规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“roots”应为“rules”，“electronic bikes is”应为“electronic bikes are”，表达不够自然。建议注意主谓一致，使用正确词汇，并简洁表达。

示例: Yes, there are many rules at my school to regulate student behavior. For example, electronic bikes are not allowed on campus to prevent accidents, and playing with fire is strictly prohibited to ensure safety.

建议: 回答中有语法错误，如“a more safer”应为“a safer”，句子结构不完整且重复。建议简化句子，避免重复，注意语法准确。

示例: Yes, I believe more rules can create a safer environment for students, allowing them to concentrate better on their studies and avoid accidents.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，如“take joys and competition”不合适。建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，表达清楚老师的特点。

示例: Yes, I have a very dedicated teacher who teaches electronic circuits. She focuses on experimental projects, writes many research papers, and often participates in competitions with students, winning several awards.

建议: 回答中有语法和表达不自然的问题，如“more rules as good”不正确，且重复使用“uh”。建议简洁明了表达观点，避免口头语。

示例: I prefer having more rules at school because they ensure safety and help me focus better on my studies, which can lead to good grades and a bright future.

建议: 回答中语法错误明显，如“home forks”应为“homework”，“she want me want us”表达混乱。建议注意语法和词汇准确，表达清晰。

示例: Yes, I have a very strict teacher who is the head of our department. She always looks serious and is very demanding about our homework and studies because she wants us to have a promising future.

建议: 回答中表达不够流畅，语法错误如“real free school”应为“rule-free school”，且句子结构不完整。建议使用正确词汇，简洁表达观点。

示例: I would not like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because students might not respect teachers. Also, I don't think I am patient enough to take good care of students.

× Yes, there are a lot of roots in my schools to regulate student behaviors.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of rules in my school to regulate student behavior.

这里“roots”应为“rules”，且“schools”应为单数“school”，因为指的是学生所在的单一学校；“behaviors”通常用不可数形式“behavior”。

× For example, electronic bikes is not allowed to appear in campus to avoid some unnecessary accident which will make the student get hurt and also the fire is not allowed to play on the dawn.

✓ For example, electronic bikes are not allowed on campus to avoid unnecessary accidents which could hurt students, and also fire is not allowed to be used at dawn.

“bikes”是复数，谓语动词应使用“are”；“appear in campus”表达不自然，改为“allowed on campus”；“accident”应为复数“accidents”；“the student get hurt”应改为“students get hurt”；“fire is not allowed to play on the dawn”表达错误，改为“fire is not allowed to be used at dawn”。

× electronic bikes is not allowed to appear in campus

✓ electronic bikes are not allowed on campus

“appear in campus”用法不当，正确搭配是“allowed on campus”，表示“允许在校园内”。

× more rules can help students to live a more safer environment which can help them to focus on their study and also it can help them to avoid the possibility to get her or have some other accidents and.

✓ More rules can help students live in a safer environment which can help them focus on their studies and also help them avoid the possibility of getting hurt or having other accidents.

“a more safer”中“more”和“safer”重复表达比较级，应去掉“more”；“study”应为复数“studies”；“get her”应为“getting hurt”；句尾“and”多余。

× she always focus on her uh, experiment projects and write a lot of thesis and always she also take joys and competition with the student and won a lot of prize.

✓ She always focuses on her experiment projects and writes a lot of theses, and she also participates in competitions with the students and has won a lot of prizes.

主语是第三人称单数，动词应加-s；“write a lot of thesis”中“thesis”复数为“theses”；“take joys and competition”表达错误，改为“participates in competitions”；“won a lot of prize”应为“has won a lot of prizes”。

× won a lot of prize.

✓ won a lot of prizes.

“prize”应为复数形式“prizes”，因为“a lot of”后面接可数名词复数。

× I prefer to have more rules as good because I see, uh, it will ensure my safety and the security and also, uh, this group can help me, uh, more focus on my study to get a high point and have a prospective future.

✓ I prefer to have more rules because I think they will ensure my safety and security, and also help me focus more on my studies to get high scores and have a promising future.

“as good”用法错误，应去掉；“this group”表达不清，改为“they”；“more focus”应为“focus more”；“get a high point”应为“get high scores”；“prospective future”用词不当，改为“promising future”。

× she want me want us to have a promising future.

✓ she wants us to have a promising future.

“she want me want us”重复且错误，应为“she wants us”；动词需加-s以符合第三人称单数。

× And also I don't want to be a teacher because I see I'm not a very patient UH person to have a lot of care to my students.

✓ And also I don't want to be a teacher because I see I'm not a very patient person to take care of my students.

“have a lot of care to”表达错误，应为“take care of”；“UH”是口语填充词，应去掉。