爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid repeating the question. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce filler words (uh, um) and avoid repetition ("going to the gym" said many times).

示例: I enjoy going to the gym. I go three times a week because it helps me stay in shape and increases my energy levels, so I feel stronger and more confident during the day.

建议: Use correct tense and smoother linking. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then explain reasons briefly with linking words. Avoid fillers and minor grammar mistakes ("I really liked" instead of "I really like").

示例: When I was a child, I really liked watching anime on TV after school because my parents were often working and I had no siblings. As a result, television became my main pastime and I watched many series every afternoon.

建议: Answer directly and briefly, then give a reason. Use correct phrasing ("I haven't had a hobby since childhood" or "I didn't have a long-term hobby") and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'however' to connect ideas and remove fillers.

示例: No, I haven't had a hobby continuously since childhood; however, I recently took up going to the gym because regular exercise gives me more strength and helps me stay in shape.

建议: Be specific and use natural phrasing. Start with a topic sentence stating whether you share hobbies, then give a short example and a linking word (for example, "for instance" or "so"). Remove fillers and correct grammar ("going to restaurants" and "eating sweets").

示例: Yes, I share some hobbies with my parents. For example, we often go to restaurants together and enjoy trying sweet desserts, so dining out has become a regular family activity.

× My hobby is going to the gym.

✓ My hobby is going to the gym.

No correction needed for this sentence; the gerund 'going' correctly follows 'My hobby is'. Keep as is.

× I used to uh, like workout but now I do because it helps me uh, stay in shape.

✓ I used to, uh, like working out, but now I do it because it helps me, uh, stay in shape.

The phrase 'like workout' mixes a verb and noun incorrectly. After 'like' use a gerund: 'like working out'. Also include object 'it' after 'do' when referring to the action. Use commas to reflect pauses.

× Then I also I feel stronger than ever by going to the gym.

✓ Also, I feel stronger than ever because I go to the gym.

The original repeats 'I' and uses 'by going' awkwardly. Reorder to a clear subject-verb structure and use 'because I go to the gym' to express cause.

× When I was a child, I really like to watch anime on TV after I came back from school because I didn't have anything to do umm, in my home.

✓ When I was a child, I really liked to watch anime on TV after I came back from school because I didn't have anything to do at home.

Talking about childhood requires past tense 'liked' not 'like'. 'In my home' is unnatural; use the preposition 'at' for location: 'at home'.

× My parents used to work all the time.

✓ My parents used to work all the time.

This sentence is correct: 'used to' properly indicates a past habitual action. No change needed.

× I don't have any siblings, so that's what I like to do.

✓ I don't have any siblings, so that's what I liked to do.

Since the speaker is describing a childhood habit, maintain past tense 'liked'. The rest is fine.

× No, I don't have a hobby that I have been having since childhood, but now I do have a hobby of going to the gym and take exercise because it gives me, uh, strength and it helps me, uh, stay in shape.

✓ No, I don't have a hobby that I've had since childhood, but now I have a hobby of going to the gym and taking exercise because it gives me strength and helps me stay in shape.

Avoid 'have been having' which is awkward here; use present perfect 'I've had' for duration up to now if applicable. Use gerund 'taking exercise' after 'and' to match parallel structure. Remove redundant commas and filler sounds.

× Yes, I have a hobby of going to restaurant and have something sweet because I like umm, sweet dessert.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby of going to restaurants and having something sweet because I like sweet desserts.

Use plural 'restaurants' when speaking generally. Use 'having' (gerund) to parallel 'going'. 'Sweet dessert' is redundant; use 'sweet desserts' or 'desserts'.

× And also my family, my parents, they like uh, same things as me.

✓ Also, my parents like the same things I do.

Remove redundancy 'my family, my parents, they'. Use concise subject 'my parents'. Use 'the same things I do' rather than 'same things as me' for natural phrasing.

× So we like to go together and eat the same things.

✓ So we like to go together and eat the same foods.

'Eat the same things' is understandable but 'eat the same foods' is more natural. No tense issue; simple present is correct for habitual actions.