鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to give a clear, concise response with a topic sentence followed by specific details. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially sports shoes. However, I don't buy them frequently; usually, I purchase two or three pairs each year. I like to choose shoes that are both comfortable and suitable for special occasions.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and has many hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for better fluency.

示例: Yes, I bought shoes online about two months ago. A friend recommended a website where the shoes were affordable and of good quality. After checking the site myself, I decided to make a purchase, and I was pleasantly surprised by the experience since I usually don't shop online.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many pauses and incomplete sentences. Provide a direct answer with specific details and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, check the accuracy of your figures to make your answer more believable.

示例: I usually spend around $150 per year on shoes. This budget allows me to buy three pairs: one for winter, one for summer, and a pair of sports shoes that I use regularly.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and contains many hesitations. Try to give a clear opinion with supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words and finish your thoughts to make your answer coherent.

示例: I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes. While I like shoes that look good and match my outfit, comfort is more important because wearing uncomfortable shoes can ruin the whole experience. Therefore, I always choose shoes that balance style and comfort.

× I like buying shoes I really enjoy, especially for a sports shoe.

✓ I like buying shoes I really enjoy, especially sports shoes.

The phrase 'a sports shoe' is incorrect because 'sports shoes' is a plural noun used to refer to this category of shoes generally. Using the singular 'a sports shoe' is unnatural here. Also, 'for a sports shoe' is incorrect preposition usage; it should be 'especially sports shoes.'

× I'm not someone who buy a lot of shoes

✓ I'm not someone who buys a lot of shoes

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'someone' which is singular, so the verb should be in third person singular form 'buys' instead of 'buy.'

× So and I enjoy it buying them as I sit for a special and I wear for I have.

✓ So I enjoy buying them as I save for a special occasion and wear them when I have one.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Sit for a special' is incorrect; it should be 'save for a special occasion.' Also, 'I wear for I have' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'wear them when I have one.' The sentence structure needs to be corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× it was two months ago when I see my friend is he paid a shoes from uh online

✓ it was two months ago when I saw my friend buy shoes online

The past event requires past tense verbs. 'See' should be 'saw' and 'is he paid a shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'he bought shoes' or 'buy shoes' in reported speech. Also, 'a shoes' is incorrect; 'shoes' is plural and does not take 'a.'

× I asked him how he find and he recommended me.

✓ I asked him how he found them and he recommended them to me.

The verb 'find' should be in past tense 'found' to match the past context. Also, 'recommended me' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'recommended them to me' because 'recommend' takes an object (the thing recommended) and an indirect object (the person).

× He recommended me and then I checked the Internet and I really buy it.

✓ He recommended them to me and then I checked the Internet and I really bought it.

The past event requires past tense verbs. 'Buy' should be 'bought' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I'm not someone who buy a lot from online.

✓ I'm not someone who buys a lot online.

The preposition 'from' is unnecessary before 'online.' The correct phrase is 'buy a lot online.' Also, 'buy' should be 'buys' for third person singular agreement.

× I will say approximately up to $15 per year.

✓ I would say approximately up to $15 per year.

Using 'will' is less appropriate here because the speaker is expressing an estimate or habitual amount, so 'would' is more polite and suitable for expressing approximation.

× and that budget I can buy for three different shoes for winter and summer and one for sport is which I use when I go to.

✓ With that budget, I can buy three different pairs of shoes: for winter, summer, and one for sports, which I use when I go out.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Buy for three different shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'buy three different pairs of shoes.' The phrase 'one for sport is which I use when I go to' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'one for sports, which I use when I go out.' Proper sentence structure and clarity are needed.

× if the shoes you are wearing is not comfortable, I think the, uh, the fashion does not make any sense.

✓ if the shoes you are wearing are not comfortable, I think the fashion does not make any sense.

The subject 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.