规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect naturalness. Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and be concise. For example, instead of 'there was 1 controlling our hairlines and our hairstyle,' say 'there was a rule controlling hairstyles.'

示例: Yes, when I was in high school, there were many rules to manage student behavior. For instance, one rule required boys to keep their hair very short, almost shaved, while girls had to keep their hair above the neck.

建议: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but using informal contractions like 'cause' reduces formality. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repetition. For example, use 'because' instead of 'cause' and add linking phrases like 'for example' or 'in addition.'

示例: I think it depends on the students' age. For example, younger students in elementary or early middle school can benefit from more rules because these help them learn self-control and respect for others.

建议: Your answer provides good content but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. For instance, 'he is a very excellent expertise' is incorrect. Use 'he is an expert' or 'he has excellent expertise.' Also, try to use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: Yes, I remember my middle school Chinese teacher was very dedicated and experienced. He taught for 30 years, and from his classes, we could tell he was an expert in traditional Chinese literature.

建议: Your answer expresses your opinion clearly but contains grammatical errors and awkward word choices like 'prisoning.' Use 'restricting' instead. Also, avoid repeating the same idea twice. Try to use linking words to connect your points logically.

示例: I prefer fewer rules at school because my high school had too many, which I believe restricted students' imagination and creativity.

建议: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and some awkward phrasing. For example, 'taught one class of our class' is redundant. Also, avoid vague expressions like 'a little bit brutal' and be more precise. Use past tense consistently and improve sentence flow with linking words.

示例: Yes, I had a very strict PE teacher in middle school. He was sometimes harsh because if students couldn't finish exercises, he would punish them physically.

建议: Your answer is clear but contains a typo ('roof free' instead of 'rule-free') and some awkward phrasing. Try to correct typos and use more natural expressions. Also, you can briefly explain your reason to enrich your answer.

示例: No, I wouldn't like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school. Actually, it's not about the rules; I simply don't want to become a teacher because I don't enjoy teaching.

× That rule required every boy student took a super short hair that is almost touching in your skull.

✓ That rule required every boy student to have super short hair that almost touches the skull.

The verb 'took' is incorrect here because the sentence is describing a requirement, not a past action. The correct form is the infinitive 'to have' to express the requirement. Also, 'a super short hair' is incorrect; 'hair' is uncountable, so no article 'a' is needed, and 'super short hair' is the correct phrase. 'Almost touching in your skull' should be 'almost touches the skull' for correct preposition and subject agreement.

× Well for girls you need to keep your hair shorter than your like shorter to above your neck.

✓ Well, for girls, you need to keep your hair shorter, like shorter than above your neck.

The phrase 'shorter than your like shorter to above your neck' is confusing and incorrect. The preposition 'to' is incorrect here; 'above your neck' is the correct phrase. Also, the sentence needs commas for clarity. The phrase 'like shorter than above your neck' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I remember there was 1 controlling our hairlines and our hairstyle.

✓ I remember there was one rule controlling our hairlines and our hairstyles.

The sentence lacks the noun 'rule' after '1' (one). Also, 'hairstyle' should be plural 'hairstyles' to match 'hairlines' and because it refers to multiple students. The definite article 'the' is not necessary here.

× That rule required every boy student took a super short hair that is almost touching in your skull.

✓ That rule required every boy student to have super short hair that almost touches the skull.

The pronoun 'your' is incorrectly used when referring generally to students. It should be 'the' skull to refer to the head in general. Also, 'took' is incorrect as explained earlier.

× Well for girls you need to keep your hair shorter than your like shorter to above your neck.

✓ Well, for girls, you need to keep your hair shorter, like shorter than above your neck.

The pronoun 'your' is used inconsistently and confusingly. It should be 'your hair' when addressing the listener, but 'like shorter than above your neck' is awkward. The sentence is better rephrased for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× I remember when I was in middle school, our Chinese teacher was a very dedicated, experienced teacher who spent 30 years teaching middle school Chinese, and listening to his class, we can tell that he is a very excellent expertise in traditional Chinese.

✓ I remember when I was in middle school, our Chinese teacher was a very dedicated, experienced teacher who spent 30 years teaching middle school Chinese, and listening to his class, we could tell that he has excellent expertise in traditional Chinese.

The phrase 'a very excellent expertise' is incorrect because 'expertise' is an uncountable noun and does not take 'a' or 'very' directly. Also, 'he is' should be 'he has' to correctly express possession of expertise. 'We can tell' should be 'we could tell' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I prefer to have fewer rules at a school because my high school had too many rules and I believe those rules were too restrictive and even prisoning students imagination and creativity.

✓ I prefer to have fewer rules at school because my high school had too many rules and I believe those rules were too restrictive and even imprison students' imagination and creativity.

The phrase 'prisoning students imagination' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'imprison' and it should be followed by the possessive form 'students' imagination'. Also, 'at a school' is better as 'at school' when speaking generally.

× Yes, there was once a very strict PE teacher who taught one class of our class when I was in middle school.

✓ Yes, there was once a very strict PE teacher who taught our class when I was in middle school.

The phrase 'taught one class of our class' is redundant and awkward. It should be simplified to 'taught our class'. The past tense 'taught' is correct here.

× because when there were students who cannot finish those exercises, he would kick those students.

✓ because when there were students who could not finish those exercises, he would kick those students.

The modal verb 'cannot' is present tense, but the sentence context is past tense ('there were'). It should be 'could not' to maintain past tense consistency.

× No, I don't want to work as a teacher in a roof free school and it is not about rules, it's just personally I don't want to become a teacher.

✓ No, I don't want to work as a teacher in a rule-free school and it's not about rules; it's just that personally I don't want to become a teacher.

The phrase 'roof free school' is a typo and should be 'rule-free school'. Also, the sentence needs better punctuation and phrasing for clarity: 'it's just personally I don't want' should be 'it's just that personally I don't want'.