item that is not, that are not usually, uh, attractive people attentions that for example, like a clothes or the accessories that I think is more, uh, attracted to people's views.

✓ I feel like shoes are a rare item that is not, that are not usually, uh, attractive to people's attention, unlike clothes or accessories that I think are more, uh, attractive to people's views.

这里'shoes'是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式'are'，而不是单数'is'。此外，'a clothes'错误，'clothes'是复数名词，不用冠词'a'。需要注意名词的单复数形式和相应的动词一致。

× I feel like shoes is area item that is not, that are not usually, uh, attractive people attentions that for example, like a clothes or the accessories that I think is more, uh, attracted to people's views.

✓ I feel like shoes are a rare item that is not, that are not usually, uh, attractive to people's attention, unlike clothes or accessories that I think are more, uh, attractive to people's views.

短语中缺少介词'to'，正确表达应为'attractive to people's attention'，表示“对人们的注意力有吸引力”。

× So I'm don't usually buy shoes.

✓ So I don't usually buy shoes.

这里的'I'm don't'是错误的，应该是'I don't'。'I'm'是'I am'的缩写，不能和'don't'连用。

× No, I had never, I have never bought shoes online 'cause I feel like every shoes that you have to like go to the shop and test to wear it to see if it is fit, fit your size or not.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I feel like for every pair of shoes, you have to go to the shop and try them on to see if they fit your size or not.

这里使用了过去完成时'had never'，但语境中应使用现在完成时'have never'。此外，'every shoes'应为'every pair of shoes'，因为'shoes'是复数，'every'后应接单数名词。

× And sometimes even if the size are the same, when the when the shoes that I buy from this brand and the other brand that might be not the same.

✓ And sometimes even if the sizes are the same, the shoes I buy from this brand and another brand might not be the same.

'size'应为复数'sizes'，因为指多个鞋子的尺码。

× Probably $800 per shoes 'cause I I'm not a big fan of buying shoes.

✓ Probably $800 per pair of shoes because I'm not a big fan of buying shoes.

'per shoes'错误，应为'per pair of shoes'，因为鞋子成对购买。

× I usually write AI usually spend my money on clothes or accessories rather than shoes so I won't spend much money on it.

✓ I usually spend my money on clothes or accessories rather than shoes, so I won't spend much money on them.

'on it'指代不明确，鞋子是复数，应使用'on them'。

× So I usually buy shoes when there is a discount around like $100.

✓ So I usually buy shoes when there is a discount, like around $100.

句子中'discount around like $100'表达不清，调整为'like around $100'更自然。

× I would say definitely comfortable shoes 'cause I had tried some fashionable shoes that are not comfortable before and it really hurt my my legs and after I backed home I saw that my leg there are some brutal on it.

✓ I would say definitely comfortable shoes because I have tried some fashionable shoes that were not comfortable before, and they really hurt my legs. After I got back home, I saw that my leg had some bruises on it.

时态错误，'had tried'应为现在完成时'have tried'，'hurt'应与主语复数一致，'legs'。'backed home'错误，应为'got back home'。'brutal'用词错误，应为'bruises'，表示瘀伤。

× So I had a traumatic.

✓ So I had a trauma.

'traumatic'是形容词，名词应为'trauma'，表示创伤。