规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, provide specific examples or reasons to support your opinion, and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

示例: Yes, there are several rules at my school, such as wearing uniforms and being punctual. However, some rules seem unnecessary and make students feel stressed. For example, strict dress codes sometimes limit our comfort. Overall, I think rules should be reasonable to help students focus on learning.

建议: Your answer has some good points but needs better structure and clearer linking words. Start with a direct answer, then explain with specific reasons. Use linking words like 'however' or 'on the other hand' to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I believe that good rules can benefit students by promoting discipline and good behaviour. However, too many irrelevant rules may cause stress and confusion. Therefore, schools should focus on important rules that help students grow academically and personally.

建议: Your answer needs clearer sentence structure and grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific examples of how the teacher was dedicated. Avoid repetition and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent.

示例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher in 10th grade. She always encouraged me and stood up against unfair treatment by other teachers. Her support boosted my confidence and helped me perform better in studies.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear opinion. Use linking words to explain your reasons and avoid unrelated or confusing statements.

示例: I prefer fewer rules at school because too many rules can cause stress among students. While some rules are necessary for discipline, excessive restrictions may harm students' mental health and creativity.

建议: Your answer is somewhat confusing and lacks coherence. Try to clearly describe your experience with strict teachers, using proper grammar and linking words. Keep your answer concise and relevant to the question.

示例: Yes, I have had strict teachers who focused mainly on completing the syllabus. Their strictness sometimes made students afraid, which affected our learning experience negatively.

建议: Your answer has a good idea but needs clearer expression and better grammar. Start with a direct answer, then explain your reasons with specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I would like to work in a rule-free school because I believe strict rules can harm students' happiness and creativity. I want to help students develop good personalities in a relaxed and supportive environment.

× schools have so many irrelevant rules

✓ schools have so many irrelevant rules

No correction needed here as 'schools' is plural and 'rules' is plural, which is correct.

× I look back to my old school days I realize that I am going through a toxic school life because of the teachers was very toxic and they are discriminated children in all the way and they prefer more in cast and I am in a.

✓ When I look back to my old school days, I realize that I went through a toxic school life because the teachers were very toxic, they discriminated against children in every way, and they preferred some castes more than others.

The original sentence is a run-on and contains multiple grammar errors including tense inconsistency and incorrect verb forms. Breaking it into clearer sentences and correcting verb tenses improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× they are discriminated children in all the way

✓ they discriminated against children in every way

The verb 'discriminate' requires the preposition 'against' when referring to the object of discrimination. Also, 'in all the way' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in every way'.

× there is lots of irrelevant rules

✓ there are lots of irrelevant rules

'Rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× because of the students are struggling in most of relevant rules

✓ because the students are struggling with most of the relevant rules

The phrase 'because of the students are' is incorrect; 'because' should be followed by a clause without 'of'. Also, 'struggling in' should be 'struggling with' and 'most of relevant rules' needs the definite article 'the' before 'relevant rules'.

× good rules impact on students

✓ good rules impact students

The verb 'impact' does not require the preposition 'on' when used transitively; 'impact students' is correct.

× she openly tell me other teachers are gossiping about students and discriminated about students

✓ she openly told me other teachers were gossiping about students and discriminating against students

The verb 'tell' should be in past tense 'told' to match the past context. Also, 'discriminated about students' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'discriminating against students'.

× she openly tell me other teachers are gossiping about students

✓ she openly told me other teachers were gossiping about students

The reporting verb 'tell' should be in past tense 'told' and the reported speech should be in past continuous 'were gossiping' to maintain tense consistency.

× they tell me I'm good student and she is tell the truth about all the student

✓ she told me I'm a good student and she told the truth about all the students

Pronouns are inconsistent; 'they' should be 'she' to refer to the same teacher. Also, 'is tell' is incorrect; it should be 'told'. 'Student' should be plural 'students'.

× she was a real human being also

✓ she was a real human being as well

No plural issue here, but 'also' is better replaced with 'as well' for smoother expression.

× over rules in a school maker children more stressed

✓ too many rules in a school make children more stressed

'Over rules' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'too many rules'. Also, 'maker' should be 'make' to agree with plural subject 'rules'.

× they are committed to so many suicides and so many attempts

✓ there are so many suicides and so many attempts

The phrase 'they are committed to suicides' is incorrect; 'committed suicide' is a phrase for the act, but here the sentence refers to occurrences, so 'there are' is appropriate.

× this teacher just want to finish their portions

✓ this teacher just wants to finish her portions

The subject 'this teacher' is singular, so the verb should be 'wants' and the pronoun should be singular 'her'.

× she don't have anything to do in a school

✓ she doesn't have anything to do in school

For third person singular, 'do not' contracts to 'doesn't', not 'don't'. Also, 'in a school' is better as 'in school'.

× I want to show a toxic teachers to how to make children's happy

✓ I want to show toxic teachers how to make children happy

'Show a toxic teachers to how' is incorrect; it should be 'show toxic teachers how'. Also, 'children's happy' is incorrect; it should be 'children happy'.

× I have a lots of strict teachers

✓ I have lots of strict teachers

'A lots' is incorrect; 'lots' is plural and does not take 'a'.