聊天— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, use natural vocabulary (e.g. 'introverted' not 'implicit'), start with a clear topic sentence, and avoid repetition. Give one or two brief supporting details. Use linking words only if adding another point.

示例: I don't really like chatting with lots of people because I'm quite introverted. For example, I prefer quiet time to think and recharge rather than long social conversations.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and organise supporting details with linking words. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g. 'career progress' or 'work' instead of 'career development' repetition) and avoid filler sounds.

示例: I usually talk about hobbies, studies and recent news. Also, I often ask about my friends' career progress because I want to know how their jobs or plans are going.

建议: Answer directly and clearly, using natural phrases. Explain one specific reason succinctly and avoid unclear expressions like 'soul of friend' or 'space-time'.

示例: I prefer talking with a single friend because one-on-one conversations feel more comfortable and give me space to think and share honestly.

建议: State your preference clearly first, then give a brief reason with natural language. Reduce hesitation words and avoid repeating the same idea multiple times.

示例: I prefer to communicate via social media because I'm quite shy and find online messaging less stressful than face-to-face conversations.

建议: Give a direct answer and one concise supporting detail or example. Avoid vague phrases and filler repetition; use a clear past-tense example if mentioning a recent quarrel.

示例: Not often. Recently I had a small argument with a friend about a misunderstanding over plans, but it was about something unimportant and we resolved it quickly.

× Actually I'm an implicit boy so I'm less likely to chat with others and so introvert.

✓ Actually I'm an introverted boy, so I'm less likely to chat with others.

The word 'implicit' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'introverted'. Also 'and so introvert' is ungrammatical; use 'so' + clause. Suggestion: use appropriate adjective 'introverted' and a complete clause: 'so I'm less likely...'.

× I'm so shy in my own time.

✓ I'm very shy in private.

'In my own time' is awkward; 'in private' or 'when I'm alone' is more natural. Also use 'very' instead of 'so' for neutrality. Suggestion: replace idiomatic phrase with 'in private' or 'when I'm alone'.

× I like to I like chatting with my my self and contemplate myself into.

✓ I like chatting with myself and contemplating my thoughts.

'my my self' is a repetition and should be 'myself'. 'Contemplate myself into' is ungrammatical; use 'contemplating my thoughts' or 'reflecting on myself'. Ensure parallel gerund forms: 'chatting' and 'contemplating'.

× Hobbies, studies and recent news and always, uh, with my friends to talk about their, umm, career development because I wanna, uh, care there, umm, how it's going, you know?

✓ Hobbies, studies and recent news. I also often talk with my friends about their career development because I want to know how it's going.

Sentence fragments and incorrect prepositions: 'care there' is wrong; use 'want to know'. 'Always ... with my friends to talk' is awkward—restructure into clear sentences. Use 'I also often talk with my friends about their career development' for clarity.

× I prefer with only my friend so because I think the soul of friend can provide me a lot of umm, space-time to contemplate myself and yeah, I think keep in touch with them.

✓ I prefer talking with only one friend because I think a close friend can give me the space to reflect, and I like to keep in touch with them.

Incorrect pronouns and nouns: 'my friend so because' is redundant; 'the soul of friend' is wrong—use 'a close friend'. 'Space-time' is unnatural; use 'space' or 'time to reflect'. Maintain subject-verb and article use: 'a close friend'.

× I want, umm, keep in touch with me, so I choose social media to contact them.

✓ I want to keep in touch with them, so I use social media to contact my friends.

'Keep in touch with me' is wrong—should be 'keep in touch with them'. 'Choose' is better as 'use' for habitual action. Specify 'my friends' for clarity.

× Umm, I'm so shy. I'm so afraid. I'm so stressful to communicate to face to face and umm, yeah, I'm, I'm more likely to, uh, communicate within by social.

✓ I'm shy and afraid of face-to-face communication, so I'm more likely to communicate via social media.

'I'm so stressful' is incorrect; use 'I feel stressed' if needed. 'To communicate to face to face' is ungrammatical—use 'face-to-face communication'. 'Communicate within by social' is wrong; use 'communicate via social media'. Keep present simple tense for habitual preference.

× Less often time, but recently I quarrelled with my friends on on some unimportant things, you know so so yeah, in in in in my sometime I argue with my friends maybe around.

✓ I quarrel less often, but recently I quarrelled with my friends over some unimportant things. Sometimes I do argue with my friends.

Multiple issues: 'Less often time' is awkward—use 'I quarrel less often'. Repeat words removed. 'Quarrelled with my friends on on' should be 'over some unimportant things'. 'In my sometime I argue' is ungrammatical—use 'Sometimes I do argue'. Use consistent past/simple present for habits and recent events.