爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, correct grammar, and use clear vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and incorrect verb forms (e.g., say “I used to play basketball and badminton” and “I don’t have time to participate”).

示例: I used to play basketball and badminton, but I don’t have time for them at the moment because of my heavy workload. However, I hope to return to these sports next year when my schedule is less busy.

建议: Give a clear, direct response and organize details logically. Use correct noun forms and tenses (e.g., “I had several hobbies” and “my parents taught me to swim”). Use linking words (for example, “because” or “as a result”) and state whether swimming became a favorite or not with a reason.

示例: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. For example, my parents taught me to swim when I was young, so I learned to enjoy swimming; however, it did not become my favourite because I preferred playing games instead.

建议: Answer directly and use clearer phrasing. Replace filler words and informal labels like “generation C” with a brief explanation. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about which hobbies continued from childhood.

示例: Yes. I have continued to enjoy swimming and digital games since childhood because I grew up with computers and consoles around me, so playing video games became a long-term hobby.

建议: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (“Yes, one of my brothers shares my hobbies”) and give one or two specific examples. Use correct verbs and word order (e.g., “he loves tennis and is also good at swimming”), and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes, my youngest brother shares several of my hobbies. For example, he loves tennis and is also good at swimming, so we often go out together to play sports.

× But due to my workload right now, I feel that I don't have time to participating in this hobby anymore.

✓ But due to my workload right now, I feel that I don't have time to participate in this hobby anymore.

The verb after 'have time to' should be the base form (infinitive without to) or with to+base; here 'to participate' is required. Using 'participating' is incorrect because the structure 'have time to' is followed by the base verb. Use 'to participate' to correct the form.

× But I hope in the future I would play.

✓ But I hope in the future I will play.

In English, expressing a future hope commonly uses 'will' rather than 'would'. 'Would' is the past form of 'will' or used for conditional statements. Use 'I will play' to express future intention or hope.

× Yes, I had several hobby, whatever style at a time when I was a child, my parents taught me how to swim, so it fostered my hobby from that, uh, from that on.

✓ Yes, I had several hobbies at different times when I was a child. My parents taught me how to swim, so it fostered my interest from then on.

The noun 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' when preceded by 'several'. 'Whatever style at a time' is unclear and ungrammatical; replace with 'at different times'. 'Hobby' later is better expressed as 'interest'. Use 'from then on' instead of 'from that on' for natural phrasing.

× So it didn't become my most favorite hobby when I was young.

✓ So it didn't become my favorite hobby when I was young.

'Most favorite' is redundant; 'favorite' already expresses the superlative. Also the past tense 'didn't become' is correct; simplify to 'my favorite hobby' for natural English.

× Yes, I had like several hobbies, especially swimming and playing games because umm, I'm a generation C, so games, the digital game always surrounding me.

✓ Yes, I had several hobbies, especially swimming and playing games, because I'm from generation C, and digital games were always around me.

Remove filler 'like'. 'I'm a generation C' is awkward; use 'I'm from generation C' to indicate membership. If referring to childhood, 'were always around me' fits past context. Also 'the digital game' should be 'digital games' plural.

× So yeah, I have that hobby in my childhood.

✓ So yeah, I had that hobby during my childhood.

The sentence refers to the past ('childhood'), so use past tense 'had' and 'during my childhood' rather than present 'have' and 'in my childhood' for correct tense agreement.

× Umm Yup, one of my brothers, uh, he is the, the youngest brother.

✓ Umm, yes. One of my brothers is the youngest.

Remove the repeated 'the' and unnecessary second 'brother'. 'One of my brothers is the youngest' is concise and grammatically correct. Also 'Yup' better as 'yes' in formal speech.

× He had the same uh, hobbies like me.

✓ He had the same hobbies as me.

Use 'as' rather than 'like' to compare possession of the same hobbies in this structure: 'same hobbies as me'. Alternatively, 'hobbies like mine' is acceptable. Also keep past tense 'had' if talking about past.

× He loved beings like tennis and uh, he also good at swimming as well and we often go out together like for doing sport like this.

✓ He loved being active in sports like tennis, and he was also good at swimming. We often went out together to play sports.

Multiple issues: 'loved beings' is incorrect; use 'loved being active in sports' or 'loved sports like tennis'. 'He also good' needs the verb 'was'. 'We often go out together like for doing sport like this' is ungrammatical; use 'We often went out together to play sports'. Ensure past tense consistency if referring to past.