爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce hesitations and grammatical errors; give a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct verb forms and accurate vocabulary (e.g., "hobby is swimming", "it rejuvenates me"). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, my main hobby is swimming. It rejuvenates me and relieves stress, so I go to the local pool whenever I have spare time. Also, swimming keeps me fit, because I usually swim laps for 30–45 minutes each session.

建议: Answer directly with correct grammar and clear, specific details. Avoid unclear fragments (e.g., "running Dubai"). Use linking words to list hobbies and give a brief reason or example. Correct subject-verb agreement and past tense are needed.

示例: Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed running and riding my bicycle. For example, I often rode around my neighborhood with friends on weekends, and I saved pocket money to buy new accessories for my bike.

建议: Give a clear, concise topic sentence stating the hobby and use correct tense. Provide one specific supporting detail (what you read, how often, or how it influenced you) with linking words. Avoid repetition and fill words.

示例: Yes, I have enjoyed reading since childhood. I used to read a lot of children’s stories and now I prefer historical novels; reading helps me relax and learn new vocabulary.

建议: Respond directly and clearly about similarities with family hobbies. Use correct sentence structure and specific details (how your father encouraged reading, activities you shared). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes, we share a love of reading in my family. My father, who was a university professor, encouraged us to read from an early age by discussing books at dinner and taking us to the library every month.

× MMM, absolutely yes. Uh, my first hobbies is swimming, swim.

✓ MMM, absolutely yes. Uh, my main hobby is swimming.

The noun 'hobbies' (plural) does not match the singular verb 'is'. Use singular 'hobby' with 'is', and 'first' is odd here; 'main' or 'primary' is more natural. Also avoid repeating 'swim'. Suggestion: use 'my main hobby is swimming.'

× Swimming is a region rejuvenate me and tears me up and I use anytime, any spare time I have to go to the swimming pool and uh, relax my uh, whole body.

✓ Swimming is a way to rejuvenate me and cheers me up, and I use any spare time I have to go to the swimming pool and relax my whole body.

Problems: 'region' is incorrect word choice; use 'way' or 'means'. Verb forms wrong: 'rejuvenate me' needs 'to rejuvenate me' or 'rejuvenates me'. 'Tears me up' is inappropriate; 'cheers me up' fits. 'I use anytime' should be 'I use any spare time' or 'I use any time I have'. Ensure gerunds/infinitives are used correctly.

× As a child my hobbies was umm, running Dubai, riding the bike and then I when uh, I I just want to buy something of new for my bicycle.

✓ As a child my hobbies were running in Dubai and riding a bike, and once I wanted to buy something new for my bicycle.

Subject-verb agreement in past: 'hobbies' is plural so use 'were'. 'Running Dubai' needs preposition 'in'. 'Riding the bike' should be 'riding a bike'. 'I just want' should be past 'I wanted' to match past narrative. 'Something of new' should be 'something new'.

× Uh, yes, one of them, my hobby I had umm, I have had from childhood to since now, uh, is umm reading a book as a child I reading a lot of book and I umm.

✓ Uh, yes. One of the hobbies I have had since childhood is reading books; as a child I read a lot of books.

Mix of present perfect and incorrect word order: use 'One of the hobbies I have had since childhood' (present perfect). 'to since now' is wrong. Use 'is reading books'. 'I reading' should be 'I read' for past habit. Plural 'books' is appropriate.

× Oh yes, I as my father, my father was a university professor and he taught us to how to read the book and he, he always encouraged all my I and my other sibling sibling.

✓ Oh yes. Like my father, who was a university professor, he taught us how to read books, and he always encouraged me and my siblings.

Pronoun and word order errors: 'I as my father' should be 'Like my father' or 'As with my father'. 'Taught us to how to read' should be 'taught us how to read' (no 'to'). 'The book' should be plural 'books' or omitted. 'Encouraged all my I and my other sibling sibling' is ungrammatical; correct to 'encouraged me and my siblings'. Also remove duplicated 'sibling'.