鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and word choice (e.g. “I don’t buy shoes very often — about twice a year”), and give one specific reason with a linking phrase. Avoid redundant phrases and incorrect collocations like “spend much on quality” and “wear made shoes.”

示例: I do like buying shoes, but I only buy them about twice a year. Because I value durability, I usually spend more on high-quality leather or well-made shoes that will last a long time.

建议: Correct word choice and simplify sentences. Use a clear topic sentence (“Yes, I usually buy shoes online.”), then support it with two specific reasons connected by linking words like “because” and “so.” Fix awkward phrases such as “board shoes” and “the return the shoes.”

示例: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because there are far more styles and sizes to choose from, and returns are easy. For example, I often order two sizes and return the pair that doesn't fit.

建议: Give a clear amount and explain with linked reasons. Fix grammar and phrasing: say “I usually spend about CN¥300” and use connectors like “because” and “however.” Clarify the part about parents (e.g. “my parents might buy them for me”).

示例: I usually spend about CN¥300 on a pair of shoes because I'm a student and I have a limited budget. However, if I find a high-quality or special pair I really like, my parents might help me pay for it.

建议: Be concise and use correct grammar. Start with a direct answer, then give a specific example linked by “for example” or “because.” Correct mistakes like “they're haunts my feet” and unclear ending. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I value being able to walk and stand for long periods. For example, I bought fashionable shoes last month that looked great in photos but caused blisters and pain, so I won't wear them often.

× Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy shoes very often, almost twice a year because I prefer to spend much on quality.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often, maybe about twice a year because I prefer to spend more on quality.

Pronoun: 'shoes' repeated is better replaced with object pronoun 'them' for natural English. Word choice: 'much' is incorrect here; 'more' is the correct comparative to express a greater amount. Added 'maybe about' to sound natural when giving a frequency estimate.

× I prefer to buy the wear made shoes which will last for a long time.

✓ I prefer to buy well-made shoes that will last a long time.

Word form: 'wear made' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'well-made'. Relative clause: use 'that' for essential clauses with things. Remove 'for' before 'a long time' as idiomatic English uses 'last a long time'.

× Yes, I always board shoes online.

✓ Yes, I always buy shoes online.

Wrong verb: 'board' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'buy'. No continuous form needed; simple present 'buy' expresses habitual action.

× In the past I used to go to the shopping mall to try the shoes in person but now I find there are more options online so and the return the shoes is straightforward so I prefer shopping online now.

✓ In the past I used to go to the shopping mall to try the shoes in person, but now I find there are more options online and returning shoes is straightforward, so I prefer shopping online.

Sentence structure: remove redundant 'so' and fix conjunctions. Use gerund/noun form 'returning shoes' instead of 'the return the shoes'. Ensure commas separate clauses. Verb agreement: 'returning shoes is' is correct with singular gerund subject.

× Maybe CN¥300 is acceptable because I'm still a student I don't have much more money on the shoes, but if I really like it or it is good in quality I may be invited my parents to buy it.

✓ Maybe CN¥300 is acceptable because I'm still a student and I don't have much money for shoes, but if I really like a pair or it is good quality I may ask my parents to buy it for me.

Run-on sentence fixed with 'and'. Quantifier: 'much more money' is wrong; use 'much money' or 'a lot of money'. Preposition: use 'for shoes' rather than 'on the shoes'. 'May be invited my parents' is incorrect; use 'may ask my parents' and add 'for me' to indicate beneficiary.

× Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?

✓ Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?

No grammatical error found matching the provided list; sentence is correct as is. No correction necessary.

× I prefer comfortable shoes. I bought a pair of fashionable shoes last month which looked very beautiful on photos but they are completely a nightmare because they're haunts my feet.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes. I bought a pair of fashionable shoes last month that looked very nice in photos, but they were a complete nightmare because they hurt my feet.

Relative pronoun: 'that' is preferable for essential clauses. Word choice: 'very beautiful on photos' -> 'very nice in photos'. Tense and agreement: 'they are completely a nightmare' should be past 'they were a complete nightmare' because buying happened in the past. Verb: 'haunts my feet' is wrong; 'hurt my feet' correctly describes physical pain. Article: 'a complete nightmare' is correct noun phrase.

× So maybe comfortable is shoes is my.

✓ So maybe comfortable shoes are better for me.

Word order and structure were incorrect. Correct subject 'comfortable shoes' with plural verb 'are'. Use 'better for me' to express preference. Removed extraneous words and fixed grammar and meaning.