规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by directly stating the rules and their purpose. Avoid unclear phrases like 'tributes' and improve sentence structure for better understanding.

示例: Yes, there are several rules at my school to maintain discipline. For example, students are not allowed to bring mobile phones to class because they can distract from studying.

建议: Avoid repetition and improve coherence by using linking words. Make your opinion clear and support it with reasons or examples.

示例: Yes, I think more rules would benefit students because they help maintain discipline and good manners. For instance, rules about punctuality encourage students to be on time.

建议: Make your answer more natural by using past tense consistently and explaining why the teacher was dedicated with specific examples.

示例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher named Bishnu. Even during storms and heavy rain, he always came to teach us, which inspired us to work hard and improve our skills.

建议: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary to express your opinion clearly and provide reasons with linking words.

示例: I prefer having more rules at school because they help students develop discipline and good manners. As a result, students gain respect from teachers and peers.

建议: Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. Explain clearly how the teacher was strict with specific examples.

示例: Yes, I had a strict science teacher who gave extra homework as punishment if we did not complete our assignments on time.

建议: Clarify your answer by correcting vocabulary and grammar. Explain your opinion with reasons and use linking words for coherence.

示例: I would not like to work in a school without any rules because students might become undisciplined and it would be difficult to manage the class.

× The period of school is to be well developed, well disciplined, so there's a lot of tributes for students at my school time, like they were not allowed to bring any mobile phone which could harm to the study.

✓ The period of school is to be well developed and well disciplined, so there are a lot of rules for students at my school, like they were not allowed to bring any mobile phones which could harm their study.

The word 'tributes' is incorrect here; the correct plural noun is 'rules'. Also, 'mobile phone' should be plural 'mobile phones' to match the plural context. 'There is' should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun 'rules'. 'Harm to the study' should be 'harm their study' for correct preposition and possessive pronoun usage.

× The period of school is to be well developed, well disciplined, so there's a lot of tributes for students at my school time, like they were not allowed to bring any mobile phone which could harm to the study.

✓ The period of school is to be well developed and well disciplined, so there are a lot of rules for students at my school, like they were not allowed to bring any mobile phones which could harm their study.

The phrase 'harm to the study' is incorrect; 'harm' is a verb and should be followed directly by the object without 'to'. Also, 'at my school time' is awkward; 'at my school' is sufficient.

× There are numerous rules in the school that would benefit the student. Why? Because I personally believe that the students would be disciplined, well mannered if they are if the rules are well followed. So I believe that it would benefit the students.

✓ There are numerous rules in the school that would benefit the students. Why? Because I personally believe that the students would be disciplined and well-mannered if the rules are well followed. So I believe that it would benefit the students.

The word 'student' should be plural 'students' to match the plural subject 'rules' and context. Also, 'well mannered' should be hyphenated as 'well-mannered' when used as an adjective.

× Because I personally believe that the students would be disciplined, well mannered if they are if the rules are well followed.

✓ Because I personally believe that the students would be disciplined and well-mannered if the rules are well followed.

The phrase 'if they are if the rules are well followed' is redundant and incorrect. The correct conjunction to connect the adjectives is 'and', and the conditional clause should be 'if the rules are well followed'.

× The most dedicated teacher I really had in my school was my teacher.

✓ The most dedicated teacher I really had in my school was Mr. Bishnu.

The sentence is awkward and repetitive. Adding the teacher's name clarifies the sentence. The past tense 'had' is correct here.

× So when it was raining, it was storming. He will come to teach us, which made us talented.

✓ So when it was raining and storming, he would come to teach us, which made us talented.

The use of 'will' is incorrect for past habitual actions; 'would' is the correct modal verb to express repeated past actions. Also, combining 'raining' and 'storming' with 'and' improves sentence flow.

× More rules means, well, discipline, so I prefer to have more rules at my school.

✓ More rules mean, well, discipline, so I prefer to have more rules at my school.

The subject 'More rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'mean' instead of 'means' to agree in number.

× It would make you mannered, disciplined and respected.

✓ It would make you well-mannered, disciplined, and respected.

The adjective 'mannered' needs the adverb 'well' to form 'well-mannered'. Also, commas are added for clarity in the list.

× He belongs to science faculty so whenever the homework he give, if it wasn't completed he would punish you by giving more and more giving more homework for the next day.

✓ He belonged to the science faculty, so whenever he gave homework, if it wasn't completed, he would punish you by giving more and more homework for the next day.

The verb 'belongs' should be in past tense 'belonged' to match the past context. 'He give' should be 'he gave'. Also, 'science faculty' needs the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'more and more giving more homework' is redundant; simplified to 'giving more and more homework'.

× I would never work as a teacher in a rural free school when there are no rules to any students.

✓ I would never work as a teacher in a rule-free school when there are no rules for any students.

The phrase 'rural free school' is incorrect; it should be 'rule-free school'. Also, 'rules to any students' should be 'rules for any students' to use the correct preposition.

× I would never work as a teacher in a rural free school when there are no rules to any students. They would become unmanned.

✓ I would never work as a teacher in a rule-free school when there are no rules for any students. They would become undisciplined.

The word 'unmanned' is incorrect in this context; the correct adjective is 'undisciplined' to describe students lacking discipline. Also, 'rural free' should be 'rule-free'.