爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence naming your main hobbies, avoid unnecessary phrases (e.g. “staring at the ceiling”), and use correct verb forms. Add one brief specific detail about each hobby using a linking word. Keep length to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I have a few hobbies, mainly listening to music and reading books. For example, I often listen to relaxing acoustic playlists in the evening, and I usually read contemporary fiction to unwind.

建议: Avoid repetition and make the answer more specific: give a concise topic sentence and one or two details about how your childhood hobbies were similar or different. Use a linking word like “and” or “because.”

示例: Yes, I did — I enjoyed listening to music and reading just like now. For instance, as a child I loved children’s stories and pop songs, which helped me develop my current tastes.

建议: Be direct and correct grammar: start with a clear statement answering the question, avoid informal fillers (e.g. “I just told you”), correct word choice (use “with me” not “stuck with me”), and split into two short sentences if needed. Add one specific memory or age to support the claim.

示例: Yes, both listening to music and reading are hobbies I’ve had since childhood. I remember reading picture books from about age six and listening to my parents’ CDs, which began my interest in music.

建议: Be clearer and avoid odd word choices: answer directly, give one or two specific contrasts using linking words (e.g. “however”), and correct unclear phrases (replace “deadly” with “dead leaves” or “weeds”). Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct tense consistency.

示例: No, not really — my family’s hobbies are quite different from mine. For example, my mother enjoys gardening and spends mornings tending plants and removing dead leaves, whereas my father also likes reading, which is similar to me.

× The most common one is listening to music while I lay on my bed staring at the ceiling and the other one is reading books.

✓ The most common one is listening to music while I lie on my bed staring at the ceiling, and the other is reading books.

The verb 'lay' is the past tense of 'lie' (to recline). In this present-time description you need the base present form 'lie'. Also simplify 'the other one is' to 'the other is' for natural style. Suggestion: use 'lie' for present-tense reclining and keep parallel structure.

× I just told you both of my hobbies Li listening to music and reading books are still stuck with me as an adult and I've been doing it since I was a child.

✓ I just told you both of my hobbies: listening to music and reading books have stuck with me as an adult, and I've been doing them since I was a child.

Multiple issues: use of 'Li' appears to be a typo; 'are still stuck with me' is awkward — 'have stuck with me' uses past participle correctly to show continuation. Also 'it' should be plural 'them' to agree with two hobbies. Suggestion: remove typo, use present perfect 'have stuck' or 'have stayed with me', and make pronoun agree with plural noun.

× Whenever she gets time, especially in the mornings, she would just sit in the veranda and if she finds some some deadly, she would just cut them off.

✓ Whenever she has time, especially in the mornings, she just sits on the veranda, and if she finds some dead plants, she cuts them off.

Use 'has time' rather than 'gets time' for natural English. Preposition 'on the veranda' is more idiomatic than 'in the veranda'. 'Would' implies conditional or habitual past; use simple present for habitual actions: 'just sits' and 'cuts'. 'some some deadly' is incorrect — likely meant 'some dead plants' or 'some dead leaves'. Also avoid repeated 'some'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits, correct prepositions, and specify noun 'plants' or 'leaves'.

× But my father, he also reads books, so maybe something similar there.

✓ But my father also reads books, so maybe there's something similar there.

The original is conversational but slightly ungrammatical: inserting 'he' after the topic comma is redundant; add 'there's' or 'is' to complete the idea 'maybe there's something similar'. Also keep subject-verb agreement: 'my father reads' is fine, but the clause needed a linking verb. Suggestion: remove redundant pronoun and add 'there's' for completeness.

× Did you have any hobbies when you were a child? Student: Yes, certainly. I had hobbies when I was a child. They were very similar to the kind of hobbies I have today, that is listening to music and reading books.

✓ Did you have any hobbies when you were a child? Student: Yes, certainly. I had hobbies when I was a child. They were very similar to the kinds of hobbies I have today, that is, listening to music and reading books.

Minor issue: 'the kind of hobbies' should be plural 'the kinds of hobbies' to match plural 'hobbies'. Also add a comma after 'that is' for clarity. Suggestion: keep noun agreement between 'kinds' and 'hobbies' and punctuate 'that is' correctly.