爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation and repetition, use plural nouns and articles correctly, and add one specific detail to enrich the answer. Keep to 2–4 sentences. Use linking words if you add details.

示例: I enjoy several hobbies in my free time. For example, I often watch movies to relax, go cycling three times a week to stay fit, and explore new neighbourhoods on foot at weekends to discover cafés and parks.

建议: Correct tense and phrasing, be specific about what you read and what you felt. Use one linking word to connect idea and avoid vague expressions like "emotional feeling." Keep answer to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes. As a child I enjoyed reading comic books, especially adventure stories, and drawing characters with pencil and watercolour. Doing this helped me relax and express my emotions after a busy school day.

建议: Make the sentence structure smoother and correct grammar: use simple past for past activity and present perfect or simple present for continuing habits. Remove filler words and give a brief contrast between past and present using a linking word like "now" or "but".

示例: Yes. I have drawn since childhood: I used to draw by hand with pencils and watercolours, but now I mainly create art digitally on a tablet.

建议: Make the answer more natural and concise: use one clear topic sentence, correct collocations ("share hobbies"), and give a short specific example of how you watch together. Avoid hesitations and redundancy.

示例: Yes, we share several hobbies, especially watching football. For instance, whenever there is an important match we gather in the living room to watch it together and discuss the game afterwards.

× I love watching movie, I love riding a bike and I love walking to some new places.

✓ I love watching movies, I love riding a bike, and I love walking to new places.

'Movie' should be plural as a general hobby: use 'movies'. Add a comma before 'and' for clarity. 'Some' is unnecessary before 'new places' and can be omitted for natural phrasing.

× when I was a child I really enjoy reading comics and drawing the figures with pencil and watercolor.

✓ When I was a child I really enjoyed reading comics and drawing figures with a pencil and watercolor.

The clause 'when I was a child' sets a past time frame, so the verbs should be in the past tense: 'enjoy' -> 'enjoyed'. Use 'drawing figures' (no 'the') and include articles 'a' before 'pencil'.

× I believe that can release my emotional feeling.

✓ I believe that it could release my emotional tension.

The original lacks a subject after 'that'; add 'it'. 'Emotional feeling' is awkward—use 'emotional tension' or 'feelings'. 'Could' fits as a modal to express potential effect; maintain past context if needed.

× I have a consistent hobby that lasts long lasting until today, which is uh. Drawing digitally nowadays, but back then I draw manually through.

✓ I have a hobby that has lasted until today: drawing digitally nowadays, but back then I drew manually.

The phrase 'lasts long lasting' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'has lasted'. Replace the period after 'uh' with a colon or comma. 'Draw' should be past 'drew' to match 'back then'. Remove 'through' which is unnecessary.

× Yes, I have a lot of similarities in hobbies, which is I share with my family members.

✓ Yes, I share many hobbies with my family members.

The original sentence is wordy and uses 'similarities in hobbies' awkwardly. Use active voice 'I share many hobbies with my family members' for clarity; 'many' is a better quantifier than 'a lot of similarities'.

× so when there is a match, we will watch together.

✓ So when there is a match, we watch together.

Using 'will' is unnecessary for habitual actions. Use present simple 'watch' to indicate regular behavior. The clause 'there is a match' is acceptable.