鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific reasons or examples. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes quite often because I enjoy keeping up with fashion trends. For example, I usually buy new shoes every few months to match different outfits.

建议: Your answer is repetitive and has grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about your experience with online shopping.

示例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because online stores frequently have sales, which helps me save money. Additionally, shopping online is convenient and offers a wide variety of options.

建议: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Provide a direct response with an approximate amount and explain why you spend that amount. Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences.

示例: I usually spend around 20,000 won on a pair of shoes because I believe it's important to buy good quality shoes that last longer.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Clearly state your preference and explain why, using linking words to connect your ideas.

示例: I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable because I want to look good while feeling comfortable throughout the day.

× I think that's it's fashion, so I want to get adults in the future.

✓ I think that's fashion, so I want to get adults shoes in the future.

The phrase 'that's it's fashion' is incorrect because 'that's' and 'it's' are both contractions for 'that is' and 'it is' respectively, causing redundancy and confusion. Also, 'get adults' is incomplete and unclear; it should specify 'adults shoes' to clarify the meaning.

× I want to buy out of shoes and a valuable shoes.

✓ I want to buy a pair of shoes and valuable shoes.

The phrase 'buy out of shoes' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'buy a pair of shoes' when referring to shoes in singular form. Also, 'a valuable shoes' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'shoes'; it should be 'valuable shoes' without 'a' or 'a valuable shoe' if singular.

× I often buy shoes online because I often use online shopping and sometimes that's have sale so I often use shoes on online.

✓ I often buy shoes online because I often use online shopping and sometimes there are sales, so I often buy shoes online.

The phrase 'that's have sale' is incorrect; it should be 'there are sales' to indicate the existence of sales. Also, 'use shoes on online' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'buy shoes online' or 'use online shopping for shoes.' Prepositions 'on' and 'in' are misused here.

× I have never thought about that, but I think. I I spent. 20,000 of one shoot because that is very good.

✓ I have never thought about that, but I think I spent 20,000 on one pair of shoes because they are very good.

The sentence has fragmented structure and incorrect word choice. '20,000 of one shoot' is incorrect; it should be '20,000 on one pair of shoes.' Also, 'that is very good' should refer to 'shoes' in plural as 'they are very good.' The past tense 'spent' is correct but needs proper sentence structure.

× I love fashionable shoes and comfortable shoes, so I usually buy fashionable and comfortable suits. Because that I can wear.

✓ I love fashionable shoes and comfortable shoes, so I usually buy fashionable and comfortable shoes because I can wear them.

The word 'suits' is incorrect here; it should be 'shoes' to match the context. Also, 'Because that I can wear' is a sentence fragment and incorrect; it should be combined into the previous sentence with proper pronoun 'them' referring to shoes.