爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 発音や流暢さの問題に気をつけ、冗長な表現を減らして簡潔に述べる練習をしてください。具体的には「a plenty of」は不自然なので「plenty of」や「many」を使い、文を2〜3文に分けて主題文→補足（頻度や理由）という構成にします。接続詞（for example, and, so）を適切に使い、語彙は「enjoy」を繰り返さないように別語（like, enjoy doing, be fond of）を使い分けましょう。

示例: I have several hobbies. For example, I usually play badminton with friends on weekends, and I also like cooking and baking every day to relax.

建议: フィラー（umm, uh）を減らし、文法と語順を整えて短い2文で答える練習をしてください。「playing a catch」は不自然なので「playing catch」または「throwing a ball」を使い、過去形で統一（enjoyed, played）しましょう。具体的な活動の頻度や思い出を一つ添えると良いです。

示例: When I was a child, I loved playing catch with my brother. We played almost every afternoon in the park, and I remember how fun it felt to be outdoors.

建议: 言い直しやフィラーを減らし、現在完了形の使い方を正しくして簡潔に述べてください。「I've continued since I was a child」は不自然なので「I've been baking since I was a child」が適切です。具体例（どんな種類をよく作るか、どのくらいの頻度で作るか）を添えると良いでしょう。

示例: Yes. I've been baking since I was a child. I especially enjoy making scones and try to bake them at least once a week.

建议: 文法の冗長さと語順の誤りを修正し、文を明確に2文でまとめてください。「share my our interest」は誤りなので「share an interest」や「share the same interest」を使い、時制や表現（"I have loved gardening since I was a child"）を整えます。特に具体的な例（どんな植物を育てているか）を一つ示すと効果的です。

示例: Yes. My mother and I share the same interest in gardening. I have loved growing roses since I was a child, and she grows them too.

× Yes I have a plenty of hobbies, for example I usually enjoy badminton on weekends with my friends and also I enjoy cooking and baking on a daily basis to unwind so I really enjoy those kind of hobbies.

✓ Yes, I have plenty of hobbies. For example, I usually enjoy badminton on weekends with my friends, and I also enjoy cooking and baking on a daily basis to unwind, so I really enjoy those kinds of hobbies.

『a plenty』は不適切で、英語では可算・不可算に応じて 'a' を使い分けます。ここでは plenty は数量を表す語で単独で用いられるため 'a' を外して 'plenty of hobbies' または単に 'plenty of' を使います。また 'those kind' は複数形に合わせて 'those kinds' または本件では 'those kinds of hobbies' とする必要があります。文全体は長いので句読点で分けて明確にすると良いです。 Suggestions: remove the article before 'plenty', use 'those kinds of' for plural, and add commas/periods to separate ideas.

× When I was a child, I really enjoyed going outside and, umm, playing a catch. I often play playing catch with my, uh, brother and I remember that's just.

✓ When I was a child, I really enjoyed going outside and playing catch. I often played catch with my brother, and I remember that fondly.

話が過去の出来事についてなので動詞は過去形に統一する必要があります。'playing a catch' は不自然で正しくは 'playing catch' または 'playing a game of catch'、現在形の 'I often play' は過去の文脈に合わせて 'I often played' にします。最後の 'I remember that's just.' は意味が不明瞭なので 'I remember that fondly.' など具体的な表現にすると良いです。 Suggestions: use past tense verbs consistently, remove unnecessary 'a' in 'playing catch', and clarify the final clause.

× Well, as I told you, baking is one of my, uh, hobbies. I've continued since, uh, I was a child. I especially, I love to bake scones and.

✓ Well, as I told you, baking is one of my hobbies. I have continued baking since I was a child. I especially love to bake scones.

『I've continued since I was a child』は不完全で目的語が抜けているため 'I have continued baking since I was a child' のように動作対象を明示する必要があります。また最後の文が未完 ('and.') なので完結させて 'I especially love to bake scones.' とします。現在完了は過去から現在まで続いていることを表すので 'since' と一緒に使うのは適切です。 Suggestions: include the verb's object after 'continued' and finish incomplete sentences.

× Well, yes I do. My mother and I share my our interest in gardening. I really love gardening since when I was a child, especially uh, growing roses and my mother's do are the same.

✓ Well, yes I do. My mother and I share our interest in gardening. I have loved gardening since I was a child, especially growing roses, and my mother's interests are the same.

『my our』は誤った重複で、正しくは所有を共有する場合 'our' を使います。『I really love gardening since when I was a child』は時制と語順が不自然で、過去から現在までの継続を表すには現在完了を用い 'I have loved gardening since I was a child' とします。最後の 'my mother's do are the same' は文法的に誤りで、'my mother's interests are the same' のように名詞を明確にする必要があります。 Suggestions: use correct possessive pronoun 'our', use present perfect with 'since', and replace unclear fragments with clear nouns like 'interests'.