鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant and clear but a bit repetitive and contains minor grammatical issues. Start with a concise topic sentence, avoid repeating the same idea, and add a specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct tense/modal choice (use "I usually buy" rather than "I'll buy").

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but not very often. I usually buy a pair once a year because I prefer spending on clothes; for example, I bought two pairs last summer when I needed sandals and sneakers.

建议: The answer is personal and informative but slightly informal and contains unclear phrasing ("jogging" used as noun). Avoid assumptions like "I'm a girl, so..." and make sentences more grammatical and cohesive using linking words. Provide one or two specific examples or reasons.

示例: Yes, I often buy shoes online, especially in summer. For instance, I usually order sandals and running shoes because I walk and run more in warm weather, so I need lighter, more comfortable footwear.

建议: Good concise answer with a clear number and conversion. Improve by using more natural phrasing and adding a brief reason or comparison. Keep it one or two sentences and correct plural/noun forms ("kroner", not "kroners").

示例: I spend about 2,000 Norwegian kroner a year on shoes, which is roughly $200, because I only buy a couple of pairs annually.

建议: Your preference is clear but the answer is repetitive and contains errors and awkward phrasing ("comfer", doubled negatives). Give a direct topic sentence, explain briefly why using linking words, and provide a specific example or comparison to illustrate the shift in preference.

示例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes now because as I've grown older I value foot support more. For example, I used to wear high heels in my twenties, but now I choose sneakers or low-heeled shoes for everyday use.

× It's not my favorite activity, but of course I love to buy new clothes and shoes.

✓ It's not my favorite activity, but of course I love buying new clothes and shoes.

Use of 'love to buy' is not incorrect, but parallel and natural phrasing uses the gerund 'buying' after verbs of preference (like, love). Change improves fluency and parallelism.

× Especially in the summertime I like to buy some new sandals and jogging.

✓ Especially in the summertime I like to buy some new sandals and jogging shoes.

The word 'jogging' alone is a verb or gerund; a noun compound 'jogging shoes' is needed. This fixes a missing noun and completes the noun phrase.

× Jogging shoes because you walk more out when it's good weather.

✓ I buy jogging shoes because I walk outside more when the weather is good.

Original is a sentence fragment and lacks a subject and correct word order. Add subject 'I', use 'buy' to connect to previous idea, 'walk outside' is correct collocation, and 'the weather is good' is standard phrasing.

× I guess I use around 2000 Norwegian kroners.

✓ I guess I spend around 2000 Norwegian kroner.

The plural of 'kroner' is 'kroner' not 'kroners'. Also use 'spend' rather than 'use' for money, and 'around' fits with an approximate amount.

× It's like $200 a year on shoes, not more than that.

✓ It's about $200 a year on shoes, not more than that.

'Like' is informal when estimating amounts; 'about' is more appropriate. No article error severe, but wording improved for formality and clarity.

× As I have grown older, I choose comfer always over fashion now and I could never never prefer to have comfortable shoes again.

✓ As I have grown older, I always choose comfort over fashion now and I would never prefer fashion over comfort again.

Multiple issues: 'comfer' is misspelling of 'comfort', word order 'choose comfort always' should be 'always choose comfort', double 'never never' is redundant, and 'could never prefer to have comfortable shoes again' is awkward; 'would never prefer fashion over comfort again' expresses intended meaning correctly.

× I did that. I did that a lot in my young days but not now.

✓ I did that a lot in my younger days, but not now.

Combine sentences for fluency and use 'younger days' (or 'when I was young') is more natural. 'Young days' is nonstandard; 'younger days' or 'when I was younger' preferred.