规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and use correct grammar. Also, provide specific details about the rules and their purpose using linking words for coherence.

示例: Yes, there are several strict rules at my high school, especially regarding our appearance. For example, students are required to keep their hair short because the school wants us to look neat and disciplined.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and ends abruptly. Make sure to finish your sentences and provide supporting details with linking words. Also, explain why more rules limit creativity and how that affects students.

示例: I don't think students would benefit from having more rules because strict regulations can limit our creativity and freedom. Therefore, it's important to have a balance that encourages creative thinking.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains many hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to clearly state your answer with a topic sentence, then add specific details about the teacher's dedication and your feelings using linking words.

示例: Yes, I have had a very dedicated teacher who was both my sociology teacher and the basketball club coach. He was very strict, which made me feel stressed, but I appreciated his commitment to helping us improve.

建议: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to avoid filler words and use correct grammar. Provide clear reasons with linking words to support your preference.

示例: I prefer to have fewer rules at school because too many rules limit our creativity and freedom. Moreover, strict rules can cause a lot of stress for students.

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains many hesitations and minor errors. Try to speak more fluently and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, explain how the strictness affected you.

示例: Yes, I have had a really strict teacher who taught sociology and was also my basketball coach. Although he was very disciplined and I respected him, sometimes his strictness made me feel stressed.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to clearly express your opinion with a topic sentence and provide specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

示例: I would not like to work as a teacher in a school without rules because many students might behave badly, making it difficult to manage the class. However, sometimes I think it could be interesting to try such an environment.

× Yes it is, umm, yes it uh, my high school, uh, there are many directors strict rules about our appearance.

✓ Yes, there are many strict rules about our appearance at my high school.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it is' and 'there are' awkwardly. The correct structure to indicate existence is 'there are' followed by the plural noun 'rules'. Also, 'directors strict rules' is incorrect; it should be 'strict rules'.

× We are requiring to be uh, short hair 'cause they want to them, they want to ask to be uh, neat and disciplined.

✓ We are required to have short hair because they want us to be neat and disciplined.

The phrase 'are requiring to be' is incorrect; the passive form 'are required to' is appropriate here. Also, 'want to them' is incorrect; it should be 'want us to'. The verb 'have' is used with 'short hair' rather than 'be'.

× I think students would benefit less from more rules because rules have limited our creativity and freedom, so we need to think more creatively and.

✓ I think students would benefit less from more rules because rules limit our creativity and freedom, so we need to think more creatively.

The phrase 'rules have limited' is past perfect but the context suggests a general truth, so present tense 'limit' is better. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' It should be completed or the conjunction removed.

× Yes, I have, uh, I have a teacher for a so dedicated for me with who is uh basketball club coach and he is a teacher about the sociology and which is really strict to me and I was so stressful about that.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher who is very dedicated to me; he is the basketball club coach and a sociology teacher who is really strict, and I was very stressed about that.

The original sentence has article misuse ('a teacher for a so dedicated'), awkward phrasing, and incorrect prepositions. 'So dedicated for me' should be 'very dedicated to me'. 'Teacher about the sociology' should be 'sociology teacher'. 'I was so stressful' is incorrect; it should be 'I was very stressed'.

× Uh, rules, uh, limited hours, creativity and freedom.

✓ Rules limit our creativity and freedom.

'Limited hours' is unclear and likely incorrect. 'Rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'limit' not 'limited'. The phrase 'limited hours' seems out of place and should be omitted or clarified.

× So I prefer to fewer roles at school.

✓ So I prefer to have fewer rules at school.

The phrase 'prefer to fewer roles' is incorrect. The correct form is 'prefer to have fewer rules'. Also, 'roles' should be 'rules'.

× Yes, I have uh, I have had uh, uh, really strict teacher for both sociologists subject and basketball coach as well.

✓ Yes, I have had a really strict teacher for both sociology and basketball coaching as well.

'Really strict teacher' needs an article 'a'. 'Sociologists subject' is incorrect; it should be 'sociology'. Also, 'basketball coach' should be 'basketball coaching' to parallel the subjects.

× He was really uh, strict and disciplined person. So I was so respected for him.

✓ He was a really strict and disciplined person, so I respected him a lot.

'I was so respected for him' is incorrect. The subject 'I' should be the one doing the respecting, so 'I respected him'. Also, 'strict and disciplined person' needs an article 'a'.

× Umm, as a teacher, as a teacher, I don't wanna work in a role for each school cause work for in rural for school.

✓ Umm, as a teacher, I don't want to work in a rural school because there are a lot of students who are really out of control.

'Don't wanna' is informal; 'don't want to' is better. 'Work in a role for each school' is incorrect; it should be 'work in a rural school'. 'Cause work for in rural for school' is ungrammatical and unclear.

× There are a lot of students who are uh, really, uh out straight.

✓ There are a lot of students who are really unruly.

'Out straight' is not a correct phrase. The intended meaning is likely 'unruly' or 'disruptive'.

× So I don't wanna cope with them and but sometimes I feel like I want to work in this, this.

✓ So I don't want to cope with them, but sometimes I feel like I want to work in this kind of environment.

The sentence has conjunction errors ('and but') and incomplete thoughts ('work in this, this'). It should be restructured for clarity and completeness.