聊天— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and use correct verb forms and pronouns. Include one or two specific details about how you chat (apps, frequency) and use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I love chatting with friends, especially those who live overseas. I usually use video calls or messaging apps to catch up weekly, and we talk about family news and recent events so we stay connected despite the distance.

建议: Begin with a direct answer, then give specific topics and reasons. Reduce vague phrasing and correct word choice (e.g., ‘seek comfort’ not ‘seek for that phrase’). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'so' appropriately.

示例: We usually talk about recent events and personal experiences. For example, we share news about work or family, and we offer emotional support to each other when one of us is stressed or needs advice.

建议: State your preference clearly, give one or two reasons with specific details, and avoid fillers and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' correctly and keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: I prefer talking to one close friend rather than a group because I feel more comfortable sharing personal stories. Because of that, I can be honest and receive more focused advice and support.

建议: Give a clear direct answer and correct word choice (e.g., 'prefer' and 'facial expression' not 'facial oppression'). Mention specific benefits of face-to-face communication and use concise linking phrases.

示例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can read facial expressions and body language. This helps me ask natural follow-up questions and reduces the chance of misunderstandings.

建议: Answer directly and use correct tense and pronouns. Explain briefly what you do instead of arguing, give a clear reason and a short example. Remove unclear phrases and fillers.

示例: No, we rarely argue. If we have a disagreement, we usually take a few days apart to calm down, and then I try to reach out and resolve the issue calmly because I value our relationship.

× Friends yes, absolutely I love chatting with friends, especially to those who live in overseas.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I love chatting with friends, especially those who live overseas.

The preposition 'to' is not needed before 'those' in this context; say 'especially those who live overseas.' Also 'in overseas' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'overseas' without a preposition. Combine into clear sentence and add punctuation for readability.

× Uh, the modern technology allow her to have an easy access to catch up regularly with each other.

✓ Modern technology allows us to have easy access to keeping in touch regularly with each other.

Subject-verb agreement: 'technology' is singular so verb should be 'allows' not 'allow.' 'Her' is inconsistent with context; use 'us' or 'people.' 'an easy access' should be 'easy access' (article unnecessary). 'to catch up' is fine but 'keeping in touch' fits better. Adjust word order for natural phrasing.

× We update umm, about our family's work and other uh, uh, entertainment umm, I.

✓ We update each other about our family, work, and entertainment.

Sentence has extra fillers and incorrect structure. 'Update about' should be 'update each other about.' 'Family's work' is unclear; separate items with commas. Remove trailing 'I' which is incomplete.

× But we usually talk about a usual or a recent events that we went through because we want to seek for that phrase from each other and be mentality support each other.

✓ We usually talk about usual or recent events we experienced because we want to share advice with each other and provide mental support.

Quantifier and article errors: 'a usual or a recent events' mixes singular articles with plural 'events'; change to 'usual or recent events.' 'Seek for that phrase' is incorrect; likely meant 'seek advice' or 'share experiences.' 'Be mentality support' is wrong form; use 'provide mental support.' Also remove unnecessary 'that' and 'we went through' -> 'we experienced.'

× Umm, because sometimes we need somebody to listen to your story and to share the emotional feelings so.

✓ Sometimes we need somebody to listen to our stories and share our feelings.

Pronoun consistency: 'we' should match 'your' -> use 'our.' 'Emotional feelings' is redundant; 'feelings' suffices. Remove trailing 'so'.

× I always prefer talking to 1 friend, uh, one friends instead of a big uh, a group of friends because I feel safe and secure when talking to the person I I really uh, close with.

✓ I always prefer talking to one friend instead of a big group of friends because I feel safe and secure when talking to someone I am really close to.

Mix of numeral '1' and 'one friends' causes singular/plural mismatch. Use 'one friend' singular. 'The person I I really close with' is ungrammatical; use 'someone I am really close to.' Fix double 'I' and preposition placement.

× So I will often share my personal story and feeling so.

✓ So I often share my personal stories and feelings.

Redundant 'will' changes tense unnecessarily; present simple 'often share' matches habitual action. 'Story and feeling' should be plural 'stories and feelings.' Remove trailing 'so.'

× Well, I'll pray for face to face conversation because I can see the person facial oppression and also the, the body languages.

✓ Well, I prefer face-to-face conversations because I can see the person's facial expressions and body language.

'I'll pray for' is incorrect modal choice; use 'I prefer.' 'Face to face' should be hyphenated 'face-to-face' as adjective. 'Facial oppression' is wrong word; correct is 'facial expressions.' 'Body languages' should be singular 'body language.' Possessive 'person's' required.

× And with from there I can give them more natural, uh, following up questions and, uh, reduced, uh, reduce the chance of, uh, misunderstanding.

✓ From there I can ask them more natural follow-up questions and reduce the chance of misunderstanding.

Remove redundant 'and with.' 'Following up questions' should be 'follow-up questions' (hyphenated adjective before noun). Use 'ask' not 'give' for questions. 'Reduced, uh, reduce' is redundant; use 'reduce the chance of misunderstanding.'

× Oh, no, we really, uh, did not argue with you at all.

✓ Oh no, we really did not argue with each other at all.

Pronoun 'you' is incorrect because speaker refers to mutual argument among friends; use 'each other.' Maintain tense and remove filler commas.

× We just, uh, prefer not talking to each other a couple of days, which I5 is not uh, something I want to do when I become an adult.

✓ We just prefer not to talk to each other for a couple of days, which is not something I want to do as an adult.

Verb form: 'prefer not talking' should be 'prefer not to talk.' Add preposition 'for' before 'a couple of days.' 'I5' is typo; remove. 'When I become an adult' better as 'as an adult.'

× I need to act more responsibly and avoid damaging the relationship as much as I can.

✓ I need to act more responsibly and avoid damaging my relationships as much as possible.

Original is mostly correct but 'the relationship' to 'my relationships' is more natural when speaking generally. 'As much as I can' -> 'as much as possible' is a clearer phrase.

× So I try to come talk night.

✓ So I try to come and talk at night.

Sentence missing prepositions and conjunctions: 'come talk night' is ungrammatical. Add 'and' and 'at' to form 'come and talk at night.' If meaning is 'I try to go and talk that night,' adjust accordingly.