爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy (e.g., “perform” → “do”).

示例: I have a few hobbies that I enjoy in my free time. For example, I like reading contemporary novels to learn new ideas, and I often watch films—especially comedies—because they help me unwind after a busy day.

建议: Be direct and correct verb forms. Begin with a clear topic sentence about childhood hobbies, then give a specific example with correct grammar and a linking phrase. Avoid vague phrases like “lucky child” unless explained.

示例: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. For example, I often went cycling with my friends after school, and we enjoyed exploring nearby parks because we were energetic and liked being outdoors.

建议: Answer more directly with a simple topic sentence (Yes/No) and clear reasons. Avoid long unclear questions back to the examiner. Provide one or two specific reasons for the change (e.g., lifestyle, moving city) and give an example of a current relaxing hobby.

示例: No, I don’t. My childhood hobbies were mostly active, but after moving to a busier city I started quieter pastimes. For instance, I now prefer reading and watching films to relax because my current lifestyle is more stressful.

建议: Improve cohesion by using linking words and correct small errors (plural/singular, articles). Start with a clear topic sentence, then list family members with brief reasons or specifics to make the answer richer.

示例: No, our hobbies are quite different. For example, I enjoy reading novels, my father spends time gardening and growing vegetables, my younger sibling likes video games, and my mother enjoys experimenting with new recipes in the kitchen.

× I enjoy reading books and watch movies because it helps me to unwind and relax.

✓ I enjoy reading books and watching movies because they help me to unwind and relax.

Parallel structure requires matching verb forms after 'enjoy'; use 'reading' and 'watching' (both -ing). Also 'books and movies' is plural, so use 'they help' instead of 'it helps'. Suggestion: maintain parallel gerunds and ensure subject-verb agreement with plural subjects.

× Yes, I was a lucky child when I was younger and I used to spend time with my friends a lot.

✓ Yes, I was a lucky child when I was younger and I used to spend a lot of time with my friends.

Word order and phrase placement: 'a lot' typically follows the verb phrase or 'spend a lot of time'. The tense 'used to spend' is correct. Suggestion: place 'a lot of time' after 'spend' for natural English.

× We would going outside to cycle because we were also active and we wanted to keep our energy.

✓ We would go outside to cycle because we were active and wanted to keep our energy up.

After 'would' use base verb form ('go'), not '-ing'. Also omit redundant 'also' and adjust phrase 'keep our energy' to natural collocation 'keep our energy up'. Suggestion: use 'would' + base verb for habitual past actions and choose natural collocations.

× No, unfortunately and the hobby is that I have currently and the ones that I used to have during my childhood time are totally different.

✓ No, unfortunately the hobbies I have now are completely different from the ones I had during my childhood.

Original is ungrammatical and wordy. Streamline by using parallel noun phrases: 'the hobbies I have now' and 'the ones I had during my childhood'. Use 'completely different from' for comparison. Suggestion: simplify sentence structure and avoid unnecessary connectors like 'and' that break flow.

× Do you see the change of my lifestyle and even the city that I live?

✓ Do you see the change in my lifestyle and even the city I live in?

Use the preposition 'in' with 'change' ('change in my lifestyle'). For 'live', the correct pattern is 'the city I live in' (ending preposition acceptable in spoken English). Suggestion: use correct prepositions and natural word order.

× So right now I am more doing things relaxing.

✓ So right now I am doing more relaxing things.

Adverb placement: 'more' should modify 'relaxing things' not 'doing'. Better phrasing is 'doing more relaxing things'. Suggestion: place modifiers before the noun they modify and use natural adjective-noun order.

× No surprisingly, we all have different types of hobbies that we spend our spare time.

✓ No, surprisingly, we all have different types of hobbies that we spend our spare time on.

Missing preposition 'on' after 'spend our spare time'. Also need commas around 'surprisingly' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct verb-preposition collocations: 'spend time on something'.

× For example, I prefer reading book whilst my father prefers gardening and my younger sibling prefers playing games and my mom enjoys cooking.

✓ For example, I prefer reading books, whilst my father prefers gardening, my younger sibling prefers playing games, and my mom enjoys cooking.

Use plural 'books' instead of singular 'book' after 'reading'. Add commas for clarity and include conjunction 'and' before the last item in the list. Suggestion: ensure correct singular/plural forms after verbs and punctuate lists correctly.