爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms, avoid invented words (e.g., “unbuy”), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep to under five sentences.

示例: I usually watch TV series in my free time because I enjoy their fascinating storylines. For example, I like psychological thrillers that keep me thinking, and watching them helps me relax after work without needing to go out. Also, I often watch with subtitles to improve my English.

建议: Correct tense and verb choices, and be specific. Begin with a clear topic sentence about childhood hobby, then give a reason and a concrete example. Use linking words like “because” or “so” properly.

示例: When I was a child, I used to read comic books. I still enjoy them because the colourful pictures and simple plots make reading fun, and sometimes I reread my favourites to relax in the evening.

建议: Use correct verb patterns and concise structure. Start with a direct statement that you have a long-term hobby, then give a specific detail about how it helps you, using linking words like “so” or “which”. Avoid repetitive phrases.

示例: Yes, I have enjoyed reading books since I was young. Reading helps me concentrate and stay calm, so I often read before bed to unwind; for example, I like historical novels because they immerse me in another time.

建议: Make the answer fluent and specific. State clearly which hobby you share, avoid filler words, and explain briefly how you share it (when and why). Use linking words such as “so” or “because” correctly.

示例: Yes, my mother and I share a hobby: watching current TV series. We usually watch together every evening after work, which gives us a chance to talk about the episodes and relax together.

× I usually watching current series during my leisure time because it was a fascinating storyline and also helped me to unbuy after work without requiring much energy to like being outside or prepare myself to do it.

✓ I usually watch current series during my leisure time because they have fascinating storylines and also help me to unwind after work without needing much energy to go outside or prepare myself.

The original sentence contains incorrect verb form 'watching' after the adverb 'usually'; the correct form is the base verb 'watch' (present simple) for habitual actions. 'Was a fascinating storyline' mismatches number and tense with 'series' (plural and present habit), so change to 'they have fascinating storylines'. 'Helped me to unbuy' is incorrect word choice and past tense; use present simple 'help me to unwind'. Also use correct infinitive forms and prepositions: 'without needing much energy to go outside or prepare myself'. Suggestions: use present simple for regular habits, match plural/singular, and choose correct verbs (unwind) and prepositions ('go outside').

× I have been used to waiting comic books when I was young and I still keep doing that hobbies right now because I fight pretty enjoyable and help me to relax.

✓ I used to read comic books when I was young and I still keep doing that hobby now because I find it very enjoyable and it helps me to relax.

'Have been used to waiting' is incorrect for a past habit; use 'used to' + base verb. 'Waiting comic books' is wrong verb selection; 'read' is correct. 'I still keep doing that hobbies' has number agreement and awkward phrasing; use 'I still keep doing that hobby' or better 'I still read them'. 'I fight pretty enjoyable' is a typo: 'find' and use adverb/adjective correctly: 'find it very enjoyable'. 'Help me to relax' should be 'it helps me to relax' for subject clarity. Suggestions: use 'used to' for past habits, correct verb choice and subject-verb agreement, and proofread for typos.

× I love to reading books since I was young, I found it very interesting and can help me to focus with myself like concentrating on reading help me stay calm and feel enjoyable with the storyline easily without like.

✓ I have loved reading books since I was young; I find it very interesting and it helps me to focus, stay calm, and enjoy the storyline.

'Love to reading' mixes infinitive and -ing; use 'love reading' or 'have loved reading' for an action from the past until now. 'Since I was young' requires present perfect ('have loved'). 'I found it' should be present 'I find it' to match ongoing preference. 'Can help me to focus with myself' is awkward; use 'it helps me to focus'. Remove redundant phrases 'like concentrating on reading help me stay calm and feel enjoyable with the storyline easily without like' and rephrase to 'helps me to focus, stay calm, and enjoy the storyline'. Suggestions: use present perfect for actions continuing from the past, maintain consistent tense, simplify and combine clauses for clarity.

× I do have the similar hobby with my mom. Uh, it's uh, hobby is this hobby is watching current CV? Because we do it together at home after working in the evening like every day. So it's not just about be that tell us.

✓ I do have a similar hobby with my mom. Our shared hobby is watching current TV series because we do it together at home every evening after work. So it's not just a habit — it's something we do together.

'The similar hobby with my mom' misuses the definite article; use 'a similar hobby with my mom' or 'a similar hobby to my mom's'. Pronoun/reference issues: 'it's uh, hobby is this hobby is watching current CV?' is ungrammatical and unclear; clarify as 'Our shared hobby is watching current TV series'. 'CV' is likely a mispronunciation of 'TV' and 'series' fits better. 'After working in the evening like every day' should be 'every evening after work'. 'It's not just about be that tell us' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'it's not just a habit — it's something we do together'. Suggestions: use clear pronouns ('our'), correct articles, replace unclear fragments, and use natural collocations ('TV series', 'after work', 'every evening').