规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'student must' nên là 'students must' và 'my school have' nên là 'my school has'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lặp từ và thêm liên từ để câu trôi chảy.

示例: At my school, students must follow several important rules. For example, we have to wear uniforms every day and arrive on time for classes. If someone breaks these rules, the school imposes strict punishments to maintain discipline.

建议: Bạn cần chú ý đến ngữ pháp số nhiều và chia động từ cho đúng, ví dụ 'a student' nên là 'students' hoặc 'a student helps'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'student follow the rules are strictly'.

示例: In my opinion, students definitely benefit from having rules because they help develop self-discipline and a strong sense of responsibility. For instance, when students strictly follow rules, they learn to manage their time effectively and respect others.

建议: Bạn cần chú ý đến chia động từ số ít và số nhiều, ví dụ 'She always make' nên là 'She always makes'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh dùng từ không phù hợp như 'Or' ở đầu câu. Ngoài ra, nên dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

示例: My literature teacher is very dedicated and passionate about her subject. She always makes me feel comfortable and approachable because she is very friendly. Moreover, when I have difficulties with homework or studying, she patiently helps me understand the material.

建议: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'uh' và hoàn thiện câu cho đầy đủ ý nghĩa. Ngoài ra, cần chú ý ngữ pháp như 'can't prove' nên là 'can promote' và 'approve' nên là 'improve'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và đầy đủ ý.

示例: From my perspective, I prefer to keep the current rules because they promote a strong sense of responsibility and improve students' self-discipline. Having too many rules might make students feel more stressed and less motivated to attend school.

建议: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp như 'made us to hand' nên là 'made us hand', 'arrive to class' nên là 'arrive at class', và tránh dùng từ không cần thiết như 'umm'. Câu trả lời nên hoàn chỉnh và mạch lạc hơn, tránh câu bị ngắt quãng.

示例: When I was in secondary school, I had a very strict teacher who always made us hand in homework on time and arrive at class punctually. She believed that discipline is very important and helps us become more successful in the future.

建议: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng hơn. Ví dụ, 'do not have any rules' nên là 'does not have any rules', 'may not have a academic environment' nên là 'may not have an academic environment', và câu cuối nên được viết lại cho mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, tránh dùng từ không chính xác như 'prove' trong ngữ cảnh này.

示例: To be honest, I would not like to work in a school that does not have any rules because it may lack an academic environment and students might not be disciplined without clear guidelines.

× In my school, there are several important rules that student must follow.

✓ In my school, there are several important rules that students must follow.

The noun 'student' should be plural 'students' to agree with the plural subject 'rules' and the context indicating multiple students.

× If someone breaks the rules or my school have some strictly punishment for that student.

✓ If someone breaks the rules, my school has some strict punishments for that student.

The verb 'have' should be 'has' to agree with the singular subject 'my school'. Also, 'strictly punishment' is incorrect; it should be 'strict punishments' as 'punishment' is countable and 'strict' is the correct adjective.

× In my perspective, a student would definitely benefit from having rules because it help them develop self-discipline and a strong sense of responsibility.

✓ In my perspective, students would definitely benefit from having rules because they help them develop self-discipline and a strong sense of responsibility.

The singular 'a student' conflicts with the plural pronoun 'them'. Changing to plural 'students' and 'they' ensures agreement and clarity.

× For example, student follow the rules are strictly, they learn to manage their time and respect others.

✓ For example, students who follow the rules strictly learn to manage their time and respect others.

The subject 'student' should be plural 'students'. Also, 'are strictly' is incorrect; 'follow the rules strictly' is the correct adverb placement.

× She always make me feel comfortable and approachable and she's very friendly.

✓ She always makes me feel comfortable and approachable and she's very friendly.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the third person singular subject 'She'.

× Or when I have difficulties with my homework or studying, she patiently help me and understand the material.

✓ When I have difficulties with my homework or studying, she patiently helps me and understands the material.

The verbs 'help' and 'understand' should be 'helps' and 'understands' to agree with the singular subject 'she'.

× From my perspective, I prefer to uh keep the current rules which uh can't prove strong sense of responsibility among students and also approve their self-discipline.

✓ From my perspective, I prefer to keep the current rules which can promote a strong sense of responsibility among students and also improve their self-discipline.

The phrase 'can't prove strong sense' is incorrect; it should be 'can promote a strong sense' to convey the intended meaning. Also, 'approve' is incorrect here; 'improve' is appropriate.

× UH having too much rules may make students more stressed and less motivated when coming to.

✓ Having too many rules may make students more stressed and less motivated when coming to school.

'Too much rules' is incorrect; 'rules' is countable, so 'too many rules' is correct. Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'school' completes the thought.

× When I was in the secondary school, I had a very strict teacher who always made us to hand in the homework on time and arrive to class on time.

✓ When I was in secondary school, I had a very strict teacher who always made us hand in the homework on time and arrive at class on time.

The preposition 'to' after 'made us' is unnecessary and incorrect. Also, 'arrive to class' should be 'arrive at class'. 'The' before 'secondary school' is usually omitted.

× She believed that discipline is very important and make us more successful.

✓ She believed that discipline is very important and makes us more successful.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'discipline'.

× To be honest, I don't really want to learn in the school which do not have any rules because it may not have a academic environment and also cannot prove the students disciplined who don't have either.

✓ To be honest, I don't really want to study in a school which does not have any rules because it may not have an academic environment and also cannot promote student discipline.

'Learn in the school' is better as 'study in a school'. 'Do not have' should be 'does not have' to agree with singular 'school'. 'A academic' should be 'an academic' due to vowel sound. 'Cannot prove the students disciplined who don't have either' is unclear; 'cannot promote student discipline' is clearer and grammatically correct.