爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words and correct verb forms. Avoid repetition and unfinished phrases.

示例: Yes, I have several hobbies, including reading, watching TV, and drawing. Drawing is my favourite because it helps me relax and I enjoy sketching fashion designs, which I often develop into small clothing ideas.

建议: Answer directly in past tense for childhood, reduce hesitation, and give a specific example of what you drew. Use linking words to explain why you liked it.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I loved drawing, especially cartoons and clothes. Because drawing let me be imaginative, I often spent afternoons creating new characters and outfits.

建议: Use a clear topic sentence and past-to-present phrasing: say when you started and how it continues now. Avoid vague endings and incorrect grammar. Add a specific detail about how you practice the hobby now.

示例: Yes, drawing has been my hobby since childhood. I started at about seven and still draw every week, practising figure sketches and designing clothes to improve my skills.

建议: Organise your answer: state whether you share hobbies, then contrast with one or two examples. Use correct nouns and verb forms, and be specific about the activities you like.

示例: Not really; our interests are different. My family prefers quiet pastimes like reading and watching TV dramas, whereas I enjoy more active hobbies, such as hiking and outdoor adventures.

× I found that drawing was one of my favorite hobbies make me relax and I'm into fashion design so I draw a lot in that and make me.

✓ I found that drawing was one of my favorite hobbies; it helps me relax, and I'm into fashion design so I draw a lot for that.

The sentence uses incorrect verb forms and missing connectors. 'make me relax' should be 'helps me relax' (present tense agreement and correct verb choice). Also 'and make me' is ungrammatical; use a clause 'it helps me relax' and 'I draw a lot for that' to show purpose. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join related clauses. Suggestion: Use 'helps' for habitual/general effect and connect clauses clearly with conjunctions or punctuation.

× Yes, I do have hobbies. Since I was a child, I found out that drawing was the interesting, uh, activities to do.

✓ Yes, I do have hobbies. Since I was a child, I have found that drawing is an interesting activity to do.

Tense and agreement problems: 'Since I was a child' requires present perfect ('have found') because the feeling started in the past and continues. 'drawing was the interesting, uh, activities' is wrong: 'drawing' is singular so use singular noun 'activity' and present 'is' if the feeling continues. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for actions continuing to present and match noun number to the subject.

× I feel that drawings make us feel creative, think creatively.

✓ I feel that drawing makes me feel creative and helps me think creatively.

Pronoun and number mismatch and unclear reference: 'drawings make us feel' changes perspective from 'I' to 'us' and uses plural 'drawings'. Keep consistent first-person singular: 'drawing makes me'. Also combine parallel verbs properly: 'makes me feel creative and helps me think creatively.' Suggestion: Keep consistent pronouns and parallel structure.

× Yes, as I told you before that I really love drawings a lot since I was a child and I found that drawing was one of my ability and I would say that I still enjoy drawings. It made me feel.

✓ Yes, as I told you before, I have loved drawing since I was a child, and I find that drawing is one of my abilities; I would say that I still enjoy drawing because it makes me feel happy.

Multiple issues: tense and pronoun consistency. 'I really love drawings a lot since I was a child' should use present perfect 'have loved' for an ongoing state. Use singular 'drawing' when referring to the activity. 'one of my ability' needs plural 'abilities'. 'It made me feel' switches to past; use present 'it makes me feel' and complete the idea. Added 'happy' to complete the clause. Suggestion: Use present perfect for lasting states, correct noun number, and keep verb tenses consistent.

× I found that we don't have much hobbies.

✓ I found that we don't have many hobbies.

Count noun 'hobbies' requires 'many' not 'much'. 'Much' is used with uncountable nouns. Use 'many' for plural countable nouns. Suggestion: Use 'many' with plural countable nouns.

× My parents and my siblings enjoyed quiet activities such as readings and Watch the Visions show, while I do like outdoor activities like fun adventure.

✓ My parents and siblings enjoy quiet activities such as reading and watching TV shows, while I like outdoor activities and fun adventures.

Verb tense and form: 'enjoyed' suggests past; the context implies habitual present so use 'enjoy'. 'readings' should be 'reading' (uncountable activity). 'Watch the Visions show' is ungrammatical and needs gerund 'watching' and natural phrase 'TV shows' or the specific show title. 'I do like' is acceptable but simpler 'I like' is natural. 'fun adventure' should be plural 'fun adventures' or 'adventurous activities'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habits, gerunds for activities, correct noun forms, and consistent plurality.