规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more organized and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, be careful with grammar and word choice, for example, say "Earrings are not allowed" instead of "Earrings are not also. OK."

示例: Yes, there are many rules at my school because it is a Christian school and quite strict. For example, boys must always cut their hair in a specific style, and girls are required to keep their hair tied neatly. Additionally, earrings are not allowed to maintain uniformity.

建议: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words to make it more coherent. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar.

示例: Yes, I believe students can improve their discipline if there are more rules because nowadays, many kids are hard-headed and difficult to manage. Therefore, following rules at school is important to help them develop good habits.

建议: Try to avoid repeating phrases like "such as" and make your sentences clearer. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples.

示例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher who spent extra time with us even though it was not required. For instance, he always helped us with additional tutoring in subjects like art whenever we needed it.

建议: Your answer is a bit long and repetitive. Try to make your point clearly and concisely with proper grammar and linking words.

示例: Honestly, the number of rules does not affect my learning as long as I can follow them. I believe rules help me, so I am fine with either more or fewer rules.

建议: Avoid short, choppy sentences and filler words like "umm". Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

示例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher who disliked noise and tardiness. For example, she once locked me out of the classroom because I was late. She also told me to be quiet since I was talkative.

建议: Clarify your ideas and avoid unclear phrases like "it's not my four day to be a teacher." Use linking words to connect your reasons logically.

示例: I do not want to be a teacher, but if I had to work in a school without rules, I would not want to work there. I believe rules are important because they help maintain order and ensure everyone follows them.

× For example, the boys should always cut their hair in specific style and the girl should always keep their hair tied and neatly.

✓ For example, the boys should always cut their hair in a specific style and the girls should always keep their hair tied and neat.

The sentence has singular and plural inconsistency: 'the girl' should be plural 'the girls' to match 'the boys'. Also, 'in specific style' needs an article 'a' before 'specific style'. 'Neatly' is an adverb but here an adjective 'neat' is needed to describe 'hair'. Suggestion: Use plural forms consistently and correct adjective/adverb usage.

× Earrings are not also. OK.

✓ Earrings are not allowed either. OK.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Earrings are not also' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'Earrings are not allowed either'. 'Also' is incorrectly used; 'either' is appropriate in negative sentences. Suggestion: Use 'either' in negative contexts and complete the sentence for clarity.

× Since kids now are nowadays are really kind of hard headed and difficult to discipline.

✓ Nowadays, kids are really kind of hard-headed and difficult to discipline.

The sentence has redundant words 'now are nowadays are' and awkward structure. 'Nowadays' should be placed at the beginning. 'Hard headed' should be hyphenated as 'hard-headed'. Suggestion: Remove redundancy and improve word order for clarity.

× So for me it is important for them to to follow rules in school.

✓ So for me, it is important for them to follow the rules in school.

There is a repeated word 'to to'. Also, 'follow rules' needs the definite article 'the' before 'rules' to specify particular rules. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words and use articles correctly.

× Yes, I actually had a very dedicated teacher who will spend time for us students even though it's not a requirement.

✓ Yes, I actually had a very dedicated teacher who would spend time with us students even though it wasn't a requirement.

The sentence refers to a past event, so 'will' should be changed to 'would' to indicate habitual past action. Also, 'spend time for us' should be 'spend time with us'. Suggestion: Use correct modal verbs for past habitual actions and correct prepositions.

× He will always be there for us no matter what, such as every time we need an extra example for, such as tutoring and art.

✓ He would always be there for us no matter what, such as every time we needed extra help, like tutoring and art.

'Example for' is incorrect; likely meant 'help'. Also, 'such as' is repeated unnecessarily. 'Will' should be 'would' for past habitual action. 'Every time we need' should be 'every time we needed' to match past tense. Suggestion: Use appropriate prepositions and avoid redundancy.

× To be honest, it doesn't really affect how I learn, no matter how many their rules or how few their rules is, as long as I am capable to follow them and I know that it will help me and benefit me and I'm OK with anything.

✓ To be honest, it doesn't really affect how I learn, no matter how many rules there are or how few rules there are, as long as I am able to follow them and I know that it will help and benefit me, and I'm OK with anything.

'Their rules' is incorrect; 'rules' should not have 'their' here. Also, 'how few their rules is' is grammatically wrong; 'rules' is plural so 'are' is needed. 'Capable to follow' should be 'able to follow'. Suggestion: Use correct pronouns and verb agreement, and proper expressions.

× Yes, I did. Had a very strict teacher.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a very strict teacher.

The second sentence lacks a subject 'I', making it a sentence fragment. Suggestion: Include the subject to form a complete sentence.

× I remember her, umm, I remember her telling me to always shut my mouth 'cause I'm a talkative person and she hates noise, she hates being late.

✓ I remember her telling me to always shut my mouth because I'm a talkative person and she hates noise and being late.

The phrase 'I remember her, umm, I remember her telling me' is repetitive. Also, 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech. The conjunction 'and' should connect 'she hates noise and being late' properly. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and use proper conjunctions.

× So once I was late, I was locked out of the room.

✓ So, once I was late, I was locked out of the room.

Missing comma after 'So' for correct punctuation. Suggestion: Use commas to separate introductory words.

× Yeah. So I had that quite of experience.

✓ Yeah. So I had quite that experience.

The phrase 'that quite of experience' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'quite that experience' or better 'quite an experience'. Suggestion: Use correct quantifier phrases.

× For me, it's not my four day to be a teacher.

✓ For me, it's not my forte to be a teacher.

'Four day' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo of 'forte', meaning strength or talent. Suggestion: Use correct vocabulary.

× However, if I would have to work as a teacher in a school that has no rules, I don't want to work there since I believe rules are made to be followed and rules are made so that everyone will be in order and will follow the rules.

✓ However, if I had to work as a teacher in a school that has no rules, I wouldn't want to work there since I believe rules are made to be followed and so that everyone will be in order and follow the rules.

The conditional sentence is incorrect. 'If I would have to' should be 'If I had to' for the second conditional. Also, 'I don't want' should be 'I wouldn't want' to match the conditional mood. Suggestion: Use correct conditional sentence structure.