鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答不够自然，语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用连词连接细节，避免重复。

示例: I don't really like buying shoes. When I was in school, I used to buy a new pair every one or two weeks because I walked a lot.

建议: 表达不够流畅，语法和词汇使用不准确。建议使用正确的时态和词汇，结构清晰，表达观点时用连词连接。

示例: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it's very convenient. Also, online stores offer a wide variety of shoes, so I don't have to visit many shops and get tired.

建议: 回答不够清晰，语法错误多，表达含糊。建议直接回答问题，使用准确数字和连词，避免口头语。

示例: When I was in school, I usually spent about CN¥1000 on a pair of shoes. However, when I travel to other cities, I try to buy shoes for less than CN¥500.

建议: 表达不够完整，语法和词汇使用不准确。建议明确表达观点，使用连词连接对比，补充具体原因。

示例: During my school days, I preferred fashionable shoes because they attracted attention. However, now I usually choose comfortable shoes since I walk a lot every day and comfort is more important to me.

× Actually never like buying shoes.

✓ Actually, I never like buying shoes.

句子缺少主语“I”，导致语法不完整。应加上主语使句子完整。

× During my senior school and Junior School I often buy shoes almost one week or two week by one pair of shoes.

✓ During my senior school and junior school, I often bought one pair of shoes every one or two weeks.

“week”应使用复数形式“weeks”，且句子时态应与描述过去的时间一致，使用过去时。

× Since walking alone I usually buy shoes one more.

✓ Since I started walking alone, I usually buy one more pair of shoes.

“Since walking alone”表达不清，应改为“Since I started walking alone”表示时间起点；“buy shoes one more”表达不正确，应改为“buy one more pair of shoes”。

× During my senior junior, I usually buy one pair, spend CN¥1000 almost uh, but when I walk along another city, uh, I usually buy shoes within CN¥500.

✓ During my senior and junior school, I usually bought one pair and spent almost CN¥1000, but when I walked in another city, I usually bought shoes within CN¥500.

描述过去的时间应使用过去时态，动词“buy”和“spend”应改为过去式“bought”和“spent”；“walk along another city”表达不正确，应改为“walked in another city”。

× Yeah, actually I my shoes almost buy from online because I think my shoes online is very convenient and we can look various of shoes if we go a shop, we need work a lot and tired.

✓ Yeah, actually I almost buy my shoes online because I think buying shoes online is very convenient and we can look at various shoes. If we go to a shop, we need to work a lot and get tired.

“buy from online”应改为“buy online”；“look various of shoes”应改为“look at various shoes”；“go a shop”应改为“go to a shop”；“need work a lot and tired”应改为“need to work a lot and get tired”。

× Actually, during my school time, I prefer fashionable shoes because it can attach another's eyes.

✓ Actually, during my school time, I preferred fashionable shoes because they can attract others' eyes.

“it”指代复数“shoes”应使用复数代词“they”；“attach another's eyes”表达错误，应为“attract others' eyes”。

× But no, just like I'm walking every day, I usually prefer to buy comfortable shoes because it can make me feel.

✓ But now, since I walk every day, I usually prefer to buy comfortable shoes because they make me feel comfortable.

“But no”应为“But now”；“I'm walking every day”改为一般现在时“I walk every day”；“it”指代复数“shoes”应为“they”；“make me feel”后应加形容词“comfortable”使句子完整。