鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer wa sukoshi nagai desu. 5 bunshou ijou ni naranai you ni shite, motto shizen de wakariyasui kotoba wo tsukatte kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy sneakers once a month. Last weekend, I bought a black New Balance sneaker in Ginza.' to iu fuu ni.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy sneakers once a month. Last weekend, I bought a black New Balance sneaker in Ginza.

建议: Kotae ga fukuzatsu de, imi ga sukoshi wakari nikui desu. Repetition wo sakete, motto seikaku ni kotaete kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Yes, I have bought sneakers online a few times because it is convenient. I don't need to visit far shops.' to iu fuu ni.

示例: Yes, I have bought sneakers online a few times because it is convenient. I don't need to visit far shops.

建议: Kotae ga chotto fukuzatsu de, imi ga sukoshi wakari nikui desu. Tokutei no rei ya riyuu wo motto meikaku ni shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'I usually spend about 10,000 to 20,000 yen on shoes because popular sneakers cost that much. I like sports or work sneakers for my collection.' to iu fuu ni.

示例: I usually spend about 10,000 to 20,000 yen on shoes because popular sneakers cost that much. I like sports or work sneakers for my collection.

建议: Kotae ga sukoshi fukuzatsu de, imi ga todokanai tokoro ga arimasu. Motto meikaku ni shite, rikai shi yasui kotoba wo tsukatte kudasai. Tatoeba, 'I prefer comfortable shoes because walking comfortably is important. Fashionable shoes can be uncomfortable sometimes.' to iu fuu ni.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because walking comfortably is important. Fashionable shoes can be uncomfortable sometimes.

× I buy my sneaker every month.

✓ I buy my sneakers every month.

The noun 'sneaker' should be plural 'sneakers' because the sentence implies a repeated action of buying more than one shoe over time. In English, when referring to multiple items or repeated purchases, the plural form is used.

× I went to Ginza and bought a black New Balance sneaker for extra.

✓ I went to Ginza and bought an extra black New Balance sneaker.

The phrase 'for extra' is incorrect here. The correct expression is 'an extra' to indicate an additional item. Also, the article 'an' is used before a vowel sound. The preposition 'for' is not appropriate in this context.

× And if you bought a similar type of sneaker.

✓ And if you buy a similar type of sneaker.

The sentence is incomplete and uses past tense 'bought' incorrectly in this context. Since the previous sentence is in present perfect, the conditional 'if' clause should use present tense 'buy' to express a general condition.

× I usually spend 10,000 then or 20,000 then on shoes.

✓ I usually spend 10,000 yen or 20,000 yen on shoes.

The word 'then' is incorrectly used here; it should be omitted. Also, the currency unit 'yen' should be specified for clarity. The sentence refers to amounts of money, which are uncountable nouns and do not require pluralization but need correct quantification.

× It is a common PR price for popular sneakers.

✓ It is a common price for popular sneakers.

The abbreviation 'PR' is unclear and unnecessary here. The adjective 'common' correctly modifies 'price'. Removing 'PR' improves clarity and correctness.

× Specifically, I like to buy sports sneakers or working sneakers for my collections.

✓ Specifically, I like to buy sports sneakers or work sneakers for my collection.

The word 'working sneakers' is incorrect; the correct term is 'work sneakers'. Also, 'collections' should be singular 'collection' when referring to one's own set of items.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because it is more important for me to walk comfortably or functionally.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because it is more important for me to walk comfortably and functionally.

The conjunction 'or' is not appropriate here; 'and' better connects the two adverbs describing how the speaker wants to walk. Also, 'it is' is correct as a dummy subject referring to the situation.

× For example, if you buy fashionable shoes, if you emphasize fashion, fashion too much is sometimes.

✓ For example, if you buy fashionable shoes and emphasize fashion too much, it can be problematic sometimes.

The original sentence is incomplete and repetitive. Combining the clauses with 'and' and completing the thought improves clarity and grammatical correctness.