爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì, danh từ/đại từ), tránh lỗi từ vựng sai (ví dụ “board”, “Swiss shell”), rút gọn câu dài dư thừa để tự nhiên hơn, và dùng liên từ phù hợp để liên kết ý. Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tiếp theo cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (nơi, tần suất, cảm giác) và kết thúc bằng lý do ngắn gọn.

示例: Yes. My main hobby is playing basketball. I usually play with friends at the local park two or three times a week, and I text them beforehand to arrange a time. I enjoy it because it keeps me fit and I like the team strategy involved.

建议: Cần dùng thì phù hợp (past simple/used to) và dùng đại từ/adj đúng (“its” chứ không phải “his”), tránh nói lặp ý, và nêu lý do cụ thể hơn. Sử dụng liên từ để chuyển ý từ quá khứ sang hiện tại (e.g., "however", "but now").

示例: When I was a child, I used to enjoy cycling a lot. However, I cycle less now because I ride a motorcycle to get to school. These days I prefer basketball because it is more physically challenging and involves team tactics.

建议: Cần câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng với cấu trúc: khẳng định + chi tiết cụ thể (thời điểm, tần suất, món đồ liên quan). Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (possession: "my bike", tense consistency) và tránh từ dư thừa như “really own fascinating”.

示例: Yes. I have kept cycling since childhood. I still cycle to school and work sometimes, and I ride a bike my dad gave me for my fifteenth birthday, which I really enjoy using.

建议: Cần trình bày rõ ràng: khẳng định, so sánh ngắn giữa sở thích, và lý do tại sao khác nhau. Sửa ngữ pháp (possessive: "my parents' hobbies"), tránh lặp từ ("just the books"). Dùng linking words như "while" hoặc "whereas" để đối chiếu.

示例: No, we don't. My hobby is playing basketball, whereas my parents prefer reading books. I enjoy active, physical activities, while they mostly like quiet indoor pastimes like reading.

× Absolutely yes.

✓ Absolutely.

'Absolutely yes' is unnatural; use 'Absolutely' or 'Yes' alone. This improves natural sentence structure and fluency.

× My hobby is playing basketball so I usually playing basketball at my local park and playing with my friends.

✓ My hobby is playing basketball, so I usually play basketball at my local park and play with my friends.

Use the base form 'play' after adverb 'usually'. The original mixes 'is playing' with 'usually playing' incorrectly. Maintain parallel verb forms: 'usually play' and 'play'.

× I usually text them first before going to the court.

✓ I usually text them first before going to the court.

This sentence is correct; no grammatical change needed. 'Text' is correctly used in simple present for habitual action.

× I really enjoy playing this board not only because of his like physical but also I love the style of the Swiss shell.

✓ I really enjoy playing basketball not only because of the physical exercise, but also because I like the style of the Swiss shoes.

Original contains wrong nouns and pronouns ('this board', 'his like physical', 'Swiss shell') and unclear meaning. Replace with coherent nouns and a parallel structure: 'not only... but also...' Use 'because' before both reasons for clarity.

× In my childhood I used to like cycling, but over time I don't really enjoy cycling anymore 'cause I have a motorcycle to commute to schools or anywhere.

✓ In my childhood I used to like cycling, but over time I didn't really enjoy cycling anymore because I got a motorcycle to commute to school and elsewhere.

Tense shift: describe past change with past forms ('didn't enjoy', 'got'). Use 'to school' (singular) or 'elsewhere' instead of 'anywhere'. Avoid mixing present 'don't' with past 'used to'.

× But now I really enjoy playing basketball because of his physical and also strategies.

✓ But now I really enjoy playing basketball because of its physical aspect and the strategic elements.

Use correct possessive pronoun 'its' to refer to basketball. 'His' is incorrect for objects/sports. Improve noun phrases: 'physical aspect' and 'strategic elements' for clarity.

× Yes, absolutely.

✓ Yes, absolutely.

This short reply is grammatically fine in context; no change needed.

× I used to like cycling and like right now I'm still cycling to schools or work and I have my really own fascinating bike that my dad has bought me in my 15th birthday and I really like enjoy.

✓ I used to like cycling, and right now I still cycle to school or work. I have my own bike that my dad bought me for my 15th birthday, and I really enjoy it.

Fix tense and verb forms: 'still cycle' (habit), 'bought' past simple, 'for my 15th birthday' is the correct prepositional phrase. Remove redundant words ('really own', 'like enjoy') and use 'enjoy it' to refer to the bike.

× Absolutely not, my hobby is playing basketball and my parents hobbies are just reading books so we are not sharing the same hobbies because I would like to do physical hobbies, not just like staying in the house and reading just the books.

✓ Absolutely not. My hobby is playing basketball, while my parents' hobby is reading books, so we don't share the same interests because I prefer physical activities rather than staying at home and just reading.

Fix punctuation and sentence boundaries. Use possessive 'parents'' and singular 'hobby' if both do reading; use parallel structure 'prefer physical activities rather than...' Remove redundant 'just' and make sentence concise and grammatically correct.