鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many irrelevant or incorrect words (e.g., “colors of food”, “swimming”, “tea”). Give a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then one or two clear supporting details about frequency and reasons. Use correct vocabulary related to shoes and keep to 2–3 sentences. For example, state whether you enjoy buying shoes, how often (weekly, monthly, yearly), and one reason why.

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially in spring when new styles arrive. I usually buy new shoes two or three times a year because I like updating my outfits and replacing worn pairs.

建议: Your response communicates the main idea but has grammar problems and repetition. Improve sentence structure, avoid repetition, and use linking words for coherence. Mention one advantage and one minor disadvantage of online shopping, and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it is more convenient and offers a wider selection of styles and colors. Although you cannot try them on before buying, most stores have easy return policies, so I feel comfortable ordering online.

建议: The answer is confusing and contains irrelevant numbers and phrases. Give a clear estimate in one sentence, using a realistic currency and simple phrasing. If necessary, add one brief reason for the amount spent. Keep it concise and coherent.

示例: I usually spend about 50 to 100 euros on a pair of shoes, and I might buy two or three pairs a year depending on sales and needs.

建议: The answer expresses preference but is unclear and contains many errors. State your preference clearly in one topic sentence, then give one specific reason using a linking word (e.g., because, although). Avoid irrelevant metaphors and keep to 2–3 simple sentences.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because comfort matters for walking and work. Although I like attractive designs, I will always choose comfort if I have to wear them for long periods.

× I love spring shoes and and all that.

✓ I love spring shoes and all that.

There is a repeated word 'and and' which is a typographical/repetition error affecting sentence fluency. Remove the duplicate 'and' to correct the sentence. Suggestion: read aloud to detect repeated words.

× Having lots of colors of food, it gives you a chance to make more outfits.

✓ Having lots of colors of footwear gives you a chance to make more outfits.

The phrase 'colors of food' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'colors of footwear' or 'colors of shoes'. Also the pronoun 'it' is vague. Replace 'food' with 'footwear' and make the subject clear. Suggestion: use precise nouns that match the topic.

× I really like probably swimming when I try to buy tea or tea times in a year.

✓ I really like buying shoes, probably two or three times a year.

The original sentence mixes unrelated words ('swimming', 'tea') and has disordered structure. It seems the speaker intended to state frequency of buying shoes. Reconstruct sentence with correct verb ('buying'), quantifier ('two or three times a year') and remove unrelated words. Suggestion: plan the intended meaning before speaking and use simple structures for frequency.

× Yes, mostly I prefer to buy the shoes online because it's too much easier.

✓ Yes, I mostly prefer to buy shoes online because it is much easier.

'Too much easier' is ungrammatical; use 'much easier' or 'easier' instead. Also 'the shoes' is unnecessarily specific; use 'shoes' general plural. Suggestion: use 'much easier' for emphasis and avoid 'too much' before comparatives.

× You can not able to, you're not able to try that, but I can send them back and buy it other side.

✓ You cannot try them on, but I can send them back and buy them elsewhere.

Mixing 'cannot able to' is redundant and incorrect. Use 'cannot' or 'are not able to'. 'Try that' should be 'try them on' for shoes. 'Buy it other side' is ungrammatical; use 'elsewhere' and maintain plural agreement 'them'. Suggestion: use correct verb phrases ('try them on') and ensure pronoun-number agreement.

× It's too much easier to see all the types and the colours in ads one time.

✓ It's much easier to see all the types and colours in one place online.

'Too much easier' is incorrect; use 'much easier'. 'In ads one time' is unclear; likely 'in one place' or 'on one site'. Rephrase for clarity and naturalness. Suggestion: prefer concise prepositional phrases like 'in one place' or 'on a website'.

× It's cool.

✓ It's cool.

This short sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. Kept for completeness.

× In SA Likes to Talk $7000.

✓ In Saudi Arabia I spend about $7,000 on shoes.

Original fragment is unintelligible. Likely the speaker meant a country and amount. Reconstructed to 'In Saudi Arabia I spend about $7,000 on shoes.' Suggestion: use complete clause with subject and verb when mentioning spending.

× It gets more expensive as the year passed.

✓ It has become more expensive as the years have passed.

Mixing present 'gets' with past 'passed' is incorrect. Use present perfect 'has become' and 'have passed' to indicate change over time. Suggestion: match tense when describing trends: use present perfect for changes up to now.

× Uh so if I buy 2 * a minute I'll spend like 10 or 12,006 euros?

✓ So if I buy two pairs a month, I'll spend about 10 or 12,000 euros a year.

Original contains symbols and unlikely numbers; '2 * a minute' is nonsensical. Probably meant 'two pairs a month' leading to annual total '10,000 or 12,000 euros.' Use words for numbers under ten and round amounts consistently. Suggestion: state units clearly (pairs, month, year) and use realistic numerals.

× I prefer a shoebox gives me a bottle of them.

✓ I prefer shoes that give me support and comfort.

Original is nonsensical: 'shoebox gives me a bottle of them' makes no sense. Likely intended preference for supportive shoes. Rephrase to a clear adjective clause describing preference. Suggestion: express preferences with 'I prefer shoes that...' followed by clear attributes.

× I really don't like it the shoe if it's uncomfortable and and the look is not important.

✓ I really don't like a shoe if it's uncomfortable, and the look is not important to me.

Word order 'it the shoe' is incorrect; correct to 'a shoe'. Duplicate 'and and' removed. Add 'to me' to clarify 'not important'. Suggestion: keep noun phrase order 'a/the + noun' and avoid duplicated conjunctions.

× If she's incredibly so I would you would like them to be good and be confident.

✓ If a shoe is uncomfortable, I would not like it; I want shoes that make me feel good and confident.

Original sentence has pronoun confusion and unclear meaning. 'She's' used for shoe is incorrect; use 'a shoe' or 'it'. Remove duplicated 'would you would'. Clarify desire for shoes that make the speaker feel confident. Suggestion: refer to objects with 'it' and keep conditional clauses clear: 'If X, I would Y.'