规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且内容重复。建议简化句子结构，避免重复比较，并且明确表达规则内容。

示例: At my university, the rules are not very strict. For example, we are required to park shared bicycles in designated areas to keep the campus tidy.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，如"forbidden to aware freely"。建议使用更准确的表达，并且增加连接词使句子更连贯。

示例: No, I don't think more rules are beneficial because too many rules can suppress students' individuality. This is important since they need freedom to think and develop their own personalities.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，如"very clear carefully"。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意句子结构。

示例: Yes, I had a dedicated teacher who taught criminal law. He carefully read my essays and gave me helpful feedback. Moreover, his lessons were interesting because he used vivid examples to help us understand.

建议: 回答中有发音错误（rose应为rules）和语法错误。建议注意发音和句子结构，同时使用连接词使表达更流畅。

示例: I prefer fewer rules because children can develop freely without many restrictions, which is important for their future. However, some rules, like wearing uniforms, are essential to prevent comparisons among students.

建议: 回答内容具体，但句子较长且缺少连接词。建议分句并使用连接词，使表达更清晰自然。

示例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher in pre-primary school. She asked us to cut our nails and checked them every week, which I found unnecessary and boring. She also required us to wear white shoes.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰，如"effort consuming"和"obey the role"。建议使用正确词汇和句子结构，表达更准确。

示例: I wouldn't like to work in a school without rules because it would be very challenging. Many students might not follow instructions, making communication difficult and causing a lot of stress for me.

× Because I am learning in the university now, so the rules are less strict compared with university, compared with primary schools or junior high schools.

✓ Because I am studying at the university now, the rules are less strict compared with those at primary schools or junior high schools.

句子中使用了“Because”和“so”同时连接，造成结构重复，应去掉“so”。另外，“learning in the university”应改为“studying at the university”，更符合英语表达习惯。

× Because I am learning in the university now, so the rules are less strict compared with university, compared with primary schools or junior high schools.

✓ Because I am studying at the university now, the rules are less strict compared with those at primary schools or junior high schools.

“learning in the university”中的介词应为“at”，表示在某个学校学习。

× And the only rules are that we should place our shared bicycles on the right places so that it will not be very tidy.

✓ And the only rule is that we should place our shared bicycles in the right places so that it will be very tidy.

“rules”应为单数“rule”，因为后面只提到一个规则；“on the right places”应改为“in the right places”；“so that it will not be very tidy”表达与上下文不符，应改为“so that it will be very tidy”。

× He read my essays very clear carefully and gave me comments on how can I improve it.

✓ He read my essays very clearly and gave me comments on how I can improve them.

“clear”应为副词“clearly”修饰动词“read”；“how can I improve it”语序错误，陈述句应为“how I can improve it”；“essays”复数，指代时应使用“them”。

× He read my essays very clear carefully and gave me comments on how can I improve it.

✓ He read my essays very clearly and gave me comments on how I can improve them.

“clear”应为副词“clearly”修饰动词；“carefully”位置应靠近动词，且“very clearly”已表达程度，避免重复。

× He uses many vivid examples for our understanding well.

✓ He uses many vivid examples to help us understand well.

“for our understanding well”表达不自然，应改为“to help us understand well”。

× I prefer to have less rose because I think, uh, with less rose, children can develop themselves freely without restriction, which is very important for their future development.

✓ I prefer to have fewer rules because I think, uh, with fewer rules, children can develop themselves freely without restriction, which is very important for their future development.

“rose”应为“rules”；“less”用于不可数名词，规则是可数名词，应使用“fewer”。

× But also there are some rules very essential, such as wearing the uniform that can avoid comparing with other students.

✓ But there are also some essential rules, such as wearing the uniform, which can avoid comparisons among students.

“very essential”形容词顺序错误，应为“essential rules”；“avoid comparing with other students”表达不准确，应改为“avoid comparisons among students”。

× Yes I had one to train my pre primary school and she even asked us to cut our nails and she would check it every week which I thought was unnecessary and boring.

✓ Yes, I had one teacher in my pre-primary school, and she even asked us to cut our nails and would check them every week, which I thought was unnecessary and boring.

“had one to train my pre primary school”表达不清，应改为“had one teacher in my pre-primary school”；“check it”应改为“check them”，指代“nails”。

× I don't think so because I think it will be very effort consuming because there are many adolescents who obey the role.

✓ I don't think so because I think it will be very time-consuming since there are many adolescents who disobey the rules.

“effort consuming”表达错误，应为“time-consuming”；“obey the role”应为“disobey the rules”，且“role”应为“rule”复数形式。

× So I will feel very difficult to communicate with them and I think it is a huge burden to my life.

✓ So I will find it very difficult to communicate with them, and I think it is a huge burden on my life.

“feel very difficult”应改为“find it very difficult”；“burden to my life”应改为“burden on my life”。