鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid redundancy by not repeating the same idea multiple times. Also, correct grammatical errors such as 'one of my favorite hobby is' to 'one of my favorite hobbies is'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide a clearer explanation.

示例: Yes, I love buying shoes because when I was young, I didn't have many due to financial difficulties. Therefore, I enjoy purchasing them now whenever I get the chance.

建议: Your answer is clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating 'online' multiple times. Use linking words to connect reasons logically and vary your vocabulary.

示例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it's convenient and easy. Plus, there are many promotions, so I usually take advantage of those deals.

建议: Focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity. Avoid incomplete sentences like 'I would buy it even if it cost.' Also, use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details about your spending habits.

示例: The amount I spend depends on the type of shoes. Usually, I spend between 300 and 500 dirhams. If I really like a pair, I don't mind paying more.

建议: Try to make your answer more fluent and avoid fragmented sentences. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and provide specific examples.

示例: It depends on the occasion. If I don't wear the shoes often, I prefer fashionable ones. However, for daily use, I choose comfortable shoes.

× One of my favorite hobby is buying shoes.

✓ One of my favorite hobbies is buying shoes.

The phrase 'one of my favorite' requires a plural noun following it, so 'hobby' should be pluralized to 'hobbies' to be grammatically correct.

× I didn't have that much shoes because we were poor back then.

✓ I didn't have that many shoes because we were poor back then.

The quantifier 'much' is used with uncountable nouns, but 'shoes' is a countable plural noun, so 'many' should be used instead of 'much'.

× So I always buy shoes.

✓ So I always buy shoes.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× That depends on the kind of shoes that I wanted to wear.

✓ That depends on the kind of shoes that I want to wear.

The verb 'wanted' is in the past tense, but the sentence is about a general present preference, so the present tense 'want' should be used.

× But usually when I buy shoes I the cost would range from 300 dirhams to 500 dirhams.

✓ But usually when I buy shoes, the cost ranges from 300 dirhams to 500 dirhams.

The original sentence has a misplaced word 'I' and incorrect verb form 'would range'. The corrected sentence removes 'I' and uses the simple present tense 'ranges' to indicate habitual action.

× Especially when I like the shoes, I would buy it even if it cost.

✓ Especially when I like the shoes, I buy them even if they cost a lot.

The sentence is incomplete and has pronoun agreement issues. 'It' should be 'them' to match plural 'shoes', and 'cost' needs an object or quantifier. Also, 'would buy' is changed to simple present 'buy' to express habitual action.

× Actually it depends on when I am going to wear it.

✓ Actually, it depends on when I am going to wear them.

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'shoes', which is plural, so it should be 'them' instead of 'it'. Also, a comma after 'Actually' improves sentence clarity.

× Or do I usually wear it?

✓ Or how often do I usually wear them?

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'how often' clarifies the question about frequency, and 'it' is corrected to 'them' to match plural 'shoes'.

× If I don't usually wear it, I would go for fashion, but if I would use it daily I'd go for comfortable shoes.

✓ If I don't usually wear them, I go for fashionable shoes, but if I use them daily, I'd go for comfortable shoes.

Pronouns 'it' are corrected to 'them' for plural 'shoes'. 'Would go for fashion' is changed to 'go for fashionable shoes' for clarity and correctness. Also, 'would use' is changed to 'use' to match the conditional structure.