鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then briefly explain with specific reason and frequency. Use correct tense and reduce hesitations. For example, say when you bought shoes more often as a child and now you buy them rarely because of budget constraints.

示例: I used to love buying shoes when I was a child, but now I buy them rarely. I don’t shop for shoes often because I have to budget my own money, so I usually only buy a new pair once or twice a year.

建议: Organize your answer: give a clear number, state reasons and add one specific example. Avoid filler words and repetitive phrases. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to make it coherent.

示例: Yes, I have bought about three or four pairs of shoes online. I prefer Nike because I trust their quality, and I also like ordering online because I can customize colors and styles. For example, I recently ordered customized Nike trainers with my preferred color scheme.

建议: Be precise and fluent: start with a topic sentence about price range, then use linking words to contrast special occasion shoes and everyday shoes. Use consistent currency format and avoid hesitations.

示例: It depends on the type of shoes. For special occasions or party shoes I might spend between $200 and $300, but for everyday shoes I usually spend around $50 to $150.

建议: Answer directly and give a clear reason with a brief example. Use correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., "comfort shoes" → "comfortable shoes"). Avoid unclear phrases and unnecessary repetition.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I exercise almost every day and need support for long walks. Occasionally I buy fashionable shoes for parties, but I rarely spend much on them.

× 'I did like buying a shoes very much.'

✓ 'I used to like buying shoes very much.'

'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot take the singular article 'a'. Also 'did like' is awkward for past habitual action; use 'used to like' or simple past 'liked'. Suggestion: remove the article and use the correct past habitual form.'

× 'Now I was used very rarely.'

✓ 'Now I use them very rarely.'

'was used' mixes past tense with present meaning. The speaker means a present habit, so use simple present 'use' and correct object 'them' to refer to shoes.'

× 'I have to pay from it from my pockets.'

✓ 'I have to pay for them from my own pocket.'

'pay from it' is incorrect preposition and pronoun use; say 'pay for them'. 'my pockets' is uncommon for paying; use 'my own pocket' (or 'my own pockets') and keep singular/plural consistent with context.'

× 'when I was child that time I did like buying a shoes very much.'

✓ 'when I was a child, I used to like buying shoes very much.'

Missing article 'a' before 'child' and wrong tense/form: 'did like' is not the natural expression for past habitual actions; 'used to' is appropriate. Also remove 'a' before plural 'shoes'. Add comma for clarity.'

× 'I have purchased I think 3 and 4 pairs of shoes online.'

✓ 'I have purchased, I think, three or four pairs of shoes online.'

'3 and 4' is unclear; use 'three or four'. Use words for small numbers in speech transcripts optionally. Ensure 'pairs of shoes' is correct plural form.'

× 'All of them are Nike and I think my all shoes collections are from Nike.'

✓ 'All of them are Nike and I think my entire shoe collection is from Nike.'

'my all shoes collections' is ungrammatical: use 'my entire shoe collection' or 'all my shoes'. 'Collection' should be singular; 'shoe' as adjective before collection.'

× 'I like the brand Nike so I like purchasing it online 'cause you can do some customization.'

✓ 'I like the brand Nike, so I like buying it online because you can customize them.'

Use 'buying' rather than 'purchasing it online' with 'it' ambiguous; 'them' refers to shoes (plural). 'do some customization' is awkward; use 'customize'. Use 'because' in place of informal ''cause'. Add comma for clarity.'

× 'It physically depends on the kind of shoes.'

✓ 'It mainly depends on the kind of shoes.'

'physically depends' is incorrect collocation; likely meant 'usually' or 'mainly'. Replace with appropriate adverb. Keep preposition 'on the kind of shoes' which is correct.'

× 'If I am uh, purchasing it for my party view, then uh, I can spend like 200 to 300 on it.'

✓ 'If I am buying them for a party, then I can spend about 200 to 300 dollars on them.'

Use 'buying' not 'purchasing it' and 'them' for plural shoes. 'for my party view' is incorrect phrase; use 'for a party'. Add currency word 'dollars' for clarity. 'can spend' is acceptable conditional with present continuous in the if-clause for planned events; using 'If I buy' would also be fine.'

× 'If I have to purchase it for my daily use, so I'm going to spend like 50 to $150.00.'

✓ 'If I have to buy them for daily use, I will spend about $50 to $150.'

Do not use 'so' after an if-clause. Use 'buy them' for shoes (plural). Use consistent future form 'I will spend' or present simple 'I spend'. Place currency symbol correctly before amounts. Prefer 'about' instead of 'like'.'

× 'I do like comfortable shoes because I'm a kind of person who do exercise almost daily,'

✓ 'I prefer comfortable shoes because I am the kind of person who exercises almost daily,'

Use 'prefer' rather than 'do like' for preference. Subject-verb agreement: 'who do exercise' should be 'who exercises' because 'who' refers to 'I/the kind of person'. Use 'the kind of person' not 'a kind of person' in this context.'

× 'so I umm wear the comfort hues more.'

✓ 'so I wear comfortable shoes more.'

'comfort hues' is incorrect; probably meant 'comfortable shoes'. Ensure plural 'shoes' and correct adjective 'comfortable'.'

× 'Like at some days we have to view the party fashionable shoes so I do not like purchasing that much.'

✓ 'On some days we have to wear fashionable party shoes, so I do not like buying them that often.'

'view the party fashionable shoes' is ungrammatical: likely intended 'wear fashionable party shoes'. 'purchasing that much' is vague; use 'buying them that often'. Reorder words for natural English: 'on some days' and add comma before 'so'.