爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 문장 구조를 명확히 하고 불필요한 음성적 충동(uh, um)을 줄이세요. 토픽 문장으로 직접 답한 뒤 이유와 구체적 예시(어떤 책을 좋아하는지, 얼마나 자주 읽는지)를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이십시오. 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용하여 논리적으로 이어가세요.

示例: Yes, I enjoy reading. I usually read fiction novels because they help me relax after work. For example, I often read mystery novels about once a week, which I find very engaging.

建议: 현재/과거 시제를 정확히 사용하고 어순을 정리하세요. ‘easy to learn and easy to ride with friends’처럼 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸고, 구체적 상황(어디서, 누구와 얼마나 자주)을 추가하면 더 좋습니다.

示例: Yes, when I was a child I loved riding my bike. It was easy to learn and I often rode it with my friends around the neighborhood on weekends.

建议: 핵심 정보를 명확히 전달하세요. ‘baking’이라는 단어를 정확히 쓰고 문장을 간결하게 구성하세요. 취미가 직업처럼 느껴진다고 말하려면 이유를 구체적으로 설명하고, 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 사용해 논리를 전개하세요.

示例: Yes, I've been baking since I was a child. Baking is more than a hobby to me because I enjoy creating desserts and sometimes sell them to friends or at local markets.

建议: 문법(주어+동사)과 어순을 바로잡고, ‘different’의 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 예: 어떤 취미를 가족이 갖고 있는지, 자신과 어떻게 다른지. 연결어(for example, because)를 사용하세요.

示例: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. For example, my sister likes painting while I prefer reading, so we rarely share the same free-time activities.

× Oh yes, I'm, uh, definitely like doing reading something, uh, because this is make me feels calm and interesting about that.

✓ Oh yes, I definitely like reading because it makes me feel calm and interested in it.

Student used 'like doing reading something' which mixes 'doing' with the gerund incorrectly and is redundant. Correct structure is 'like' + gerund (reading). 'This is make me feels' has subject-verb and form errors: use 'it makes me' (simple present) and 'feel' not 'feels' after 'me'. Use 'interested in it' instead of 'interesting about that'. Suggestion: use 'I like' + verb-ing, ensure subject-verb agreement ('it makes'), and use correct adjective form ('interested') for feelings.

× When I was a child, I really like to ride a bike because it's easy to learn and easy to assess with the friends.

✓ When I was a child, I really liked riding a bike because it was easy to learn and easy to ride with friends.

The sentence refers to past time ('When I was a child') so verbs should be in past tense: 'liked' instead of 'like'. 'To ride a bike' can be changed to gerund 'riding' for fluency. 'It's' should be past 'it was'. 'Easy to assess with the friends' is incorrect; likely intended 'easy to ride with friends'. Suggestion: match tense to time expressions and choose correct verbs/phrases ('ride with friends').

× So I that's why I like to ride a bike.

✓ So that's why I liked riding a bike.

The phrase 'So I that's why' is ungrammatical; remove the extra pronoun 'I'. Also align tense with previous past context: 'liked' and 'riding' fit better. Suggestion: use 'So that's why' + past verb when describing childhood reasons.

× Yes, I did uh, that's as the uh, the bakings, uh, it's not just a hobby, it's uh a shows away with like more than my job, but I really like to enjoying about this.

✓ Yes, I have. It's baking; it's not just a hobby, it shows who I am more than my job does, and I really enjoy it.

Multiple errors: 'I did' is odd for present possession — use 'I have' for 'a hobby you've had since childhood'. 'the bakings' should be 'baking' (gerund). 'I really like to enjoying about this' mixes 'like to' with '-ing' and wrong preposition; use 'I really enjoy it'. 'a shows away with like more than my job' is ungrammatical; intended meaning likely 'it shows who I am more than my job does'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms ('have', 'baking', 'enjoy'), avoid redundant fillers, and structure comparative clause clearly.

× Actually not I'm the unique person like umm and my sister, uh, for example, my sister and me, it's totally different.

✓ Actually no, I'm unique, and my sister and I have totally different hobbies.

'Actually not I'm the unique person' is ungrammatical and misuses 'not' and article 'the'. Use 'no' and 'unique' without 'the' here. 'my sister and me, it's totally different' misuses object pronoun 'me' and 'it' as subject; use 'my sister and I have' and 'hobbies' as plural to match. Suggestion: use correct subject pronouns ('I' not 'me') and pluralize nouns when comparing groups.

× So I'm not that much similar hobbies.

✓ So my hobbies are not that similar.

Word order and comparison are incorrect: 'not that much similar hobbies' is ungrammatical. Use 'my hobbies are not that similar' or 'we don't have very similar hobbies'. Suggestion: place adjectives/adverbs correctly and choose proper structures for similarity (e.g., 'not very similar' or 'quite different').