规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하지만, 현재 상황과 과거 상황을 구분하는 연결어 사용이 부족합니다. 또한, 문장 간 연결이 더 부드럽게 이루어지도록 노력하세요.

示例: I'm not currently a student, so I don't attend school anymore. However, when I was in high school, there were strict rules regarding school uniforms and hairstyles. For instance, my skirt had to be no shorter than my knees, and my hairstyle needed to be neat.

建议: 문법 오류와 단어 선택에 주의하세요. 또한, 이유를 설명할 때 더 구체적인 예시와 연결어를 사용하여 답변을 풍부하게 만드세요.

示例: I think it depends on the situation because some rules are important for maintaining discipline; however, others can limit students' creativity. For example, hairstyles allow students to express themselves freely.

建议: 문장이 너무 길고 연결어가 부족하여 이해하기 어렵습니다. 문장을 나누고 적절한 연결어를 사용하여 명확하게 표현하세요.

示例: Yes, when I was in high school, I had a teacher with a warm heart. He was a patient listener and always cared about students' problems. However, since he was a former soldier, sometimes he was very strict.

建议: 답변이 명확하고 구체적이지만, 문장 간 연결어를 추가하여 더 자연스럽게 만드세요.

示例: I prefer to have fewer regulations because too many rules can make students less spontaneous and creative. For example, when everyone is under strict rules, it becomes difficult for them to come up with new ideas.

建议: 문법 오류와 문장 구조에 주의하세요. 또한, 이유를 설명할 때 더 명확한 연결어를 사용하세요.

示例: Yes, when I was in middle school, my biology teacher was quite demanding. She told us to sit up straight and pick up garbage, which I thought was unrelated to biology. It was really stressful.

建议: 답변이 명확하지만, 문장 간 연결어를 추가하여 더 자연스럽고 논리적으로 만드세요.

示例: To be honest, I wouldn't want to work in a school without strict rules because it would be hard to maintain discipline and order. For example, students might do whatever they want and ignore the teacher.

× some rules are important to maintain discipline while others makes students less creative

✓ some rules are important to maintain discipline while others make students less creative

주어 'others'는 복수형이므로 동사도 복수형 'make'를 사용해야 합니다. 단수형 동사 'makes'는 주어와 일치하지 않아 오류입니다.

× I think hairstyle is a great way to express themselves

✓ I think hairstyle is a great way to express oneself

주어가 단수형 'hairstyle'이므로 대명사도 단수형 'oneself'를 사용해야 합니다. 복수형 'themselves'는 주어와 일치하지 않습니다.

× Yes, when I was in high school I met a teacher who had a really warm heart he was a really good listener with patience he always cared about students problem however, he was a former soldier so sometimes he.

✓ Yes, when I was in high school, I met a teacher who had a really warm heart. He was a really good listener with patience. He always cared about students' problems. However, he was a former soldier, so sometimes he was strict.

원문은 여러 문장이 쉼표 없이 연결되어 있어 문장 구조가 잘못되었습니다. 문장을 적절히 나누고 소유격('students' problems')과 동사 누락('he was strict')을 보완해야 합니다.

× students problem

✓ students' problems

'students' problems'는 학생들의 문제들을 의미하므로 복수형 명사 'problems'와 소유격 표시('students'')가 필요합니다. 단수형 'problem'은 부적절합니다.

× too many rules make students less spontaneous and creative

✓ too many rules make students less spontaneous and creative

이 문장은 문법적으로 올바릅니다. 'rules'가 복수형이므로 동사 'make'도 복수형으로 맞춰져 있습니다.

× if they are all under the same strict situations

✓ if they are all under the same strict situation

'situation'은 보통 단수로 사용되며, 'strict situation'이 적절한 표현입니다. 복수형 'situations'는 문맥상 부적절합니다.

× I thought that were not related to biology at all

✓ I thought that was not related to biology at all

'that'은 단수 주어이므로 동사도 단수형 'was'를 사용해야 합니다. 복수형 'were'는 주어와 일치하지 않습니다.

× students will always do whatever they want and ignore teacher

✓ students will always do whatever they want and ignore the teacher

'teacher' 앞에 정관사 'the'가 필요합니다. 또한, 'ignore teacher'는 부자연스러우므로 'ignore the teacher'가 올바른 표현입니다.