规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use singular/plural and articles), and add one more specific detail. Use linking words to connect examples.

示例: Yes, there are several rules at my university. For example, students are not allowed to use certain staircases for safety reasons, and we must show our ID to enter specific buildings to maintain security. These measures help prevent accidents and keep unauthorized people out.

建议: Make your opinion sentence clearer and fix grammar and word choice. Use linking words and give a concrete reason or brief example why too many rules are harmful.

示例: I don't think more rules would help. Although clear rules can provide safety and discipline, too many regulations can exhaust students and stifle creativity. For instance, strict deadlines for every activity might leave students with no time for independent projects.

建议: Answer directly and politely. ‘Dedicated’ is positive, but your example describes a harsh teacher — clarify whether they were dedicated or just strict/abusive. Avoid hesitations and slang; give a short clear example with linking words.

示例: I had a teacher in my third semester who was very strict rather than dedicated. For example, she frequently criticized students harshly and gave very difficult tasks, which made learning stressful instead of encouraging.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with one or two reasons. Fix grammar and avoid fillers. Use linking words like because or therefore.

示例: I prefer a few reasonable rules because they ensure safety without restricting freedom. For example, ID checks and lab safety rules are necessary, but excessive restrictions on student activities are unnecessary.

建议: Be concise and use correct tense. State clearly that the teacher was strict, give a specific example of their behaviour and explain its effect. Use linking words to make it coherent.

示例: Yes, my Mongolian language teacher was very strict. For instance, she required us to submit three assignments in one week, which left us exhausted and less able to focus on each task.

建议: Answer directly and expand with a clear reason and a brief example. Correct vocabulary and word forms (e.g., 'if there were no rules' not 'world rules'). Keep it to two or three sentences.

示例: No, I wouldn't want to teach in a rule-free school because some rules are necessary for safety and order. For example, without classroom rules students might arrive late, disrupt lessons, and make it difficult to teach effectively.

× Yes, there are many rules at most university.

✓ Yes, there are many rules at most universities.

The noun 'university' should be plural because the determiner 'most' refers to more than one institution; use 'universities'. Suggestion: use plural nouns with 'most' (e.g., 'most universities').

× For example, students are not allowed to use some staircases for safety reasons and we must show our ID to enter certain buildings to maintain security.

✓ For example, students are not allowed to use some staircases for safety reasons, and we must show our ID to enter certain buildings to maintain security.

The sentence needed a comma before the conjunction 'and' to separate two independent clauses for clarity; this is punctuation rather than grammar list but improves correctness. No change to articles needed; original meaning preserved. Suggestion: use a comma before 'and' when joining two independent clauses.

× I don't think more rules would necessarily help students. While appeal clear rules can provide discipline and safety to ministry, regulations tend to tire students and stifle their creativity.

✓ I don't think more rules would necessarily help students. While clear and appealing rules can provide discipline and safety to students, too many regulations tend to tire students and stifle their creativity.

Several problems: word order and choice ('appeal clear' should be 'clear and appealing'); 'ministry' is incorrect in context — likely intended 'students'; missing quantifier 'too many' clarifies excessive regulations. Suggestions: use correct adjective order and choose the correct noun for the context; add quantifiers to indicate excess.

× So schools should focus on a few important and fair rules instead.

✓ Therefore, schools should focus on a few important and fair rules instead.

Stylistic: begin sentence with a linking adverb ('Therefore') rather than 'So' for formal clarity. Structure is acceptable but improved for register. Suggestion: use 'Therefore' or 'Thus' in formal responses.

× Oh yeah, when I was in my third semester of my university there was 1 teacher that always called us fool.

✓ Oh yeah, when I was in my third semester at university there was a teacher who always called us fools.

Use 'at university' (idiomatic), use 'a teacher' not '1 teacher', relative pronoun 'who' for people, and plural 'fools' to match 'us'. Also past habitual action 'called' is correct. Suggestion: use 'who' for people and make noun agreement with 'us'.

× You are no good and you can't uh rule a government or you are just fooling there is that.

✓ He would say things like 'You are no good' and 'You can't rule a government', or he would say we were just fooling around.

Original mixes direct speech and reported speech incorrectly and uses wrong pronouns and phrasing. Use reported speech to describe the teacher's insults, and idiom 'fooling around'. Suggestion: separate quoted insults and give a clear reported-summary.

× That teacher was really hard for me.

✓ That teacher was really hard on me.

The correct collocation is 'hard on someone', meaning strict or severe toward a person. 'Hard for me' implies difficulty rather than being strict. Suggestion: use common collocations ('hard on someone').

× I prefer a few rules, but are a reasonable yeah most students want this I think.

✓ I prefer a few reasonable rules; I think most students want that.

Original sentence has word order and missing verbs/pronouns. Corrected version restores subject-verb agreement and clear clauses. Suggestion: keep clauses concise and ensure each has a subject and verb.

× At university, my Mongolian teacher, Mongolian language teachers were strict.

✓ At university, my Mongolian language teachers were strict.

Remove redundancy and ensure plural agreement: 'teachers' matches 'were'. Original had mixed singular and plural nouns causing confusion. Suggestion: maintain consistent number and avoid repetition.

× We have to turn 3 assignments in just one week and we are so we were so tired of that teacher and that teacher was not that good.

✓ We had to turn in three assignments in one week, so we were very tired of that teacher, and I didn't think that teacher was very good.

Tense should be past ('had to', 'were', 'didn't think'). Use words in full ('three'), correct verb phrase 'turn in', and improve cohesion with 'so'. Suggestion: match tense across clauses and use appropriate adverbs ('very').

× No, I don't want that. As I said before, rules can be beneficial, but just the correct and reasonable rules must be in school.

✓ No, I don't want that. As I said before, rules can be beneficial, but only correct and reasonable rules should be in school.

Use 'only' instead of 'just' for clarity and 'should be' is more natural than 'must be' in this context. Also adjective order 'correct and reasonable' is fine. Suggestion: prefer 'should' for recommendations and place 'only' before the relevant phrase.

× If the world rules aren't in the school, the school might get messy and their their.

✓ If the wrong rules were in the school, the school might become messy and chaotic.

'World rules' is likely a mispronunciation of 'wrong rules'; use 'wrong rules'. Also 'their their' is incorrect pronoun repetition. Use 'become messy and chaotic' to convey meaning. Suggestion: choose the intended adjective ('wrong') and avoid repeating words; use clear adjectives.