聊天— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve clarity, fluency and avoid repetition. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., use 'it makes me happy' not 'can get some happy feelings') and remove repeated phrases.

示例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because it makes me feel happy and supported. For example, we often talk about school events and personal experiences, which helps us stay close.

建议: Use a clearer subject-verb structure and more precise vocabulary. Begin with a topic sentence, then add specific examples and a linking word. Avoid awkward phrases like 'check about' and 'make our friendship strongly'.

示例: We usually talk about school life and our daily routines. For instance, we discuss homework, upcoming exams and funny things that happened during the day, which strengthens our friendship.

建议: Provide a clear preference and explain with coherent reasons using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'because'). Fix vocabulary ('fan' → 'friend') and grammar. Keep answer concise and specific about pros and cons of each option.

示例: I prefer chatting one-on-one because conversations can be deeper and longer. However, group chats are fun for sharing jokes and you can use video calls to include everyone.

建议: State a clear preference and give a specific reason with correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and finish the thought. Avoid incomplete sentences like 'turn the camera to the.'

示例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it is clearer and more personal. For example, when I have problems with my studies I can show my notes directly and ask questions more effectively.

建议: Answer directly and briefly, then explain with one clear example. Avoid repetition and incomplete endings. Use linking words to show contrast if you want to say arguments are resolved quickly.

示例: Yes, I sometimes argue with friends when we disagree about something. However, we usually talk it through afterwards and resolve the issue quickly so our friendship stays strong.

× Yes, I like chatting with my friends because chatting with my friends can get some can get some happy feelings and BMI friends can talk to my friend about school life or.

✓ Yes, I like chatting with my friends because chatting with them can make me happy, and my friends can talk to me about school life.

Pronoun misuse and repetition: 'chatting with my friends can get some can get some happy feelings' is awkward and repetitive; use 'chatting with them can make me happy' for clarity. 'BMI friends' and 'talk to my friend' are incorrect references; use 'my friends can talk to me' to maintain correct pronoun case and agreement. Suggestion: replace repeated phrases, use 'them' for 'my friends', and use 'make me happy' instead of 'get happy feelings'.

× I and my friend will check about some school life or share daily things because this can make our friendship strongly.

✓ My friend and I will talk about school life or share daily things because this can strengthen our friendship.

Pronoun order and word choice: English normally places others before 'I', so use 'My friend and I'. 'Check about' is incorrect; use 'talk about' or 'discuss'. 'Make our friendship strongly' is incorrect adjective/adverb use; use 'strengthen our friendship' (verb) or 'make our friendship stronger'. Suggestion: use natural verb 'talk about' and 'strengthen' for concise expression.

× Those also OK because check with only one fan when you talk longer, even when that was bored and if you check with a group of people you can use the video call to.

✓ Both are okay because talking with only one friend allows longer conversations, although it can get boring; if you talk with a group, you can use a video call.

Incorrect pronouns and nouns: 'Those' is vague; use 'Both are okay'. 'Fan' is wrong word; should be 'friend'. Verb forms: 'check with' is incorrect; use 'talk with' or 'talk to'. 'When that was bored' is ungrammatical; use 'it can get boring'. Unnecessary 'to' at end removed. Suggestion: use clear subjects ('both'), correct nouns ('friend'), and proper verb forms ('talk with', 'can get boring').

× I prefer to communicate face to face because face to face can clearly to ask no friend something. When you have some problem on the study, you can turn the camera to the.

✓ I prefer to communicate face to face because you can ask a friend questions more clearly. When you have a problem with studying, you can turn the camera on.

Preposition and article errors: 'clearly to ask no friend something' is ungrammatical; use 'ask a friend questions more clearly'. 'Problem on the study' should be 'problem with studying'. 'Turn the camera to the' is wrong preposition and missing object; use 'turn the camera on'. Suggestion: use 'ask a friend', 'problem with studying', and 'turn the camera on' for natural phrasing.

× I of of course I will because when my friend and I have some problems between us I will argue with them, but but we also.

✓ Of course I sometimes argue with friends because when my friend and I have problems, we may argue, but we also make up afterwards.

Repetition and incomplete sentence: 'I of of course I will' and 'but but we also.' contain repeated words and an incomplete clause. Use 'Of course I sometimes argue with friends' for clarity. 'Problems between us' can be simplified to 'problems'. Add a completion 'we also make up afterwards' to finish the thought. Suggestion: remove repeated words, complete the sentence with the contrasting idea, and use concise phrasing.