规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan efektif. Hindari pengulangan dan buat kalimat lebih jelas serta terstruktur dengan baik.

示例: Yes, there are many rules at my school. One interesting rule is that if a student is late three times, they will receive detention. I have experienced this, and it was unpleasant because it affected my ability to focus in class.

建议: Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan tata bahasa yang benar. Jelaskan pendapat dengan contoh atau alasan yang spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran.

示例: I think it depends on the type of rules. If the rules serve as a deterrent, they can help students become more responsible. However, if the rules are too strict or unfair, they might encourage bad behavior instead.

建议: Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan tata bahasa. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan ringkas serta tambahkan detail spesifik tentang dedikasi guru tersebut.

示例: Yes, I have. My math teacher, Mr. Irfan, is very dedicated. He not only teaches us math but also helps us become more diligent and responsible students.

建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat kalimat lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Jelaskan alasan dengan lebih spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran.

示例: It depends on the students. If they are rebellious, more rules might be necessary. But if students understand right from wrong, I prefer fewer rules because too many can be annoying.

建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat kalimat lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Hindari pengulangan dan jelaskan pengalaman dengan detail yang relevan.

示例: Yes, I had a strict teacher in high school. For example, we had to wear a tie as part of our uniform, and once I forgot to wear it, so I was punished.

建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat kalimat lebih jelas dan efektif. Jelaskan alasan dengan detail spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran.

示例: I would not want to be a teacher in a school without any rules because I believe rules help students become more responsible and respectful.

× Yes, there is a lot of rules in my school, but as I remembered, one of interesting rules is uh if we go late for school for three times we will get them detention.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of rules in my school, but as I remember, one of the interesting rules is if we go late to school three times, we will get detention.

The phrase 'there is a lot of rules' is incorrect because 'rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'as I remembered' should be 'as I remember' to match the present tense context. 'One of interesting rules' needs the definite article 'the' before 'interesting rules'. 'Go late for school for three times' should be 'go late to school three times' for correct preposition and phrasing. 'Get them detention' should be 'get detention' because 'detention' is uncountable here.

× And I ever got it and it feels worse because I cannot study properly in the class but in another.

✓ And I have ever gotten it and it felt worse because I could not study properly in the class but in another.

The phrase 'I ever got it' is awkward; 'I have ever gotten it' is better to express experience. 'It feels worse' should be 'it felt worse' to maintain past tense consistency. 'I cannot study' should be 'I could not study' to match past tense. The phrase 'but in another' is incomplete and unclear; it likely needs clarification or removal.

× If the rules are give the something that can be detergent deterrent for them makes it makes them more more responsible to them.

✓ If the rules give them something that can be a deterrent for them, it makes them more responsible.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun usage and awkward phrasing. 'Are give the something' is incorrect; it should be 'give them something'. 'Detergent deterrent' is likely a typo; 'deterrent' is correct. 'Makes it makes them more more responsible to them' is redundant and confusing; simplified to 'it makes them more responsible'.

× But if the rules are making them to be bad boy.

✓ But if the rules are making them be bad boys.

The phrase 'making them to be' is incorrect; 'making them be' is correct. Also, 'bad boy' should be plural 'bad boys' to agree with 'them'.

× Yes I do. His name is Mr. Irfan. He is my math teacher and also my home home classroom for grades at 11.

✓ Yes, I do. His name is Mr. Irfan. He is my math teacher and also my homeroom teacher for grade 11.

The phrase 'my home home classroom for grades at 11' is incorrect. It should be 'my homeroom teacher for grade 11'. 'Homeroom' is one word, and 'grade 11' is the correct way to express the grade level.

× He really dedicated to, to teach us to, to make us more, uh, diligence and more responsible to more I for what I, what we are, did it and this.

✓ He is really dedicated to teaching us to be more diligent and more responsible for what we do.

The original sentence has incorrect adjective/adverb usage and awkward phrasing. 'He really dedicated to' should be 'He is really dedicated to'. 'Diligence' is a noun; the adjective 'diligent' is needed here. 'More responsible to more I for what I, what we are, did it and this' is unclear and should be simplified to 'more responsible for what we do'.

× Well it depends, if the student are very rebellious, I will say teacher should give them more rules.

✓ Well, it depends. If the students are very rebellious, I would say teachers should give them more rules.

'Student' should be plural 'students' to agree with 'are'. 'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match the general statement. Also, 'I will say' is better as 'I would say' for conditional mood.

× But if the student is knowing what is wrong and what is what best and goods UH, I prefer UH too fewer rules of the school because it's very annoying.

✓ But if the students know what is wrong and what is best and good, I prefer to have fewer rules at school because it's very annoying.

'Student is knowing' is incorrect; 'students know' is correct. 'What is what best and goods' is incorrect; should be 'what is best and good'. 'Too fewer rules of the school' should be 'to have fewer rules at school'.

× Yes, I have back then in my school, especially as I'm not remember.

✓ Yes, I did back then in my school, especially as I don't remember.

'I have back then' is incorrect; 'I did back then' is correct for past tense. 'I'm not remember' should be 'I don't remember'.

× I'm not wrong. Remember in my high school where we have BB or British Council boys be great.

✓ If I'm not wrong, I remember in my high school where we had BB or British Council boys' grade.

The phrase 'I'm not wrong. Remember' is awkward; 'If I'm not wrong, I remember' is better. 'We have BB or British Council boys be great' is unclear; likely 'we had BB or British Council boys' grade' or similar.

× I mean we have to put a tie in the our clothes, but I I really forget to put it and I got punishment.

✓ I mean we have to wear a tie with our clothes, but I really forgot to wear it and I got punished.

'Put a tie in the our clothes' is incorrect; 'wear a tie with our clothes' is correct. 'Forget' should be past tense 'forgot'. 'Got punishment' should be 'got punished'.

× I would say I don't wanna be a teacher if I work in a free school without any rules because I think rules is have a good beneficial for students to help them to be more responsible more no and more respect to the.

✓ I would say I don't want to be a teacher if I worked in a free school without any rules because I think rules have good benefits for students to help them be more responsible and respectful.

'Don't wanna' is informal; 'don't want to' is better. 'If I work' should be 'if I worked' for conditional mood. 'Rules is have' is incorrect; 'rules have' is correct. 'Good beneficial' is incorrect; 'good benefits' is correct. 'More no and more respect to the' is unclear; simplified to 'more responsible and respectful'.