鞋子— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
考生
Yes, I do like buying shoes. In fact, uh, few years ago I started a business reselling shoes. I buy shoes for the original price and sell them for their resale price. I buy shoes every few months.
考官
Have you ever bought shoes online?
考生
Yes, I have. As I said that I have a business reselling shoes. I buy shoes through their original websites. For example, I buy Nike shoes from the Nike website and I don't buy shoes personally from online.
考官
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
考生
In my younger days I had this perception that expensive shoes are better and they look cool. But now I usually spend not more than a few $100 on shoes.
考官
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
考生
I used to prefer fashionable shoes because I had this perception that fashion fashionable shoes are much better. But as I grow older, comfort is a very important thing to me so I would prefer comfortable shoes as I can enjoy walking every day.
评估
总分
Part 1
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
分数: 75.0建议: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and make your answer more concise and natural. Also, clarify the timeline by saying 'a few years ago' instead of 'few years ago'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
示例: Yes, I like buying shoes. A few years ago, I started a business reselling shoes, where I buy them at the original price and sell at resale price. Therefore, I usually buy shoes every few months.
Have you ever bought shoes online?
分数: 70.0建议: Avoid repeating phrases like 'I have' and 'I buy'. Also, the last sentence is confusing; clarify that you don't buy shoes personally in physical stores but online instead. Use linking words to improve coherence.
示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because of my reselling business. For instance, I purchase Nike shoes directly from the official Nike website. I prefer buying online rather than in physical stores.
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
分数: 80.0建议: Good use of contrast, but try to be more specific and avoid vague phrases like 'a few $100'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
示例: When I was younger, I believed that expensive shoes were better and looked cool. However, now I usually spend less than 300 dollars on shoes because I value practicality more.
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
分数: 75.0建议: Avoid repeating words like 'fashion' twice. Use correct tense such as 'have grown older'. Also, make your answer more concise and natural with linking words.
示例: I used to prefer fashionable shoes because I thought they looked better. However, as I have grown older, I now prefer comfortable shoes since they allow me to enjoy walking every day.
语法
× In fact, uh, few years ago I started a business reselling shoes.
✓ In fact, uh, a few years ago I started a business reselling shoes.
The phrase 'few years ago' is missing the article 'a' which is necessary to indicate a small number of years. Without 'a', it sounds incomplete. The correct phrase is 'a few years ago'. This is a common singular/plural article usage in English.
× I buy shoes through their original websites.
✓ I buy shoes from their original websites.
The preposition 'through' is not appropriate here because it implies a medium or channel, but when referring to purchasing from a website, the correct preposition is 'from'. So, 'buy shoes from their original websites' is correct.
× I don't buy shoes personally from online.
✓ I don't buy shoes personally online.
The phrase 'from online' is incorrect because 'online' is an adverb and does not require the preposition 'from'. The correct form is 'buy shoes online'. Also, 'personally' is better placed before 'buy' or after 'shoes' but the main error is the preposition usage.
× I had this perception that fashion fashionable shoes are much better.
✓ I had this perception that fashionable shoes are much better.
The word 'fashion' before 'fashionable' is redundant and incorrect. 'Fashionable' alone is the correct adjective to describe shoes that are in style. Removing 'fashion' corrects the sentence.
× But as I grow older, comfort is a very important thing to me so I would prefer comfortable shoes as I can enjoy walking every day.
✓ But as I have grown older, comfort is a very important thing to me so I prefer comfortable shoes as I can enjoy walking every day.
The phrase 'as I grow older' should be in present perfect tense 'as I have grown older' to indicate the change over time up to now. Also, 'would prefer' suggests a hypothetical situation, but here the speaker is stating a current preference, so 'prefer' is more appropriate.
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