爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答要更自然、語法正確且精簡。首句直接回答，後面用一到兩句補充細節並用連接詞使句子通順。修正語法錯誤（例如動詞形式和從句），避免不必要的重複。可以提到具體的漫畫類型、喜歡的歌手或遊戲類型，並說明為何想學編程或如何學。

示例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy reading superhero and sci-fi comic books because they spark my imagination, and I often relax by listening to hip‑hop artists like Kendrick Lamar. I also play cooperative online games with friends on weekends. Recently, I started learning coding through online courses to improve my job skills.

建议: 表達已經很好，內容具體並使用了原因和感受。可稍微精簡並加入連接詞使語流更順暢，避免句子過長。可補充持續時間或具體成就來豐富內容。

示例: Yes, I used to go bouldering with my brother once a week, and we even had a coach who improved our technique. It was challenging but rewarding, and after each session I felt pleasantly exhausted. I did this for about three years and eventually managed to climb several routes without assistance.

建议: 注意避免冗長或語法重複（例如 'while' 和 'but' 不應同時出現）。先直接回答，再用一到兩句具體說明為何持續，並給出未來計劃或例子。

示例: Yes, listening to music has stayed with me since childhood. It relaxes me after a busy day, especially mellow hip‑hop or acoustic tracks, so I plan to keep it as a lifelong hobby and explore new artists regularly.

建议: 內容需要更清晰且語法正確。修正拼寫錯誤（例如 'everyday' 應為 'every day'，'Li' 應刪除），完成未完句子並使用連接詞。提供具體頻率和感受，避免否定句過多。

示例: Not really. My father goes jogging every day and has done so for over ten years to stay healthy. My mother and I are mostly sedentary because of busy work schedules, so we rarely run; I only manage to exercise occasionally on weekends, usually for an hour.

× Yes, I love to read comic books and listening to hip hop music when I have free time.

✓ Yes, I love reading comic books and listening to hip hop music when I have free time.

原句中 love 作动词，后接动名词（verb + -ing）而不是不定式或混用两种结构。两部分应保持并列结构一致，故改为 love reading 和 listening。建议：当主句动词为 like/love/hate/enjoy 等时，后接动词用动名词形式以保持一致性。

× If I would like to improve my work skills which is coding, I would also.

✓ If I wanted to improve my work skill, which is coding, I would also do that.

原句中条件句使用了不恰当的情态动词组合（If I would... I would...），英语中虚拟条件句第一从句不用 would，而用过去式（If I wanted...）。另外 ‘which is coding’ 应与名词一致且非限定性从句用逗号分隔；句尾缺少动词，需补完整。建议：虚拟与非真实条件句中，主句用 would + 动词，从句用过去式。

× My father has been jogging everyday for over 10 years because he wants to stay healthy, but my mother and I lead mostly sedentary Li lives due to our busy work schedules, so we rarely go for runs.

✓ My father has been jogging every day for over 10 years because he wants to stay healthy, but my mother and I lead mostly sedentary lives due to our busy work schedules, so we rarely go for runs.

原句中有两个小错误：1) everyday 是形容词，表示“日常的”，此处应使用副词短语 every day 表示“每天”；2) 出现多余大写字母 ‘Li’ 拼写错误，应为 lives。建议：区分 everyday（形容词）与 every day（副词短语），并检查大小写与拼写。

× Occasionally I try to work out at weekends, but it's not.

✓ Occasionally I try to work out at weekends, but I don't do it often.

原句 'but it's not.' 结构不完整，缺少明确的主语和动词，使句子不清楚。需要补全谓语以表达对比含义。建议：在对比句中保持完整句式，明确主语和动词，例如 'I don't do it often' 或 'I don't succeed'。

× While many of my hobbies have changed since I grew up, but listening to music is still one of my hobbies and it still makes me feel relaxed whenever I do it.

✓ Although many of my hobbies have changed since I grew up, listening to music is still one of my hobbies and it still makes me feel relaxed whenever I do it.

原句中同时使用了从属连词 while 和并列连词 but，造成双重连词冗余（重复连接词），引起句子结构问题。应使用其中之一以使句子通顺。建议：从属句首用 although/while 时不加 but；若使用 but 可把前半句改为独立句。