规则— Part 1 评分报告

× Yes, first, we can't have a long hair.

✓ Yes, first, we can't have long hair.

“hair”在这里是不可数名词，不能用冠词“a”修饰，应该直接用“long hair”。

× Second, we can't run across the garden.

✓ Second, we can't run across the garden.

此句无语法错误，garden为单数名词，使用正确。

× At last, we can't go out to play when we have a rest.

✓ At last, we can't go out to play when we are resting.

“have a rest”虽然常用，但更自然的表达是“are resting”，表示正在休息的状态。

× Yes, because we can know what we can do and what we can do from the rules.

✓ Yes, because we can know what we can do and what we can't do from the rules.

原句中重复了“what we can do”，应改为“what we can't do”以表达相反的意思。

× This makes me. Can. Live safer.

✓ This makes me live safer.

原句断句错误，应该连成一句，表达完整的意思。

× Yes, he is dedicated on math and he wanted us to become a smart person at last.

✓ Yes, he is dedicated to math and he wanted us to become smart people in the end.

“dedicated”后应接介词“to”，且“a smart person”应改为复数“smart people”，与复数主语一致，“at last”更自然表达为“in the end”。

× A smart person on mass.

✓ A smart person in math.

“on mass”应为“in math”，表示“在数学方面”。

× He had a lot of fruits and all of them. A benefit for us.

✓ He had a lot of fruits and all of them were a benefit for us.

原句缺少谓语动词，应补充“were”使句子完整。

× I prefer to have more role at school because Rose is good to make us live more safer.

✓ I prefer to have more rules at school because rules are good to make us live more safely.

“role”应为复数“rules”，且“Rose”应为“rules”；“more safer”是比较级错误，应为“more safely”或“safer”。

× So I think more and more rules is good for all of the students.

✓ So I think more and more rules are good for all of the students.

“rules”为复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”。

× Yes, he always wanted to do everything. When she, when he agreed it.

✓ Yes, he always wanted to do everything when he agreed to it.

原句中“she”与前文“he”不一致，应统一为“he”；“agreed it”应为“agreed to it”。

× And I don't like this because. I feel I lost. I lost freedom.

✓ And I don't like this because I feel I have lost my freedom.

原句断句错误，应连成完整句子，且“lost freedom”前应加“my”表示所有关系。

× And he also has a lot of fruits.

✓ And he also has a lot of fruit.

“fruit”作为不可数名词时不加复数形式“fruits”。

× Yeah, because if a school hasn't got any rules.

✓ Yeah, because if a school doesn't have any rules.

“hasn't got”是英式表达，口语中更常用“doesn't have”，且“a school”用法正确。

× Students will do anything they wanted and the teacher can support them well.

✓ Students will do anything they want and the teacher can support them well.

“wanted”应为一般现在时“want”，与前面的“will”时态一致。

× So I think if we were in a rougher school, it was bad for students.

✓ So I think if we were in a rule-free school, it would be bad for students.

“rougher school”应为“rule-free school”，且条件句中主句应使用“would be”表示假设语气。